Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Slack-Jawed Tide"A collection of free verse poems
67 total reviews
Comment from His Grayness
Another magnificent work of very unusual yet exceptionally interesting facts of nature! This work is presented with awesome visuals and well-delivered facts of nature that would very likely never be exposed to the average person. I loved it and thank this great author for another brilliant and rich presentation! HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Another magnificent work of very unusual yet exceptionally interesting facts of nature! This work is presented with awesome visuals and well-delivered facts of nature that would very likely never be exposed to the average person. I loved it and thank this great author for another brilliant and rich presentation! HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks for your very kind review, Vance, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
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Always my joy Tony...thanks to YOU.Vance
Comment from sunnilicious
I have never liked jellyfish. There's terrible to look at and if the catch you by surprise, the sting can last too long. Great visual imagery created. Spooky and thriller filled poem. Wonderful work. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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I have never liked jellyfish. There's terrible to look at and if the catch you by surprise, the sting can last too long. Great visual imagery created. Spooky and thriller filled poem. Wonderful work. Nicely written.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Sunnilicious, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Irish Rain
I just love this Mr. Tony, as it starts out so mystically, but then turns quite deadly, much like the ocean herself. A beautiful picture too. It looks as though the walker is pondering death. A cruel jest to think you're jumping into beauty, the ocean is a wonderful deceiver. Brilliant!! Blessings....
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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I just love this Mr. Tony, as it starts out so mystically, but then turns quite deadly, much like the ocean herself. A beautiful picture too. It looks as though the walker is pondering death. A cruel jest to think you're jumping into beauty, the ocean is a wonderful deceiver. Brilliant!! Blessings....
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Judy. A wonderfully perceptive review. All the best, Tony
Comment from RebelRose
This is great. I truly enjoyed the way it's written and the end is well one. I like your use of alliteration and I have to admit, I will be forced to check out Google for a couple of definitions.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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This is great. I truly enjoyed the way it's written and the end is well one. I like your use of alliteration and I have to admit, I will be forced to check out Google for a couple of definitions.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Rose, for dropping by to review and for your generous award of six stars. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Sis Cat
I said this once, twice, and I will say this again and again, you have the finest use of the English language on FanStory. It is deep in knowledge and high in creativity. I love that you do not dumb down your poetry with nursery rhyme words but exalt your poems using the most expressive and vivid words found in the English language. I enjoy a particular thrill of looking up new words like Viridian and Physalia and learning something new.
You captivated me from the opening lines though imagery and word choice:
Silver still the sea tonight,
a luminescent, viscous thing
of listless lull,
and solipsistic slop
Your alliteration, consonance, and assonance are lush, musical, like the ebb and flow of tides. I love my "wild imaginings" as
drift dead men in to shore
on slack-jawed tides,
and drag them out again,
I feel slack-jawed reading this poem.
Your closing description and presentation of the bottle-blue Physalia with its hanging, lethal tentacles is effective and stinging.
Thank you for sharing this most exceptional poem that gives as something to aspire to and be inspired by.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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I said this once, twice, and I will say this again and again, you have the finest use of the English language on FanStory. It is deep in knowledge and high in creativity. I love that you do not dumb down your poetry with nursery rhyme words but exalt your poems using the most expressive and vivid words found in the English language. I enjoy a particular thrill of looking up new words like Viridian and Physalia and learning something new.
You captivated me from the opening lines though imagery and word choice:
Silver still the sea tonight,
a luminescent, viscous thing
of listless lull,
and solipsistic slop
Your alliteration, consonance, and assonance are lush, musical, like the ebb and flow of tides. I love my "wild imaginings" as
drift dead men in to shore
on slack-jawed tides,
and drag them out again,
I feel slack-jawed reading this poem.
Your closing description and presentation of the bottle-blue Physalia with its hanging, lethal tentacles is effective and stinging.
Thank you for sharing this most exceptional poem that gives as something to aspire to and be inspired by.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Andre. A perceptive review full of fine compliments. A little undeserved perhaps, but much appreciated!. All the best, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
Horrible things but a great piece of free verse about them and an appropriate layout. I thought it was going to be a sting ray at first. I got zapped by one of those in Aden. My word but it was painful.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Horrible things but a great piece of free verse about them and an appropriate layout. I thought it was going to be a sting ray at first. I got zapped by one of those in Aden. My word but it was painful.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Jim, for your kind words and six stars. I never was much good at drawing! It does look rather more like a sting ray than a jellyfish. I missed the joys of Aden by a matter of months at the start of my service career and departed just before the Falklands War. A well-timed sixteen years. All the best, Tony
Comment from rjuselius
This is a gory and morbid piece of poetry dear Tony! I have never read anything like this from you. It's kind of like a fresh air although it must feel.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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This is a gory and morbid piece of poetry dear Tony! I have never read anything like this from you. It's kind of like a fresh air although it must feel.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Rebekkah, for your most affirming review and six stars. I generally steer away from the macabre, but it just crept up on me this time! All the best, Tony
Comment from mermaids
Love your use of words that takes the reader to another place and into the world of this creature. "Where gormless hagfish swirl and swim" is a great line. It adds the eery feel of the poem. I can see your poem with illustrations.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Love your use of words that takes the reader to another place and into the world of this creature. "Where gormless hagfish swirl and swim" is a great line. It adds the eery feel of the poem. I can see your poem with illustrations.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Mermaids, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from krys123
Cheers again, Tony;
-the picture is powerful and it's the first thing to grasp my attention as a very beautiful and captivating picture and almost an Ekphrastic poem because of it. This is because I could see the bodies being pushed in and back out to sea and being surrounded by hagfish and other denizens of the deep.
-You selectively use alliteration throughout your writing to really help describe and express the imagery to its fullest. This creates an enjambment to flow smoothly throughout your writing without a hiccup or a syntactical break in the meaning and understanding of your poem. Again, I can't emphasize this enough to make me really enjoy your poem.
-All in all the coordination between picture and words or font was an added attraction of enjoyment and the picture was definitely appropriate and supported to the conceptual theme of your poem.
-Exceptionally done, Tony.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Cheers again, Tony;
-the picture is powerful and it's the first thing to grasp my attention as a very beautiful and captivating picture and almost an Ekphrastic poem because of it. This is because I could see the bodies being pushed in and back out to sea and being surrounded by hagfish and other denizens of the deep.
-You selectively use alliteration throughout your writing to really help describe and express the imagery to its fullest. This creates an enjambment to flow smoothly throughout your writing without a hiccup or a syntactical break in the meaning and understanding of your poem. Again, I can't emphasize this enough to make me really enjoy your poem.
-All in all the coordination between picture and words or font was an added attraction of enjoyment and the picture was definitely appropriate and supported to the conceptual theme of your poem.
-Exceptionally done, Tony.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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As always, your words and stars lift my heart, Alex. Thank you very much. All the best to you and yours, Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony and take care of yourself and have a good one.
Alex
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
You have written a stunning poem, by chance with a slightly similar theme to my most recent and also using the word 'viridian' as the green lady in mu poem is so often described. This is breathtaking I love poems relating to water I find it so mystical, I wish I had a six to give you, as always utterly amazing. So much skill displayed here. Kindest regards and well done Meia x
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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You have written a stunning poem, by chance with a slightly similar theme to my most recent and also using the word 'viridian' as the green lady in mu poem is so often described. This is breathtaking I love poems relating to water I find it so mystical, I wish I had a six to give you, as always utterly amazing. So much skill displayed here. Kindest regards and well done Meia x
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for this lovely review, Meia. Much appreciated. Tony
