Forever Changing
nature haiku suite17 total reviews
Comment from writerjen
Yes, nature is forever changing but the seasons are always predictable so that gives us hope. Nicely written haiku. You followed the haiku requirements well. Great job. A picture might have added a bit to your poem. But overall, great job.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Yes, nature is forever changing but the seasons are always predictable so that gives us hope. Nicely written haiku. You followed the haiku requirements well. Great job. A picture might have added a bit to your poem. But overall, great job.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for you comments of my poem and the five-star ranking.
dragonpoet
Comment from pome lover
I like your poem - descriptions are good - bringing pictures to mind.
I do think some punctuation would enhance it, however - for instance, third verse, after color. Although I know what you meant, it looks like "color tweets heard." :)
Anyway, if you close your eyes and picture your descriptions, you get a lovey scene. very nice.
pome lover
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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I like your poem - descriptions are good - bringing pictures to mind.
I do think some punctuation would enhance it, however - for instance, third verse, after color. Although I know what you meant, it looks like "color tweets heard." :)
Anyway, if you close your eyes and picture your descriptions, you get a lovey scene. very nice.
pome lover
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the thorough review and high rating. I am glad you liked it. I will check out
the punctuation.
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Comment from Dean Kuch
These were all very nicely written and well expressed haiku, Joan.
My only question is why two of them exceeded the syllabic count limit of seventeen syllables, or less, as specified by the haiku form?
Haiku #2 uses nineteen syllables while your last used eighteen.
I have seen haiku where more than seventeen syllables were used before, but very rarely.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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These were all very nicely written and well expressed haiku, Joan.
My only question is why two of them exceeded the syllabic count limit of seventeen syllables, or less, as specified by the haiku form?
Haiku #2 uses nineteen syllables while your last used eighteen.
I have seen haiku where more than seventeen syllables were used before, but very rarely.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank, Dean. I will check the syllable count.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Seasons remind us that life has many aspects and life goes on no matter what our agenda. We are eventually left behind as we start to wilt and youth takes on our role, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Seasons remind us that life has many aspects and life goes on no matter what our agenda. We are eventually left behind as we start to wilt and youth takes on our role, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks, Dolly for your review and all the stars. I like your philosophical description
of the poems meaning.
Joan
Comment from Irish Rain
I love the ending, ha ha. These are delightful haiku of the changing seasons, very good imagery. That chlorophyll line though...that's wonderful!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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I love the ending, ha ha. These are delightful haiku of the changing seasons, very good imagery. That chlorophyll line though...that's wonderful!! Blessings...
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the review. I had to show the little natural science I know.
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Ha ha....the little you know is a lot more than what I know!!!
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Well I know a little more than most because I got a recap on it helping my kids with their homework.
Joan
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written nature haiku suite. The never ending cycle of the seasons reminds us of the cycle of life where we have only one cycle and we should make the best of our chances.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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A very well-written nature haiku suite. The never ending cycle of the seasons reminds us of the cycle of life where we have only one cycle and we should make the best of our chances.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the positive comments and all the stars.
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the nature and characteristics of Nature, the truth remains the same; change is the inevitable; nothing but changes is compulsory, everywhere seen, one after another, each process; I liked.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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This speaks the nature and characteristics of Nature, the truth remains the same; change is the inevitable; nothing but changes is compulsory, everywhere seen, one after another, each process; I liked.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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thanks for reviewing this poem. I am glad you liked it.
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Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good description of the changes that we see in nature.
Fall is like the end of the seasons and spring the beginning.
Well done, good rhythm and flow.
I could feel the change in the air.
Sharon
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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This is a good description of the changes that we see in nature.
Fall is like the end of the seasons and spring the beginning.
Well done, good rhythm and flow.
I could feel the change in the air.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate all the stars.
Joan
Comment from DonandVicki
I haven't read or reviewed a Haiku suite in quite some time. Yours is quite exceptional. Unfortunately I am fresh out of sixes. I enjoyed the Haiku nonetheless.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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I haven't read or reviewed a Haiku suite in quite some time. Yours is quite exceptional. Unfortunately I am fresh out of sixes. I enjoyed the Haiku nonetheless.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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I am honored you though it deserved six stars. Thank you
Joan
Comment from Gert sherwood
Excellent haiku(s) dragonpoet
of what it is when when the season of Autumn leaves us.
Here in Vermont .
We know we will wait for the gale
of blustery Winter winds to blow.
Gert
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Excellent haiku(s) dragonpoet
of what it is when when the season of Autumn leaves us.
Here in Vermont .
We know we will wait for the gale
of blustery Winter winds to blow.
Gert
Comment Written 16-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the review. Same here in Minnesota
Joan
