Livin' in the Bay
But in tears I left you drowning, drowning.19 total reviews
Comment from nbonner
Great love poem. Love is so hard to find but when you do it is the best feeling. Love the song! Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Great love poem. Love is so hard to find but when you do it is the best feeling. Love the song! Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you, nbonner, for your review of my love song and for wishing me the best in the contest.
Comment from royowen
Nicely written lyrics as an entry in this lyric song writing cone. I too really liked those two songs, you've done well, with enough repetitive lines to give it that realistic "feel" to the song. A really good entry in this contest, hoping you do well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Nicely written lyrics as an entry in this lyric song writing cone. I too really liked those two songs, you've done well, with enough repetitive lines to give it that realistic "feel" to the song. A really good entry in this contest, hoping you do well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Roy, for your review and contest well wishes on the realistic feel of my song.
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Most welcome
Comment from c_lucas
When a relationship falter and fades away. Salute it and go your own way. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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When a relationship falter and fades away. Salute it and go your own way. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you, C_Lucas, for your review on my song about a faltered, faded relationship.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written song you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words that told a story, which some songs are supposed to do. Best wishes in the contest! Teri
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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This is a very well written song you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words that told a story, which some songs are supposed to do. Best wishes in the contest! Teri
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Teri7, for your encouraging review. I focused my storytelling skills on song writing. Thanks for wishing me the best in the contest, too.
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you are so welcome!
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well written break-up song. It shows the pain, doubt, guilt and loneliness of the loss of love. I think their is fault on both sides of a break up, unless it has to do with abuse.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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This is a well written break-up song. It shows the pain, doubt, guilt and loneliness of the loss of love. I think their is fault on both sides of a break up, unless it has to do with abuse.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you, DP, for your encouraging review of my lyrics and for noting the mixed emotions after a breakup. Thanks also for wishing me luck in the contest.
I'll keep writing!
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You're welcome on all accounts.
dp
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your entry in the Lyrics contest. I appreciate you singing the song for us. I can't always come up with a tune for the lyrics, so this was a much easier way for me to evaluate the content of the story.
When love leaves, the streets of a familiar city seem so foreign. You are searching for that one face. Without the presence of your love, you are lost.
Well done. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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thank you for sharing your entry in the Lyrics contest. I appreciate you singing the song for us. I can't always come up with a tune for the lyrics, so this was a much easier way for me to evaluate the content of the story.
When love leaves, the streets of a familiar city seem so foreign. You are searching for that one face. Without the presence of your love, you are lost.
Well done. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Patty, for your review and for wishing me luck in the contest. I used to write the lyrics first, but now I hum the melody and beat first and then pen words to the tune. I am glad my singing made evaluating the content of my song easier.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Very well-written poem/song lyrics. When a relationship comes to an end it often feels that we are all alone in this world. There is no future without our love, but we know it all is for the best.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Very well-written poem/song lyrics. When a relationship comes to an end it often feels that we are all alone in this world. There is no future without our love, but we know it all is for the best.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Sandra, for your review and compliments of my well-written breakup song.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
When I visited the bay I didn't see any fog, but I know of the phenomenon, I thought the bay was quite dirty and was a bit disappointed, especially when it was made so famous by the song, your poem reminded me of the feelings I had too! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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When I visited the bay I didn't see any fog, but I know of the phenomenon, I thought the bay was quite dirty and was a bit disappointed, especially when it was made so famous by the song, your poem reminded me of the feelings I had too! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Dolly, for your review. Yes, the Bay can be murky brown from all of the silt coming out of the Sacramento River. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This song, Livin' in the Bay, has that sad theme of a lost love, but it feels more upbeat that depressing. It's a nice recording of the song as well. I like San Frisco when I visited it a couple of years ago. Nice touring town and a balmy 78 degrees all year round.
Liked the lyrics.
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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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This song, Livin' in the Bay, has that sad theme of a lost love, but it feels more upbeat that depressing. It's a nice recording of the song as well. I like San Frisco when I visited it a couple of years ago. Nice touring town and a balmy 78 degrees all year round.
Liked the lyrics.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Bill, for giving my lyrics their first review of my bittersweet song. I appreciate it.
