Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

This is very good. Thunder and lightning are sometimes caused by summer heat. In Florida, it's called either heat lightning or sheet lightning. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017

Hi Thomas;
thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from Tadite

Excellent

The words are obviously well chosen and thought out, which shows. Very good use of punctuation (my favorite!), and different than other entries I have seen. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017

thank you so much for the lovely review and well wishes in the contest,

~patty~

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Wow you are steeling my attention as one of my favorite writers here on fanstory. I love the way you intertwine your words and bring on the 'big guns' so to speak. This is exceptional for the contest

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017

Hi Barb; thank you for such a wonderful compliment! There are so many wonderful writers on FanStory and it is nice to be up there with them.

I am glad you enjoyed this poem,

~patty~

Comment from bluedragon776

Excellent

I feel refreshed and energized just from reading this poem. Boy, I sure admire you for creating this sort of poem. Poetry is so difficult and requires a lot of mental energy, well I think so anyway. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017

Hi there;
thank you so much for reading and reviewing this short work that took a great deal of thought - I wanted to portray the strength of my muse when he finally shows up, and I think I hit the mark,

~patty~

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

Oh, amen to that! Bring down the thunder because we need rain here. This is a great tanka and I wish you all the best of luck in the competition. Giddy

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017

Hi Giddy;
rain, thunder and lightening are all used as symbols to portray the strength we need. However, the rain can be taken literally or figuratively,

~patty~

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Your tanka contest entry is very well written and I enjoyed reading. The is excellent and I'm sure this poem will show well but just in case I'll wish you the best of luck. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017

Hi Barbara;
thank you so much for reading this poem, and for finding is well written. I appreciate your well wishes in the contest, too.

~patty~

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Interesting write in a Tanka...the thinking poet's poetry. I love it when you have to interpret and decipher I love the image accompanying your write. which can be taken literally or metaphorically. Thanks for sharing. The mood is like the changing weather

dip

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Dip;
thank you so much for the wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed it and felt the puzzle,

~patty~

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written Tanka poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good wording and I love the art work you chose for this. Best wishes in the contest. Funny, but today it is pouring down rain from Hurricane and we had tornado warnings also. Appropriate day to read this! Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Teri;
thank you so much for the encouraging words,

~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend this is well written the syllable count is correct yes my friend in the summer we all seem to relax more even in our writing we need a storm to reinvigorate our muse so we can get re started once more well done good luck regards Jill

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Jill;
thank you so much for the lovely review. My muse really needed the thunder!

~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Tanka. The heat of the summer makes us wish forba thunderstorm just to break the heat for a while. Only He can bring the thunder for relief.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Sandra;
thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~