Iris
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Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting story you have penned about Iris and the doctors. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2017
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This is a very interesting story you have penned about Iris and the doctors. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This account, written from Iris's POV and, like a sick child, she doesn't talk about her illness but about the stuff going on around her in the hospital. I like the reference to Pollyanna, Mum wants to read it but Iris hates it. Nicely written chapter Maria,
cheers.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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This account, written from Iris's POV and, like a sick child, she doesn't talk about her illness but about the stuff going on around her in the hospital. I like the reference to Pollyanna, Mum wants to read it but Iris hates it. Nicely written chapter Maria,
cheers.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Well HELLO STRANGER! I missed you...I wondered what happened to you. It has been quite a while. I hope all is well with you and the family. I may have to take a long break also to concentrate more on my spirituality. I am supposed to be spending more time reading my spiritual literature but Fan Story had been getting so much time and attention.
I am happy that you returned with continuing this story. It simply breaks my heart. I am so happy that you did share previously that your daughter is well. This helps me breathe better as I read the story. I hate it when anyone is sick but especially children. As a mother I could feel the whole situation, the grief and the stress of it all. I remember days when I was in the hospital waiting for my a different child each time during one or two operations, for this or that - what an extremely heart wrenching situation.
Your story is excellently written. I love it, exceptional...
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Well HELLO STRANGER! I missed you...I wondered what happened to you. It has been quite a while. I hope all is well with you and the family. I may have to take a long break also to concentrate more on my spirituality. I am supposed to be spending more time reading my spiritual literature but Fan Story had been getting so much time and attention.
I am happy that you returned with continuing this story. It simply breaks my heart. I am so happy that you did share previously that your daughter is well. This helps me breathe better as I read the story. I hate it when anyone is sick but especially children. As a mother I could feel the whole situation, the grief and the stress of it all. I remember days when I was in the hospital waiting for my a different child each time during one or two operations, for this or that - what an extremely heart wrenching situation.
Your story is excellently written. I love it, exceptional...
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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I have been on holiday, Tier. I went to England for two weeks and had a great time. But I'm back now...
Thanks for your generous rating and for your kind review.
Take care. It's good to 'talk' to you again.
Comment from Sis Cat
A charming story about a girl named Iris undergoing surgery due to cancer. I love how you told the story from her perspective. She accepts her as it is then with a bit of humor:
'What was that all about? What did he mean by 'my volume'?'
'I guess he wanted to know how heavy you are to see the amount of anesthetic he'll be needing.'
'And he knows that just by looking at me?'
'I guess.' Mum answered thoughtfully.
And then we started laughing again.
Based upon your daughter's real life experience, this chapter sheds light on how one child addresses cancer. I had assumed that all children would be fearful, but this/your child shows resiliency in the face of danger.
Your prose is simple and clear. You just need to insert a blank line below merged paragraphs ending in
stomach that book, it's so awfully corny!
and
they are ready for you.'
Thank you for sharing your unique story. I pray your daughter is better.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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A charming story about a girl named Iris undergoing surgery due to cancer. I love how you told the story from her perspective. She accepts her as it is then with a bit of humor:
'What was that all about? What did he mean by 'my volume'?'
'I guess he wanted to know how heavy you are to see the amount of anesthetic he'll be needing.'
'And he knows that just by looking at me?'
'I guess.' Mum answered thoughtfully.
And then we started laughing again.
Based upon your daughter's real life experience, this chapter sheds light on how one child addresses cancer. I had assumed that all children would be fearful, but this/your child shows resiliency in the face of danger.
Your prose is simple and clear. You just need to insert a blank line below merged paragraphs ending in
stomach that book, it's so awfully corny!
and
they are ready for you.'
Thank you for sharing your unique story. I pray your daughter is better.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Well, in my experience this is how most children react to cancer. They are not afraid... It's the parents who suffer most, I guess.
Thanks for noticing the missing blank lines, I have already corrected that. And thanks for reading.
Comment from royowen
A sad little story, as looking through the eyes of a child, they are so filled with the joy and yet the poignancy of the battle for life, that I guess all of us face at some stage, but particularly sad for a child. Beautifully and sensitively written Maria, with all the kindness of a mother that has been subjected to the hideous villainy of cancer. Well done, most enjoyable, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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A sad little story, as looking through the eyes of a child, they are so filled with the joy and yet the poignancy of the battle for life, that I guess all of us face at some stage, but particularly sad for a child. Beautifully and sensitively written Maria, with all the kindness of a mother that has been subjected to the hideous villainy of cancer. Well done, most enjoyable, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Roy.
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Welcome Maria
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello
Your true story about your daughter is well written and the dialogue is very good
I like how curious Iris is with her various questions.
Now there is one part that I got a bit confused
'Mum, next time you go home you have to bring me a couple of Harry Potter books. The ones I have on my
night-table.'
My question is ( why did Iris say
The ones I have on my night-table.'
Does she desire to have a new book about Harry Potter?
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Hello
Your true story about your daughter is well written and the dialogue is very good
I like how curious Iris is with her various questions.
Now there is one part that I got a bit confused
'Mum, next time you go home you have to bring me a couple of Harry Potter books. The ones I have on my
night-table.'
My question is ( why did Iris say
The ones I have on my night-table.'
Does she desire to have a new book about Harry Potter?
Gert
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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No, she's just telling her mum where the books are, in case she can't find them.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a touching story and it made me smile at points when Iris got the birthday gifts. But, the story make me sad a bit because I do not like for children to become ill and especially with leukemia. I have lost several children and a couple of adults who lost their lives to that horrible illness. Patricia
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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This is a touching story and it made me smile at points when Iris got the birthday gifts. But, the story make me sad a bit because I do not like for children to become ill and especially with leukemia. I have lost several children and a couple of adults who lost their lives to that horrible illness. Patricia
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Well, the good news is that nowadays it's a very curable cancer...
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
an excellent chapter told with purpose and humor. Nice POV you taking your daughters voice in the story. I love the soft interaction.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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an excellent chapter told with purpose and humor. Nice POV you taking your daughters voice in the story. I love the soft interaction.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Barb.
Comment from robyn corum
MJ,
A very well-written and slightly disturbing moment of time for your daughter. I hate to think of her having to go through these things, but you portray her as a bright, optimistic, confident young girl. Beautiful !!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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MJ,
A very well-written and slightly disturbing moment of time for your daughter. I hate to think of her having to go through these things, but you portray her as a bright, optimistic, confident young girl. Beautiful !!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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The truth is that she was so young that she didn't suffer much (only when she was in pain and that hardly ever happened). In the story she's older, but in real life she was only 4, so she didn't really know what was going on. Fortunately...
Thanks for reading.
Comment from apky
Although this story is rather sad, all the more so when it is atrue story about your own child, I admire your internal strength that enables you to write it. A srength that your daughter seems to have inherited. Further, I enjoy your writing style.
Your daughter has trememndous self-esteem but remains humble and polite.
Wish you both all the best and blessings.
Kind regards,
Apky
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Although this story is rather sad, all the more so when it is atrue story about your own child, I admire your internal strength that enables you to write it. A srength that your daughter seems to have inherited. Further, I enjoy your writing style.
Your daughter has trememndous self-esteem but remains humble and polite.
Wish you both all the best and blessings.
Kind regards,
Apky
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your very kind review.
