This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The First Lesson For Joe"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from Ulla
Oh, Sandra, again a wonderful chapter to your book. As you know I'm fascinated with subject of time travelling. But this time it's a bit different. Somebody is making the rules. We have to see if the chocolate theory will work out. Hugs from Spain. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Oh, Sandra, again a wonderful chapter to your book. As you know I'm fascinated with subject of time travelling. But this time it's a bit different. Somebody is making the rules. We have to see if the chocolate theory will work out. Hugs from Spain. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Bless your heart, Ulla. Thank you so much for all these stars! And big hugs for your lovely review. I so appreciate your kind words. Lots of love. Sandra xx
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Mildred's showing a three-year old the chocolate recipe.... It reminds me of the little lad next door; he's just turned 3 and he brought a container out to show me - had three little strangely shaped fairy cakes in there, and the mess on top of each had to be chocolate cream with mauve sprinkles over them - ha ha....
I'm glad he didn't want me to have one. Bless him.
A great chapter, Sandra - and so well presented. Margaret
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Mildred's showing a three-year old the chocolate recipe.... It reminds me of the little lad next door; he's just turned 3 and he brought a container out to show me - had three little strangely shaped fairy cakes in there, and the mess on top of each had to be chocolate cream with mauve sprinkles over them - ha ha....
I'm glad he didn't want me to have one. Bless him.
A great chapter, Sandra - and so well presented. Margaret
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Aww, bless him. Children are so proud of their creations, aren't they? You were let off lightly! LOL. Thank you, Margaret for your funny review I enjoyed it too. Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from alexisleech
Another great chapter, Sandra. My grandaughter is three, so I can well imagine how hard it is to gauge how much Michael/Joe is taking in. I wouldn't doubt, if they do it often enough, it will eventually sink in. Sounds like a fun thing to practice on!
It's good to see the 'powers that be' back in action as well. The way you describe them makes it easy for me to imagine them in my head - another example of your excellent writing!
Hugs from a cold and wet France,
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Another great chapter, Sandra. My grandaughter is three, so I can well imagine how hard it is to gauge how much Michael/Joe is taking in. I wouldn't doubt, if they do it often enough, it will eventually sink in. Sounds like a fun thing to practice on!
It's good to see the 'powers that be' back in action as well. The way you describe them makes it easy for me to imagine them in my head - another example of your excellent writing!
Hugs from a cold and wet France,
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Thank you so very much, Alexis, for your fabulous review and all those lovely stars!! I really appreciate your words, my friend. It's wet and windy and cold here too! :( xxx Sandra xx
Comment from royowen
I love tha fact that there are a special team that seem to be in charge of the historic time travel of Veronica and others. The fact that Mildred is showing a three year old a simple chocolate recipe, some people might think she's quite mad, but it's either that or condemn her three year old boy into being bodily occupied.. Great concept Sandra, good plot, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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I love tha fact that there are a special team that seem to be in charge of the historic time travel of Veronica and others. The fact that Mildred is showing a three year old a simple chocolate recipe, some people might think she's quite mad, but it's either that or condemn her three year old boy into being bodily occupied.. Great concept Sandra, good plot, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much, Roy, your lovely review means such a lot to me. You're a good friend. :) Sandra xxxx
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Most welcome Sandra,
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Sandra,
Another excellent chapter here. Let's hope Joe took the choc making in. Good not to go into too much detail.
Author's notes - he he...
I eased myself out the bed - out of bed or out of the bed?
I eased myself out the bed, my feet finding my slippers, and made my way to the bathroom. - I like the way this is described, smooth like one fluid action.
I'm at my wits end - I think it's wit's end.
I put the kettle on, once we'd cleared the table, and set cups - you have a different font size here.
Oh Lordy, Miss Veronica, you had me goin' there!"/ "Have yeh any suggestions - remember the consistencies in speech patterns.
don't go getting' yerself all upset- drop the 'g' from gettin'.
body still didn't sit well with me - maybe doesn't here rather than didn't.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Hi Sandra,
Another excellent chapter here. Let's hope Joe took the choc making in. Good not to go into too much detail.
Author's notes - he he...
I eased myself out the bed - out of bed or out of the bed?
I eased myself out the bed, my feet finding my slippers, and made my way to the bathroom. - I like the way this is described, smooth like one fluid action.
I'm at my wits end - I think it's wit's end.
I put the kettle on, once we'd cleared the table, and set cups - you have a different font size here.
Oh Lordy, Miss Veronica, you had me goin' there!"/ "Have yeh any suggestions - remember the consistencies in speech patterns.
don't go getting' yerself all upset- drop the 'g' from gettin'.
body still didn't sit well with me - maybe doesn't here rather than didn't.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Thank you so very much, G! I'm so grateful to you for taking up my request in my author's notes. I do appreciate the help, I know I'm not perfect by a long shot, and never will be. LOL, so I always take note of reviews like yours. It means a lot to me that you are interested enough to help. I've made all the corrections now. Thank you, and a big hug! :) Sandra xx
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
and a receipe too, neat!
Very well written and I still don't understand the reason for the committee and will she everymeet them?
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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and a receipe too, neat!
Very well written and I still don't understand the reason for the committee and will she everymeet them?
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Hi Barb, thank you so much for reading this part. I understand what you are saying and quite honestly, I hadn't thought about Veronica meeting them. I'm going to look through my notes and see whether I should add a part like that. Thank you for your input, my friend. :) Sandra x
Comment from rama devi
Another excellent and engaging chapter. Pulled me right in. I enjoy your story and characters, dear. Sorry I can't review all chapters but glad I stumbled onto this one today, when I had time for reviews...
NOTES
* "So, that aside(,) I think we should move forward a little with Daveth. Perhaps by two weeks?"
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My head was thumping when I woke the next morning(,) probably because I hadn't had much sleep.
*I heard him sigh deeply and knew he was suffering as much as I was, but being a doctor and having to keep control of his emotions in front of patients, or their family, he was now using it to keep his emotions in check for me.
But or a run on. Suggest making it two sentences (also note spag changes):
I heard him sigh deeply and knew he was suffering as much as I was. Being a doctor and having to keep control of his emotions in front of patients and their families, he was now using it to keep his emotions in check for me.
* She pulled out her s(S)wiss roll tin and lined it with grease-proof paper,
*"That should do it," she said, her face flushed with pleasure.
trim speech tag
"That should do it." Her face flushed with pleasure.
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I put the kettle on(,) once we'd cleared the table, and set cups and saucers out with a plate of biscuits.
I just love how you sculpt characterization through diction and speaking style for Mildred, especially here:
"Oh Lordy, Miss Veronica, you had me goin' there!" Mildred dramatically patted her chest as though she was about to have a heart attack. "Have yeh any suggestions ... other than crackin' his head?"
Lots of Love,
rd
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Another excellent and engaging chapter. Pulled me right in. I enjoy your story and characters, dear. Sorry I can't review all chapters but glad I stumbled onto this one today, when I had time for reviews...
NOTES
* "So, that aside(,) I think we should move forward a little with Daveth. Perhaps by two weeks?"
*
My head was thumping when I woke the next morning(,) probably because I hadn't had much sleep.
*I heard him sigh deeply and knew he was suffering as much as I was, but being a doctor and having to keep control of his emotions in front of patients, or their family, he was now using it to keep his emotions in check for me.
But or a run on. Suggest making it two sentences (also note spag changes):
I heard him sigh deeply and knew he was suffering as much as I was. Being a doctor and having to keep control of his emotions in front of patients and their families, he was now using it to keep his emotions in check for me.
* She pulled out her s(S)wiss roll tin and lined it with grease-proof paper,
*"That should do it," she said, her face flushed with pleasure.
trim speech tag
"That should do it." Her face flushed with pleasure.
*
I put the kettle on(,) once we'd cleared the table, and set cups and saucers out with a plate of biscuits.
I just love how you sculpt characterization through diction and speaking style for Mildred, especially here:
"Oh Lordy, Miss Veronica, you had me goin' there!" Mildred dramatically patted her chest as though she was about to have a heart attack. "Have yeh any suggestions ... other than crackin' his head?"
Lots of Love,
rd
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much, Rama, for another brilliantly helpful review. I really appreciate you spending time on my writing. I've made the corrections now. I'm really pleased you liked this part and dear Mildred. I have to admit, she is my favourite character. Big hugs my friend! :) Sandra xx
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She's glorious. Love her...and YOU
Hugs, rd
Comment from apky
Another well writen and very enjoyable piece here, Sandra. Veronica is getting deeper and deeper into her endeavours and pulling me right along with her.
Well done.
Once that was out (of) the way, he updated them on his findings.
In any rate, who knows what will happen in the next few days. ~ Sandra, unless you mean to convey that this persons speaks like this, "in any rate" isn't correct. It's "at any rate" last time I took notes in journalism, lol!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Another well writen and very enjoyable piece here, Sandra. Veronica is getting deeper and deeper into her endeavours and pulling me right along with her.
Well done.
Once that was out (of) the way, he updated them on his findings.
In any rate, who knows what will happen in the next few days. ~ Sandra, unless you mean to convey that this persons speaks like this, "in any rate" isn't correct. It's "at any rate" last time I took notes in journalism, lol!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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You're right, big mistake on my part, thank you so much for letting me know! I'm off to change it. Thank you for this lovely review, m friend. I really appreciated it. :) Sandra x
Comment from RGstar
I guess I might be biased with the first book which reached both heartstrings and senses. You write exquisitely. It will take me time to get into this for the simple reason my absence, and each chapter will present a scene within itself until the mind configures. Taking nothing away from the writing as I am not familiar with characters or real time plot. Yet. Wishing you luck with this sequel for the other was superb. I am going to support whenever I can, and hope to give the justice it is worth.
My best wishes.
RG
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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I guess I might be biased with the first book which reached both heartstrings and senses. You write exquisitely. It will take me time to get into this for the simple reason my absence, and each chapter will present a scene within itself until the mind configures. Taking nothing away from the writing as I am not familiar with characters or real time plot. Yet. Wishing you luck with this sequel for the other was superb. I am going to support whenever I can, and hope to give the justice it is worth.
My best wishes.
RG
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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That's so kind of you, RG, I really appreciate you reading this part. I know sometimes it's hard to keep up on here. I hope you are well, my friend. Big hugs. :) Sandra x
