The Motion of Water
3-5-3 contest entry5 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 3-5-3 about The Motion of Water, has the required syllable spacing and creates the powerful scene of the rapids bursting through the channel of land that is now a river, hewn by the mighty flood.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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This 3-5-3 about The Motion of Water, has the required syllable spacing and creates the powerful scene of the rapids bursting through the channel of land that is now a river, hewn by the mighty flood.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Dear Bill, Thank you for your comments and review. I placed 3rd in the contest. Dove
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a descriptive and motion-filled 3-5-3. Each line begins with a motion word. Beautifully illustrated. Simply stated but well composed and an enjoyable read. Much luck in the contest with this nice entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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This is a descriptive and motion-filled 3-5-3. Each line begins with a motion word. Beautifully illustrated. Simply stated but well composed and an enjoyable read. Much luck in the contest with this nice entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Dear Marilyn, Thank you for your comments and review.
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine poem and entry for the contest
with the correct syllables at 3-5-3
Excellent imagery of the racing mountain water
as it courses down the slope
Excellent picture to match
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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This is a fine poem and entry for the contest
with the correct syllables at 3-5-3
Excellent imagery of the racing mountain water
as it courses down the slope
Excellent picture to match
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Dear rspoet, Thank you for your comments and review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image.
-Syllable count is good.
-The imagery is effective
throughout the poem.
-The last line is like a satori.
-A good entry.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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-Very nice image.
-Syllable count is good.
-The imagery is effective
throughout the poem.
-The last line is like a satori.
-A good entry.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Dear Pam, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
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You are quite welcome.
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Thank you for your comments and review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks motion of fresh water along the mountain slopes and making diverse changeable courses of flow over rocks and make bubbling stream on falling; I liked.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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This speaks motion of fresh water along the mountain slopes and making diverse changeable courses of flow over rocks and make bubbling stream on falling; I liked.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Dear Alcreator, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
