One True God
5-7-5 contest entry15 total reviews
Comment from Laine Carson
Wonderful, SO TRUE, lovely, inspiring. You stayed within the 5-7-5.I love Jesus so I love your poem. So I am voting for yours in this contest. God Bless!
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Wonderful, SO TRUE, lovely, inspiring. You stayed within the 5-7-5.I love Jesus so I love your poem. So I am voting for yours in this contest. God Bless!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the great review and lovely six stars!
Comment from AnnieDawn
Beautiful concept and very well written for a 5 - 7 - 5 poem. I just have one suggestion for it and it is just to suggest to make 'His' words stand out more. That would be to make the words 'The' and 'Truly', that begin the second and third lines, have all lower case letters in them. Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Beautiful concept and very well written for a 5 - 7 - 5 poem. I just have one suggestion for it and it is just to suggest to make 'His' words stand out more. That would be to make the words 'The' and 'Truly', that begin the second and third lines, have all lower case letters in them. Great job.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the great review and advice!
Comment from Poetic Friend
In its brevity, this poem speaks volumes relative to our Heavenly Father. There may be numerous of religion/faiths, but there is only one God. We praise him in different ways.
He is truly of our lives.
Perhaps "lives" may be a substitute for "life."
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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In its brevity, this poem speaks volumes relative to our Heavenly Father. There may be numerous of religion/faiths, but there is only one God. We praise him in different ways.
He is truly of our lives.
Perhaps "lives" may be a substitute for "life."
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the great review and advice!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Author,
So much said in so few words! *smile* I liked the content of your poem so much. The message is an important one and should be shouted from rooftops all the time.
I only have one small remark to add/suggest:
1.) Looking up to Him
The (A)uthor and (F)inisher
Truly of our life
Thanks and good luck in the voting!
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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Dear Mystery Author,
So much said in so few words! *smile* I liked the content of your poem so much. The message is an important one and should be shouted from rooftops all the time.
I only have one small remark to add/suggest:
1.) Looking up to Him
The (A)uthor and (F)inisher
Truly of our life
Thanks and good luck in the voting!
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Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thank you! Fixed.
Comment from tfawcus
The Creator both creates life and takes it from us. It seems that we are entirely in his power. The beginning and the end are inevitable. The interesting part is what lies between.
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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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The Creator both creates life and takes it from us. It seems that we are entirely in his power. The beginning and the end are inevitable. The interesting part is what lies between.
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Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thank you!
