Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

This is a lovely tanka and I suspect that your references to the weather mean more than just that.
I agree with what you say about the heat of summer. It also slows me down.
Good luck in the contest.
P.S. What's the seven star recognition I've seen on your profile page?

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Maria; thank you so much for the lovely review. The seven-star recognition on my profile is the award I received for 'Story of the Month' AND 'Winner of True Story.'

Thanks for reading,

~patty~

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is a lovely entry for this contest. Your well chosen words convey powerful imagery and reads so well when read aloud. Excellent entry and I sincerely wish you all the best.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Sasha;
thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

Hi, Patty. Your tanka poem looks like a great contest entry.
Bring down the beast--it's arrived indeed.
Impressive presentation.
Dynamic words.
Best wishes.
Nicole

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Nicole;
thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from Bichon

Excellent

Great short poem. I loved how it all flowed so nicely, especially the line: "Need refreshing breeze,". Good luck in the contest, I hope this will be a winner.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Chloe;
thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Nature controls the weather
Good or Bad
Man and the creatures
Must endure
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Charlie;
thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

reply by c_lucas on 31-Aug-2017

My pleasure, Patti. Charlie

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great metaphor for the creative act to a summer thunderstorm. As the heat and humidity and pressure builds, so do the ideas, thoughts in the brain seek release in the flood of rain/words.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi there;
thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed it,

~patty~

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

You are on fire my friend. This is simply splendid write. Full of passion and strength and great advice. Bring that thunder down my friend. Loved it. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Kiwi;
thank you so much for the lovely review.

~patty~

Comment from bsmath

Excellent

Your poem was very interesting. The picture of lightning is entertaining. I did not see the relationship of the fourth line "Wake up thoughts, ideas; the beast" to the rest of the poem. Is the sunshine so bright that it wakes him up? I enjoyed reading the poem.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for the review. Yes, the sunshine wakes up everything - including the beast. (He is my muse.)

~patty~

Comment from royowen

Excellent

An excellent entry in this tanka poetry contest Patty. It has a bonus satori line inbuilt to give it a bit of Oomph. The mind and body certainly need temperate weather to enable clear thought and revelation, although bad weather can be inspiring too! Well done, great post, good luck, blessings, Roy

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 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Roy;
thank you so much for the wonderful review of this piece. I'm glad you enjoyed it and felt the satori!

~patty~

reply by royowen on 31-Aug-2017

My pleasure Patty