Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Great story about little Melinda, a little girl with a difference, but one who wished she was like everyone else. Good little twist at the end, and well told Maria,
cheers

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017

Thanks for reading.

Comment from Walu Feral

Exceptional

G'day Maria.

"Melinda always thought people should be allowed to choose their families." (I wish I could have chosen the one I was born into.)

Wow, what a story. Beautifully written with a twist. The poor little thing just wanted to be like everyone else.

Very clever and interesting work, my friend.

Well done.

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017

Thanks for your review and for the shining stars. You're very kind, Fez.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Maria Jose. Wow, that was a bit of a story this one with a surprise twist. Yeah, grass is always greener next door, isn't it? Very well thought out and well written. I really liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017

Thanks for your review, Ulla. See you soon.

reply by Ulla on 06-Sep-2017

We'll do!

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Ah, poor Melinda,

The grass is always greener on the other side of the moon, doesn't she know this? Well told piece with the elements eking out gradually. Well paced.

G

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017

Thanks, Gareth.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

LOL! Well sometimes people do wish they could have chosen their family. Love them or not, we're stuck with each other. A well written story that I enjoyed reading. Marilyn

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017

Thanks, Marilyn.

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Hey Maria, This is a sad story of a very lonely child. I was thinking as I read it, 'What if this was a true story?' It could be that the parents just have always been loners and have always and have always isolated themselves. They feel that this is bezt foe their child too. This does happen somewhere in the world but I get what you wanted us to get from this story. It is a very creative idea.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017

Thanks, Tier.

Comment from MelB

Excellent

A very interesting story, Maria. I remember being a child and thinking I would like to live in different families too. We always seem to want what we don't have.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017

Thanks for reading, Melissa.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is an interesting story and ends with a somewhat unexpected twist. You are very good at this kind of writing and your creativity show through these writings. Patricia

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017

Thanks for reading, Patricia.

Comment from Stacia Ann

Excellent

Hi, Maria! Thanks for posting this.
I liked the title right off--there is something evocative about the woman's name "Melinda"; it's old-fashioned, somewhat exotic/mysterious.
The story was funny, horrific, and sad at the same time--the weirdness of Melinda's family, the details, her growing realization, combine all of those elements of humor/grief/horror. I'm not sure which genre it fits most.
Consideration for revision:
'Oh, how I wish I could live here!' she used to think.
Thoughts are not put into quotation marks; only spoken dialogue is. You may italicize thoughts, however.
Thanks again for sharing this.
Stacia

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017

Thanks for your kind review.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

AAAAhhhh very nicely done and the twist reminds us that the grass is not always greener, just maybe longer...or shorter. Great moral lesson

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017

Thanks for your review, Barb.