Another Day
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Comment from PoemsOfDD
Eve Bailey, I really like the words you have chosen for this Lune entry. It would be very fitting for a haiku poem. Just a mention on the requirements for the competition: A Lune has 5 syllables in the first line, 3 syllables in the second line and 5 syllable in the final line. Your poem is short of syllables you may want to adjust.
ice cracks in a pond (5)
the sun rises (4)
it's almost dawn (4)
I really enjoyed reading this piece and love the picture chosen to represent the calming words. Best of luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Eve Bailey, I really like the words you have chosen for this Lune entry. It would be very fitting for a haiku poem. Just a mention on the requirements for the competition: A Lune has 5 syllables in the first line, 3 syllables in the second line and 5 syllable in the final line. Your poem is short of syllables you may want to adjust.
ice cracks in a pond (5)
the sun rises (4)
it's almost dawn (4)
I really enjoyed reading this piece and love the picture chosen to represent the calming words. Best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Thanks for the review. I will try to correct. I considered the last line 5 because I thought of It's as two works.
Comment from Possummagic
I liked your Lune Poem titled "another day
"Ice cracks in a pond
The sun rises
It's almost dawn"
It has a nice flow to it and complies with the criteria for Lune poems. Well done and I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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I liked your Lune Poem titled "another day
"Ice cracks in a pond
The sun rises
It's almost dawn"
It has a nice flow to it and complies with the criteria for Lune poems. Well done and I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for the excellent review.
