Yo ho ho and all that
nasty little boy pirate fantasy7 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Very brutal days and that's what you've shown with this captain, but they say everyone has a soft spot and you showed us his with the women let go in a skiff with some provisions.Alls well that ends well. A good tale of the high seas, well told in the language of the times,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Very brutal days and that's what you've shown with this captain, but they say everyone has a soft spot and you showed us his with the women let go in a skiff with some provisions.Alls well that ends well. A good tale of the high seas, well told in the language of the times,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thanks very much for reading and reviewing my sea story...No, Farmer O'Hara did not have a daughter named Scarlett...
Comment from damommy
Very exciting and nerve-wracking at the same time. All the things they did. I thought the captain had an unusual sense of humor, and found myself chuckling along with him.
Very good writing. I didn't see a thing to change. 8-)
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Very exciting and nerve-wracking at the same time. All the things they did. I thought the captain had an unusual sense of humor, and found myself chuckling along with him.
Very good writing. I didn't see a thing to change. 8-)
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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I really tried to get into that rude crude seafarer's hard head and the bloodthirstiness of the buccaneer days and keep the length reasonable...thank you very much for reading and reviewing!
Comment from giraffmang
hi there,
not as illiterate as he would first appear. I totally bought into this. the 'voice' is strong and engaging which lets you away with a lot. It's great characterisation.
same tree as the Governor, himself, also - not sure you need the first comma following Governor.
Then he pulled a dagger and slashed the second mate, so we swabbed and charged his rectum with powder, fuse, and four-pounder ball, and shot his lofty stepmother with him. Most untidy. - erm, is it wrong that I found this hilarious?
slaves and serfs,and a good deal hornier. - insert a space after the comma.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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hi there,
not as illiterate as he would first appear. I totally bought into this. the 'voice' is strong and engaging which lets you away with a lot. It's great characterisation.
same tree as the Governor, himself, also - not sure you need the first comma following Governor.
Then he pulled a dagger and slashed the second mate, so we swabbed and charged his rectum with powder, fuse, and four-pounder ball, and shot his lofty stepmother with him. Most untidy. - erm, is it wrong that I found this hilarious?
slaves and serfs,and a good deal hornier. - insert a space after the comma.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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My pirate captain fancies himself a wit, hoping for chuckles. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my tall pirate tale.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written adventurous story. Boys dream about becoming a sailor to see the world while working on the ship. They soon find out it is very hard work and less adventure.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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A very well-written adventurous story. Boys dream about becoming a sailor to see the world while working on the ship. They soon find out it is very hard work and less adventure.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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You know, people whine about the cost of the space program, not even thinking of GPS for ships at sea or cell phones. Those
old days were tough! Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Ogden
I don't know about that "little boy" pirate fantasy claim. Precociousness has its limits. Some authors don't, and that's certainly one of the reasons some of us are writers.
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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I don't know about that "little boy" pirate fantasy claim. Precociousness has its limits. Some authors don't, and that's certainly one of the reasons some of us are writers.
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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More research and less Sabatini and a longer post would have been more satisfying, but it was long for FS as is. I am
very pleased that you thought it a fiver.
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I found the rating difficult to determine. A four would have been an insult to your talent and dedication to the work, and uncalled for.
Comment from c_lucas
I found your story to be worthy of its penmanship and it held my interest. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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I found your story to be worthy of its penmanship and it held my interest. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Rafael Sabatini and Robert Louis Stevenson stories fired me up when I was young, and I felt called to try one a bit like their adventures. I opted for the raunchier modern prose. I am tickled pink you felt it worth a six! Thank you for reading.
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My pleasure. LIJ. Charlie
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Multiple run-on sentences that would read much better if broken into shorter, concise ones instead. For instance, the first paragraph is actually nothing more than two lengthy sentences.
Touch of humor thrown in for good measure though.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Multiple run-on sentences that would read much better if broken into shorter, concise ones instead. For instance, the first paragraph is actually nothing more than two lengthy sentences.
Touch of humor thrown in for good measure though.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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My hapless captain is a virtual illiterate, his account strewn with SPAG and adolescent humor, with the true grimness of the times barely peeking through. Maybe I'll add this as a note! Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
