Comment from rspoet

Exceptional

Hello Sandra,
Now, how could any idea cooked up in the head of Sandra, errrr Veronica,
possibly be "ridiculous and totally absurd." I can't even imagine that.
Possible? In a world of time travel, ghosts, possessions, what isn't possible?
This is a very fine chapter with James providing the center of gravity and calm,
as men usually do. lol
The mention of the encyclopaedias, brings back memories. We had a complete set, and they were heavy.
The connection of another albino in a missionary church has many possibilities.
The part with Michael/Joe is well done, a tricky bit of writing there.
The chapter is excellent as it fills in information that leads to the next smoothly.
Well done
RS

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017

LOL, Veronica keeps putting these silly ideas in my head, I'm going ask Mildred to keep her under control!! My mother bought my brother and me a set of those encyclopaedias. I think she was hoping one of us would become a scientist or a brain surgeon! LOL, We had to disappoint her.

Thank you so very much, Robert, for the lovely 6 stars and wonderful review. Hmmm, about that bit where men are the ones that provide the calm??? Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from Loren (7)

Exceptional

What a fascinating story line, Sandra. I like the way you are weaving the past and present into this with little Hansel and Gretel morsels thrown in to lead the characters (and us, the readers) on to the next path. You are doing a great job building empathy for your characters as well. They appear genuine and truly concerned about the obstacles placed in front of them. Loren

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017

What a lovely review, Loren, that is such a compliment, thank you so very much! The six beautiful stars are just the icing on top! Thank you. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from wordsfromsue

Excellent

Okay, I have no idea what Veronica is thinking or might be up to.
What are 'chooky egg and soldiers'?

Good chapter.

James is almost too perfect, you know? So spot on for the heroic male lead character. :-)

I could use a James in my life!

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017

He's fashioned on my dream man! LOL.

A chooky egg and soldiers is what we call a soft boiled egg and toast cut into soldiers (fingers), then you cut the head off the egg and dip the 'soldiers in. I don't know where the expression came from but it was around in my grandparents time. :)

Veronica has a plan, she told me about it, and we will discuss it over a cuppa with Mildred as well!!

Thank you so much, Sue, I was just on my way to read you next piece but Alexis called me about her book, Let's Talk Dirty, it is hilariously funny, you'd really like it. She's put it on Amazon in Kindle as well a paper back. If you can, you should get it, I was wetting my knickers laughing!

Now to go to yours. Thanks again, my friend, I'll get onto Skype after I've read it. :) Sandra xxxxxxx

Comment from bluedragon776

Excellent

Hey, I love time travel. So I was pleased when I realized the premise of the book I found on think you may want look at.

In this sentence I think the words inwardly squirm should be switched. Just my opinion though. Thank for sharing.

***The thought that my precious son might not even be able to hear me made me inwardly squirm.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Thank you so much for reading my story, Bluedragon, and for the kind suggestion. I'll take a look at that. I really appreciate it when people are kind enough to offer help in any way. I'm also very pleased that you enjoy time travel. :)) Thanks again, my friend. :) sandra xx

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

I like how she and James are together, like a real couple, shown by the little things they say and do. The dialogue seems realistic even as they move from private chat to a major problem, that of their son being inhabited by a time traveler. You outdid every time-traveler writer here or anywhere! Bravo. Now don't let anyone get hurt. :)

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

What can I say! Thank you so very much, Phyllis, for this amazing review and what a compliment coming from you, my friend! Thank you!! And a humongous hug for the 6 stars. The icing on a beautiful cake! :) Sandra xx

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

Hi, Sandra

This is another well-written chapter that keeps the adults awake with their musings.

Michael enjoys hot chocolate with his breakfast, but Mummy is not sure if it's a good idea for him to have choc for breakfast. Maybe Daveth liked it too?
There's still some research to be done into local history.

The idea that had begun to develop in my mind was outlandish--in fact, it was ridiculous and totally absurd ... but that aside, was it possible?

I guess we must wait and see! Looking forward to finding out.

Nicole

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Thank you so much for your lovely review, Nicole!! :) Sandra xxx

Comment from pbomar1115

Exceptional

Besides having the problem of finding Daveth'a father, Veronica had the problem of Joe, Daveth's father, being inside of her son, Micheal, who has a strong liking for chocolate. Veronica's job has grown more complicated to solve. Great story.

Phillip

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Thank you so much, Phillip, for the lovely 6 stars. Veronica is finding this a lot harder to deal with then when she had to sort out the last case she was given. At least she isn't quite on her own this time, she has James as well as Mildred to help her. I'm so pleased you are enjoying this story, you've quite made my day! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

reply by pbomar1115 on 15-Aug-2017

I'm still pulling for Veronica.

Phillip

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

I'm glad about that! :) xx

reply by pbomar1115 on 15-Aug-2017

Okay.

Phillip

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

This was interesting. Startling vivid imagery. Great dialogue the characters of Jacob and Rebecca are well drawn, they literally leap off the page...

Just kidding but...

then leant back against them - they don't like 'leant' in these parts. I get berated for this all the time 'Don't you know it's spelt leaned?' lol

"And I'll see what information I can find on the professor I was telling you about. There's sure to be some record of him in the medical archives at the university. "Come on, let's go and see if Mildred has put the kettle on yet. You never know, we might beat her to it!" - there's an extra speech mark in the middle of this dialogue.

Very nice ending
G

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

You really had me going there, G!! LOL! Then I remembered our chat about reviewers! LOL.

'Leant' is in the Oxford Dictionary as a 'Brit' word being used in the same way 'leaned' is. So, in future, I will use the word 'leaned' as it is used here as well as in the US. That solves that problem. :)

I also have a similar problem with 'learned' and 'learnt' There has to be an easy way for me to remember which to use.

I remember when I was in Primary school, (don't ask how long ago that was.) I'there' and 'their' once I'd been told how to use the right one, I never forget it. Any tips??

I'll go and hook out that extra speech mark, thanks for that. I know how that happened.

Thank you so much, my friend, for another lovely review, and a fun one! Big hugs! :) Sandra xxxx

reply by giraffmang on 15-Aug-2017

I was pulling your leg about leant. I use it all the time. They basically are interchangeable, but people here keep commenting on them. I still use leant...

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

OH! LOL, that's me all over, I really thought you meant it. I did go and look the word up and it really did say it was the Brit way. Honestly, the spelling differences at times drive me to another glass of sherry!!! LOL

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hello,
I found no errors. I was into the story, and it is only two sips of coffee here, so maybe I missed something.
Okay, one thing I'm confused on -- is the little boy the albino?
Have a good week

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Hi Rasmine, the albino boy is back in the past where Joe comes from, in 1846, not Michael her young son. Veronica has to get Joe to go back to his own time and help the lad as well. She has her work cut out though! Thank you so much for reading this part, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Another great chapter, Sandra... perfectly presented.
It seems Veronica is reallly worried about how her time travel affects Michael and Anne. She had to find Joe and talk him into going back to his own time.
James has an idea how the Albino child could be saved.

Blessings,
Margaret

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017

Thank you, Margaret. Yes, Veronica has a lot to do this time. It's completely different the first book, which it had to be to work.
I'm pleased you are enjoying it. :)) Sandra xxx