Comment from butterfly4265

Excellent

Sounds like Dave is a very special man, and we should all feel so blessed to have someone like him in our lives! I really liked the line "your arms are my home", which reflects how loved and comfortable you feel when he holds you. Very romantic and much enjoyed. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

Hi there;
thank you so much for the lovely review of my special poem for my hubby. He is indeed a man to be treasured,

~patty~

Comment from *Radhika*

Good

A very sweet and loving Katauta. "Feeling your weight on the bed
Tells me I've nothing to dread" ...very true lines. The emotional support of a loved one gives you courage to face all trials and tribulations in life.

A small grammatical mistake in line three. You might want to write 'I know 'the' truth'. But I guess due to the syllable restriction, you missed it out.

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 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

Hi there;
thank you so much for your time to read and review. The syllable count is very important and articles are often left by the wayside,

~patty~

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Finding a partner who is true, is a Blessing. It is a plus factor in life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Good Job.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

Hi Charlie;
I am indeed VERY lucky to have Dave in my life. He is a great husband, and wonderful best friend,

~patty~

Comment from JessicaLee12

Excellent

What a sweet poem, so beautiful and the freestyle vibe is perfect for the shortness of this writing. Thank you for sharing the intimate closeness and allowing the reader the emotion.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

Hi there;
thank you so much for the lovely review of this piece. I am indeed blessed to have someone so special in my life,

~patty~

Comment from Bucketlist

Excellent

How lucky you both are. I'm happy your rough start turned 'the frog into the prince' LOL, a charming sedoka to be sure........what store did you find him in !!!!!
Good luck in the contest
Hugs Trisha

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017

Hi Trisha;
Dave didn't come from a store. I believe our guardian angels got us together. We both came into each other's lives at the exact right time.

We've just been able to grow into the people we are by sticking with it, no matter what. There have been hard times to be sure, but we are now enjoying the peace that comes with time and growing together,

~patty~

reply by Bucketlist on 10-Sep-2017

I was kidding! That is so nice when people find each other at the right time and love grows through growth.

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Good morning again, Patty:

This Japanese Katauta poem is as lovely as most of the Japanese culture and tradition.

The words you have chosen to describe you contentment and comfort with your mate are remarkable. It is a wonderful love poem.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017

Hi Tier;
thank you so much for the wonderful review of this poem for Dave. He fills my day with so many good things, I simply had to give him another poem. He is out of town this week, and I sorely miss the little things he does for me.

He usually sets up the coffee pot before he goes to bed so all I need to do is push the button to make the first morning brew. I'm having to make my own coffee now, and it just doesn't taste the same,

~patty~

reply by Asem.inspirations on 10-Sep-2017

You are so lucky and I am so happy for you. You are so deserving.

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

Sigh. That's a lovely sounding stanza:
Your arms are my home
Feeling your weight on the bed
Tells me I've nothing to dread
It conjures up such peace, trust and strength.
Love is a powerful thing. Lucky Dave.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017

Hi Nicole;
thank you so much for the lovely review of this poem. I felt Dave simply deserved another poem. I'm truly blessed and I count my blessings each time someone writes something about a difficult relationship,

~patty~

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

The comfort you feel when your loved one is near is something I learned to live without and you brought back those memories to me in your wonderful poem, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi Dolly;
thank you so much for reading. I hope the comfort and feelings the piece brought back for you are pleasant ones,

~patty~

Comment from bluedragon776

Excellent

Hey Patty,
It is so great to have you back. I liked this poem as well as the whole "love will give you strength" theme. Thanks for sharing and again, it's good to have you back.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi Blue;
thank you so much for the 'welcome back.' I am glad you enjoyed this work,

~patty~

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired your love poem in the Katauta form. (Is it permitted to include rhyme as you did in the second stanza?) I liked your choice of red text for emphasis. I'm sure Dave will be pleased! Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi Joan;
thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I don't know if rhyming is necessarily 'banned' from these forms, but I just felt like those words fit,

~patty~