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Comment from Realist101
Hey there! Another colorful story filled with your trademark lingo Red. Most enjoyable! You always take us along for a wild and wonderful ride. Love this. :)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Hey there! Another colorful story filled with your trademark lingo Red. Most enjoyable! You always take us along for a wild and wonderful ride. Love this. :)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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I was thinking about how all the prettiest girls in these small towns have to go out and see what they can get from the big world. A lot of them come back and marry the boy they left behind.Thanks much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I really enjoyed this story Red. They are two great characters and through your dialogue and descriptions it is easy to get a picture of this scene. Good ending too, you could do more to this story,
cheers.
valda
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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I really enjoyed this story Red. They are two great characters and through your dialogue and descriptions it is easy to get a picture of this scene. Good ending too, you could do more to this story,
cheers.
valda
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Thanks very much for reading and reviewing my short love story. Maybe a hint of Sweet Home Alabama in the plot-line, but Georgia in the dialog. I think those two are about to switch to Plan B.
Comment from country ranch writer
High society comes home to red neck homage to maybe rekindle friendship she walked away on. Stuck up frusterated and mad she is now home and fells alone
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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High society comes home to red neck homage to maybe rekindle friendship she walked away on. Stuck up frusterated and mad she is now home and fells alone
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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From my little town the prettiest girls and most ambitious guys leave to make a bigger splash than our puddle. Some of them come back. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
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They all think the grass is greener on the other side of the fence
Comment from humpwhistle
Red, I always enjoy your unvarnished takes life in the fringe country.
Nice job of telling one story while filling in the backstory.
A couple of times, you lost me, though. 'Charlotte was back with a plate identical to mine. She placed it in front of Mary Lynn, overhearing her, and we all laughed.'--somehow, Red, this doesn't feel kosher.
That being said, I envy the realistic grit with which you sand your stories.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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Red, I always enjoy your unvarnished takes life in the fringe country.
Nice job of telling one story while filling in the backstory.
A couple of times, you lost me, though. 'Charlotte was back with a plate identical to mine. She placed it in front of Mary Lynn, overhearing her, and we all laughed.'--somehow, Red, this doesn't feel kosher.
That being said, I envy the realistic grit with which you sand your stories.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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I debated making that two paragraphs and clarifying that the waitress had brought her old friend an unordered lunch, overheard Mary Lynn's remark, and laughed with them. I guess I should. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing, Lee.
Comment from robyn corum
Lige,
I always wonder how much of your stories are real and how much are fiction -- the line seems to get more crookedy and crookedy. *smile*
A really fun piece. I'll wait to see what happens!
One note:
1.) Then you commented later that we (were) not going anywhere.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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Lige,
I always wonder how much of your stories are real and how much are fiction -- the line seems to get more crookedy and crookedy. *smile*
A really fun piece. I'll wait to see what happens!
One note:
1.) Then you commented later that we (were) not going anywhere.
Thanks!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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Pretty girls leave small towns to wow the world. Sometimes they come back...thanks very much for reading and reviewing, Robyn, and for catching that sloppy edit.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story. A woman with a successful career come back home and having trouble with her car that seems to need an alternator. It seems she planned the meeting with the local hero. Lol.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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A very well-written story. A woman with a successful career come back home and having trouble with her car that seems to need an alternator. It seems she planned the meeting with the local hero. Lol.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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This was a popular plotline of romance novels a few years ago. Beauty leaves to conquer the world and comes home wiser.
I felt the urge to write my angle on it. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from damommy
For someone who was so big on herself, she came down a notch or two, didn't she?
I take it they will be rekindling the old love? More of this would be very nice. I loved the conversation and the narrative.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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For someone who was so big on herself, she came down a notch or two, didn't she?
I take it they will be rekindling the old love? More of this would be very nice. I loved the conversation and the narrative.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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Looks like those two are about to try Plan B. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I enjoyed this very much. The hillbilly talk was very amusing and believable. I really liked the characters and plot direction. I'd gladly read more of this, delightful kinest regards and well done Meia x
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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I enjoyed this very much. The hillbilly talk was very amusing and believable. I really liked the characters and plot direction. I'd gladly read more of this, delightful kinest regards and well done Meia x
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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Thanks very much for reading and reviewing my short and backward take on Sweet Home Alabama. The plotline as been popular in romance novels, too.
