The Littlest Dragon
A Children's story about wisdom and courage, told in verse.11 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Analie,
For the littlest dragon was smartest of all, for a crown he won with the mere loss of a claw. Milton traveled abroad and ended up marrying an Indian princess. They had many children but Milton never returned to his ancestral land.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Dear Analie,
For the littlest dragon was smartest of all, for a crown he won with the mere loss of a claw. Milton traveled abroad and ended up marrying an Indian princess. They had many children but Milton never returned to his ancestral land.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Thanks for the fun review ... Blessings, Analie
Comment from Daniel Silverhawk
Its a wonderful story. I really enjoy writing such stories myself.
I saw one area needing a word...
"Until of a sudden,
on the following eve,"
Should it read "Until all of a sudden"??
I like the way you had the littlest dragon remember his manners when he belched. That goes a long way in children's stories. I wish only that the dragon did not need to lose a claw. If only they could have solved their dilemmas without violence.
Very well written. The script don't makes it a little tough to read but a very good story none the less
Thanks for sharing. It would make a great children's book. I too an trying to publish children's books. If you have any suggestions for me, I would love to hear them. Signed, Daniel Silverhawk
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Its a wonderful story. I really enjoy writing such stories myself.
I saw one area needing a word...
"Until of a sudden,
on the following eve,"
Should it read "Until all of a sudden"??
I like the way you had the littlest dragon remember his manners when he belched. That goes a long way in children's stories. I wish only that the dragon did not need to lose a claw. If only they could have solved their dilemmas without violence.
Very well written. The script don't makes it a little tough to read but a very good story none the less
Thanks for sharing. It would make a great children's book. I too an trying to publish children's books. If you have any suggestions for me, I would love to hear them. Signed, Daniel Silverhawk
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Thanks so much for the review!! Blessings, Analie
Comment from nancyrabbrose
This is an amazing tale of the dragon and the little prince. Your original artwork is wonderful. What a talented lady you are!!!
Well done. This poem has a good lesson to it.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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This is an amazing tale of the dragon and the little prince. Your original artwork is wonderful. What a talented lady you are!!!
Well done. This poem has a good lesson to it.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review! Blessings, Analie
Comment from sharonlshelley
a very cute poem about a dragon i really enjoyed reading it the picture fitted well and it all works you painted the picture yourself you are talented:) thanks for sharing
Sharon
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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a very cute poem about a dragon i really enjoyed reading it the picture fitted well and it all works you painted the picture yourself you are talented:) thanks for sharing
Sharon
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thanks!! :) Blessings, Analie
Comment from nbonner
Great poem! I loved the imagery used and how the poem flowed so well. I liked the ending where the princes and dragons came together and united. Thank you for sharing your story.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Great poem! I loved the imagery used and how the poem flowed so well. I liked the ending where the princes and dragons came together and united. Thank you for sharing your story.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thanks for the review! Blessings, Analie
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Analie
What a lovely, meaningful poem.
Which describes the scene with such vivid imagination.
The story is fantastic and morally wonderful which can be enjoyed by any age.
and a great picture to accompany
Mitchell.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Hi Analie
What a lovely, meaningful poem.
Which describes the scene with such vivid imagination.
The story is fantastic and morally wonderful which can be enjoyed by any age.
and a great picture to accompany
Mitchell.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you Mitchell ... it was fun to write. Analie
Comment from AnnieDawn
This should be published and I hope that you do. It is a wonderful poem that I would not hesitate to read to my grandchildren. I loved it. I would suggest you go through and work on a couple of areas like the one I am going to point out and rearrange or change wording so that the flow is better, but only a couple of areas need this done. Otherwise it is perfect.
(For when it comes to princes
and kingdoms and kings,
compared to wisdom,
strength and size are trivial things.)
I don't know how you would want to make this flow better and still capture your meaning but if you have someone read through with you, then you may be able to see what I am pointing out. Great job and I loved it.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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This should be published and I hope that you do. It is a wonderful poem that I would not hesitate to read to my grandchildren. I loved it. I would suggest you go through and work on a couple of areas like the one I am going to point out and rearrange or change wording so that the flow is better, but only a couple of areas need this done. Otherwise it is perfect.
(For when it comes to princes
and kingdoms and kings,
compared to wisdom,
strength and size are trivial things.)
I don't know how you would want to make this flow better and still capture your meaning but if you have someone read through with you, then you may be able to see what I am pointing out. Great job and I loved it.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you Annie! Yes, I know that is a rough spot. : ( I've tried many times, but I just can't come up with anything better! Any suggestions? (IT actually used to be worse!)
Blessings, Analie
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So Annie, I just decided to leave that one stanza out ... what do you think?? I have to tell you, I soooo appreciate you telling me that was a rough spot (even though I already felt it, I suppose I hoped I was wrong!) and helping me to make the poem better. I am going to publish it, so all the editing I can get it deeply appreciated.
Blessings, Analie
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well written poem depicts that no matter how small a person may be that does not mean they are not capable of achieving many things.
You are correct, children will enjoy this poem.
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Well written poem depicts that no matter how small a person may be that does not mean they are not capable of achieving many things.
You are correct, children will enjoy this poem.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you Brett! Blessings, Analie
Comment from Possummagic
What a lovely story and of course with a moral to be learnt. Kindness begets kindness. Consideration is a must. You should write a children's book. I'd certainly buy a copy for my nephew.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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What a lovely story and of course with a moral to be learnt. Kindness begets kindness. Consideration is a must. You should write a children's book. I'd certainly buy a copy for my nephew.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you! I am actually publishing. It is almost ready ... I have quite a few illustrations, but feel it needs a couple more, so when they are finished ... Publication!
Blessings, Analie
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Congratulations. Should have done this 40 years ago.
Comment from RodG
This is a delightful story young and old can really enjoy. I love how you characterize both Gilly and Milton and allow them to converse as young gentlemen. Moreover, the LESSONS learned by each (courage, cooperation, peace is better than war ) are timeless. The poem, though long, reads easily and the rhymes are well chosen. I truly enjoyed this and also admire your skill as an artist. Rod
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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This is a delightful story young and old can really enjoy. I love how you characterize both Gilly and Milton and allow them to converse as young gentlemen. Moreover, the LESSONS learned by each (courage, cooperation, peace is better than war ) are timeless. The poem, though long, reads easily and the rhymes are well chosen. I truly enjoyed this and also admire your skill as an artist. Rod
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Thank you Rod! What a lovely review!
Blessings, Analie
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My pleasure.
