This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "A Sleepless Night"Veronica is sent back again
36 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
I keep hoping she will time travel soon. I realize there is some research that needs to be done, but that's not as much fun lol! I'm also looking forward to the baby speaking in an adult mans voice.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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I keep hoping she will time travel soon. I realize there is some research that needs to be done, but that's not as much fun lol! I'm also looking forward to the baby speaking in an adult mans voice.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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He'll speak soon. Not saying what! Yes, time travelling and going back into the past is far more fun. But I have to keep Mildred up to scratch, if I didn't, I'd have a few complaints from some readers on here, lol. Thanks again, my friend! Big hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, so good to see my sweet friend...just got back to my daughters and back on the site....
soooooooooo what is your idea???...OK!!!!...we're trying to get Joe to show himself...I'll think of something...OK!!!...feed Michael some liver...that would do it for me...this is a awesome chapter sweet girl...and very well written...love ya you...Linda xxoo
I hope all is still going well with Ian and Sarah...and you take care as well...love to all...and say hi to Ian for me...xxoo
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Hi Sandra, so good to see my sweet friend...just got back to my daughters and back on the site....
soooooooooo what is your idea???...OK!!!!...we're trying to get Joe to show himself...I'll think of something...OK!!!...feed Michael some liver...that would do it for me...this is a awesome chapter sweet girl...and very well written...love ya you...Linda xxoo
I hope all is still going well with Ian and Sarah...and you take care as well...love to all...and say hi to Ian for me...xxoo
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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How wonderful to see you again, Linda, I've missed you. I hope you had a wonderful time with your family.
Thank you so very much for the lovely 6 stars, you are a star yourself and your reviews are always 10 stars to me. Veronica will be discussing the 'idea' with Mildred and James n the next part, but Veronica will.... (LOL)
Ian and Sarah still doing well, they are thinking positively which is the best way to go. At least they are happier. How are you doing now? I have you in my prayers too. Biggest hugs, my dear friend, so pleased you are back on site again. Love you lots! Sandra xxxxx
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it was a good trip...but sad at times too...my folks are getting soooo old...neither can see to good...and it breaks my heart...my dad is the worse...and he is watching mom...my brother tried to get them to move in with him...but they both through a fit...so the family takes turn watching over them...and getting them to the doctors...they do get around...dad still works the land...just little things...and the neighbors help them to...my brother lets him drive his truck on his land...but he can't leave it...it still helps him feel useful...
I am so glad sweet angel that Ian and Sarah are doing well...they are so in my thoughts...and you as well my sweet friend...
you are soooo very... welcome ...always...so lets see what happens...off to try and catch up...loveeeeeeeeeee to you all...Linda xxoo hi to Ian for me...
Comment from rwilliam
I dropped them on the bed and jumped on beside them, grabbing my reading glasses off the bedside cabinet.--LOVED the visual of this line. Something I could see myself doing. :-)
WOW, this was such a well written ,visual chapter. I mean it. I felt like I was right there in that house, in that bed with your characters. I saw and felt it all. Such amazing writing and what an intriguing story line LOVE IT! I could see this as a movie someday! Fingers crossed. :-) Well done, my friend! Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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I dropped them on the bed and jumped on beside them, grabbing my reading glasses off the bedside cabinet.--LOVED the visual of this line. Something I could see myself doing. :-)
WOW, this was such a well written ,visual chapter. I mean it. I felt like I was right there in that house, in that bed with your characters. I saw and felt it all. Such amazing writing and what an intriguing story line LOVE IT! I could see this as a movie someday! Fingers crossed. :-) Well done, my friend! Well done!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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What an amazing review, thank you so very much! You've quite made my day and to top it off you have given me the lovely six stars! Thank you!!!! Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I saw no errors only fantastic writing, this is superb so readable and enjoyable with an exciting story line that kept me hooked. Really amazing, fantastic read, kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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I saw no errors only fantastic writing, this is superb so readable and enjoyable with an exciting story line that kept me hooked. Really amazing, fantastic read, kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Meia. I'm really pleased you are enjoying my story. Big hugs! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from kathleenspalding
Well written and interesting chapter. Good, high stakes. Your beginning notes let me jump into the story and know what's going on. Easy to follow and kept me reading from start to finish.
Suggestions & 1 typo
The thought that my precious son might not even be able to hear me made me inwardly squirm. = telling not showing. Use her senses/body - tears stinging dry red eyes? (clamp analogy) squeezing heart/throat... for dramatic impact
giggle more, he picked - comma splice
His mouth closed, but the look he gave me almost made me laugh out loud. Michael sullenly looked (might want to change one of the 'look/looked')
That's it. You have a good, interesting premise going on here. Good luck with your book!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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Well written and interesting chapter. Good, high stakes. Your beginning notes let me jump into the story and know what's going on. Easy to follow and kept me reading from start to finish.
Suggestions & 1 typo
The thought that my precious son might not even be able to hear me made me inwardly squirm. = telling not showing. Use her senses/body - tears stinging dry red eyes? (clamp analogy) squeezing heart/throat... for dramatic impact
giggle more, he picked - comma splice
His mouth closed, but the look he gave me almost made me laugh out loud. Michael sullenly looked (might want to change one of the 'look/looked')
That's it. You have a good, interesting premise going on here. Good luck with your book!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, Kathleen, for this lovely and most helpful review. I really appreciated that. I shall go and sort them all out. Big hugs! :) Sandra xx
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You're welcome. Hugs back :-)
Comment from F. Wehr3
Very good continuation to the story. I'm not sure where you're going, but I'm coming along for the ride.
It had given me immense comfort laying in the dark after James had fallen asleep beside me.-- I believe lying is correct.
this chocolate business is doing me 'ed in."--I couldn't figure out this contraction for Mildred. What is she saying?
Well done, Sandra. Looking forward to more,
Russell
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Very good continuation to the story. I'm not sure where you're going, but I'm coming along for the ride.
It had given me immense comfort laying in the dark after James had fallen asleep beside me.-- I believe lying is correct.
this chocolate business is doing me 'ed in."--I couldn't figure out this contraction for Mildred. What is she saying?
Well done, Sandra. Looking forward to more,
Russell
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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LOL, I'm sorry, Russell, that's the way Mildred speaks, and many Londoners. ...'donin' me 'ed in... (translation= Doing my head in,) It's just an expression we use when things are getting on top of us. I'll correct the spelling error with 'laying/lying. thank you for finding that, my friend. And a big thank you for reading and the review you gave me. I really appreciate you staying with me. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Janilou
An interesting story. It was a little hard to figure out what was going on, but the story pulled me in, so I'm going to bookcase and go back to read from the beginning. I love this type of story. LOL
I didn't find any errors.
The only thing I have to suggest is:
"Where my chooky egg 'n soldiers, Mummy?" Michael asked as he looked up and gave me one of his disarming grins and picked up his teaspoon. James and Mildred (gave) me an encouraging smile as I (gave) my boy a kiss on his cheek.
gave/gave
It pulled me out of the story. For a smoother feel, I would suggest:
"Where my chooky egg 'n soldiers, Mummy?" Michael asked as he looked up and gave me one of his disarming grins and picked up his teaspoon. James and Mildred gave me an encouraging smile as I kissed my boy on his cheek.
Otherwise, a great story. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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An interesting story. It was a little hard to figure out what was going on, but the story pulled me in, so I'm going to bookcase and go back to read from the beginning. I love this type of story. LOL
I didn't find any errors.
The only thing I have to suggest is:
"Where my chooky egg 'n soldiers, Mummy?" Michael asked as he looked up and gave me one of his disarming grins and picked up his teaspoon. James and Mildred (gave) me an encouraging smile as I (gave) my boy a kiss on his cheek.
gave/gave
It pulled me out of the story. For a smoother feel, I would suggest:
"Where my chooky egg 'n soldiers, Mummy?" Michael asked as he looked up and gave me one of his disarming grins and picked up his teaspoon. James and Mildred gave me an encouraging smile as I kissed my boy on his cheek.
Otherwise, a great story. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Goodness!! I didn't notice that, and I'm usually so careful when it comes to putting the same words in the same sentence, and you found THREE! I'll be hot-footing it in to change that, thank you so very much!! I'm really pleased you are going to join me and I hope you will always point out anything you don't feel is right. I love reviews like that. They are so helpful. Thanks again, Janilou, and big hugs. :) Sandra xxx
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Don't feel bad. I do the exact same thing all the time! LOL
Comment from Aussie
Did you get my snail-mail? I find your stories interesting because of who I am and also, we are told to deal with wrongs whilst we are on earth (Karma) otherwise we will have to deal with it on the other side. Thanks for sharing your book of intelligent writing! XXK
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Did you get my snail-mail? I find your stories interesting because of who I am and also, we are told to deal with wrongs whilst we are on earth (Karma) otherwise we will have to deal with it on the other side. Thanks for sharing your book of intelligent writing! XXK
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Hi, Kay, I wondered what you were on about, Snail-mail! LOL. It came today! I thought you meant an e-mail, and had a look. Then, when I came home from the gym, your letter was there. How strange. What a lovely place to live in, Kay, you are really lucky. I'll have to look out some of our leaflets so you can see the beautiful countryside we have here. Graham and I love to walk, (when it stops raining!) Thanks for sending me these, it will give me a better idea of where you are. :))
Thank you for the lovely review, my friend, lol, I nearly forgot about that as I was looking at the pictures of where you live, I wondered if Pallas Street was there, but it isn't. When I've won the lottery, I'll be sure to visit! Big hugs my friend!! Love to Lea and Toby, and of course, you!. :) Sandra xx
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G'day Mate! Glad you got the brochures. We have a unique lifestyle. The author of Mary Poppins (P.L. Travers) was born in our City, Her father ran the bank (still here, not a bank now.) We celebrate with a Festival each year. Mary Poppins Festival is a highlight of our year. Glad you finally found the snail in the mail. Ha, Ha. Love, Kay XXXX
Comment from Wendy Winter
Just like a man to think of pleasure when their child is possessed. There is so much going on / character development / plot development. Jumping in at this point I had to read it several times to grasp it all. Love how you left us with a cliff hanger. I have no choice but to follow now. My guess is it will be possible!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Just like a man to think of pleasure when their child is possessed. There is so much going on / character development / plot development. Jumping in at this point I had to read it several times to grasp it all. Love how you left us with a cliff hanger. I have no choice but to follow now. My guess is it will be possible!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, Wendy, and welcome on board. I love it that you enjoyed it just by 'jumping in' and want to read more. That is such a compliment. Thank you. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Another good chapter,Sandra.
-James had a good idea of
looking into the missionary
he had learned about, and Ver.
plans to go to the library.
-Their combined efforts may turn up with
some good clues about Joe.
-You brought in a bit of tension as
everyone waits to hear what Michael
will sound like, and fortunately, it
was just like himself!
-Now we wait to see what Ver.'s
"ridiculous and totally absurd"
idea will be and result in.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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-Another good chapter,Sandra.
-James had a good idea of
looking into the missionary
he had learned about, and Ver.
plans to go to the library.
-Their combined efforts may turn up with
some good clues about Joe.
-You brought in a bit of tension as
everyone waits to hear what Michael
will sound like, and fortunately, it
was just like himself!
-Now we wait to see what Ver.'s
"ridiculous and totally absurd"
idea will be and result in.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, my dear friend. The idea would be ridiculous in any other situation, but I'm not saying what it is, you'll soon see. LOL. They are getting closer to finding a way to help Joe, which in turn will help Frances, the little albino boy. Thank you. Pam, this is a lovely review, and a big hug again, for the 6 stars. :) Sandra xxxxxx
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You are welcome for the stars and the review, Sandra. This idea should be very interesting! Characters like Joe and the little boy getting help is always a good thing, and I think this group of Ver., Mildred, and James are doing very well🙂
