Torchlight
5-7-5 Contest Entry28 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
What a lovely compliment. Did you consider the possibilities of that final line altered to read, "Isee only you"? Does it say the same thing, does it say what you intend any better or worse? Just a thought that occured.
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What a lovely compliment. Did you consider the possibilities of that final line altered to read, "Isee only you"? Does it say the same thing, does it say what you intend any better or worse? Just a thought that occured.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
Comment from Possummagic
I enjoyed your 5-7-5 poem about dazzling love. You have met the requirements of the contest. I wish you luck in the contest. "stars to dazzle countless eyes" PM
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I enjoyed your 5-7-5 poem about dazzling love. You have met the requirements of the contest. I wish you luck in the contest. "stars to dazzle countless eyes" PM
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Michael;
this is beautiful and breathtaking in its simplicity. I love how the last line sums up everything and the countless eyes are dismissed with the thought.
Well done. I wish you luck in the contest,
~patty~
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Hi Michael;
this is beautiful and breathtaking in its simplicity. I love how the last line sums up everything and the countless eyes are dismissed with the thought.
Well done. I wish you luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. When we are in love, nothing else makes an impact as the one we are in love with. That person is the only one we can see in a million other faces.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. When we are in love, nothing else makes an impact as the one we are in love with. That person is the only one we can see in a million other faces.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
Comment from DR DIP
beautiful suck up poem Michael would make a great anniversary card do you have a special loved one Michael you could put this in a card or make your own card it would work a treat. You might get lucky lol
dip
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beautiful suck up poem Michael would make a great anniversary card do you have a special loved one Michael you could put this in a card or make your own card it would work a treat. You might get lucky lol
dip
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
Comment from country ranch writer
Love this presenatatin I love the stars and I love to sit and watch the stars. We used to go to Ft Desoto fishing and sit and watch the stars and see the shooting stars.
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Love this presenatatin I love the stars and I love to sit and watch the stars. We used to go to Ft Desoto fishing and sit and watch the stars and see the shooting stars.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
Comment from rama devi
So sweet. Fine 5-7-5 love poem. good imagery, effectively voiced. Excellent artistic presentation that augments the delivery both visually and for auditory aspects too (using spacing for cadence effect). Superb medley of S sounds, assonant A and consonant D as well (like a base tone in four part harmony)
Good luck.
Warmly, rd
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So sweet. Fine 5-7-5 love poem. good imagery, effectively voiced. Excellent artistic presentation that augments the delivery both visually and for auditory aspects too (using spacing for cadence effect). Superb medley of S sounds, assonant A and consonant D as well (like a base tone in four part harmony)
Good luck.
Warmly, rd
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
AAAAhhhh someday I will find my wonderful knight that will read this to me.lol
Very well done for the contest, nice and gushy...I love gushy.
Count is perfect, content is too
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AAAAhhhh someday I will find my wonderful knight that will read this to me.lol
Very well done for the contest, nice and gushy...I love gushy.
Count is perfect, content is too
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
