Why don't monsters die
A child's question40 total reviews
Comment from apky
I like the way you tackled this evil. The poem itself is well written and puts ones mind firmly on the abused innocent children. You express yourself with great descriptions and imagery.
your mind's not right I do not care
the laws and courts must be aware
my life you ended yours must too
some time away won't castrate you
a coward's manhood still has to feed
a permanent solution will stop the need
to create more thoughts such as mine
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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I like the way you tackled this evil. The poem itself is well written and puts ones mind firmly on the abused innocent children. You express yourself with great descriptions and imagery.
your mind's not right I do not care
the laws and courts must be aware
my life you ended yours must too
some time away won't castrate you
a coward's manhood still has to feed
a permanent solution will stop the need
to create more thoughts such as mine
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for an excellent and understanding review****kahpot
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. There are many people who think they have the right to rape and abuse vulnerable people that are easy targets for them. Laws should be much stronger to punish these abusers.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. There are many people who think they have the right to rape and abuse vulnerable people that are easy targets for them. Laws should be much stronger to punish these abusers.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for an excellent and understanding review****kahpot
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
EXCELET WRITE MY FRIEND
LOVE THE PICTURE IS SO BEAUTIFUL
YOUR WRITE READ EASILY AND HAD A NICE FLOW
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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EXCELET WRITE MY FRIEND
LOVE THE PICTURE IS SO BEAUTIFUL
YOUR WRITE READ EASILY AND HAD A NICE FLOW
Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for an excellent review****kahpot
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem about children that are sexually abused or hurt by a person. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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This is a very well written poem about children that are sexually abused or hurt by a person. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for such an understanding review****kahpot
Comment from B.B. Rose
This is an amazing indictment of pedophilia and the injustice of how small a price is paid by the perpetrator in contrast with the suffering of the youngster. I wish there could have been some upturn at the end, just a tiny sliver of hope or at least some horrible thing happening to the ped. But I guess you are talking about real life here. Very powerful.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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This is an amazing indictment of pedophilia and the injustice of how small a price is paid by the perpetrator in contrast with the suffering of the youngster. I wish there could have been some upturn at the end, just a tiny sliver of hope or at least some horrible thing happening to the ped. But I guess you are talking about real life here. Very powerful.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for such an excellent and understanding review****kahpot
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A good poem, but it could have been benefitted by some punctuation. I know it's not a requirement in poetry, but sometimes it helps set the cadence. Your rhymes are good, but the cadence is lacking.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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A good poem, but it could have been benefitted by some punctuation. I know it's not a requirement in poetry, but sometimes it helps set the cadence. Your rhymes are good, but the cadence is lacking.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much, I will try to improve on punctuation, many thanks for your help****kahpot
Comment from Cindy Warren
Unfortunately, these bastards do walk the streets. If I had my way, they wouldn't. Destroying someone else's life is just as evil as murder. They wouldn't be free to do it again in a few months if I was in charge. Hope your friend will be OK.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Unfortunately, these bastards do walk the streets. If I had my way, they wouldn't. Destroying someone else's life is just as evil as murder. They wouldn't be free to do it again in a few months if I was in charge. Hope your friend will be OK.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for an excellent and understanding review****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
This poem gives voice to all victims of rape who are still haunted by the pain and have not been given full justice by the courts. Wish there were some way to make such criminals change and become sensitive to the harm they caused.
one suggestion:
"A cowards manhood" (a coward's manhood")
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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This poem gives voice to all victims of rape who are still haunted by the pain and have not been given full justice by the courts. Wish there were some way to make such criminals change and become sensitive to the harm they caused.
one suggestion:
"A cowards manhood" (a coward's manhood")
Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for this review, and your suggestion is correct and I have corrected many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a child questions simply why don't monsters die, even if they don't deserve for living, monsters never know how to care and make life healthy and peaceful; I liked.
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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This speaks a child questions simply why don't monsters die, even if they don't deserve for living, monsters never know how to care and make life healthy and peaceful; I liked.
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Thank you for a very understanding review****kahpot
Comment from DR DIP
This is a very personal and poignant account through verse of your friends young life and the scars this rape/ molestation has left on her as she grows older. She will never get over this. Hopefully time heals the pain. Hopefully not fearful of a male's company as she grows into a woman.
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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This is a very personal and poignant account through verse of your friends young life and the scars this rape/ molestation has left on her as she grows older. She will never get over this. Hopefully time heals the pain. Hopefully not fearful of a male's company as she grows into a woman.
dip
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much, and what say is exactly what scares her, but as you say we hope time may help****kahpot
