Beneath the Surface
Unrequited love46 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
Silence is golden and looks are worth a thousand words untold. People say a lot when they don't say anything at all. The body talks for itself and then some.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Silence is golden and looks are worth a thousand words untold. People say a lot when they don't say anything at all. The body talks for itself and then some.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thanks, CRW. I appreciate your review and comment. Best wishes, Tony
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Smiles
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Tony
Really enjoyed this beautiful poem, which flowed effortlessly,
lovely rhythm and lines throughout, stitched fantastically well
which enables your words to tell a story of this smile and eyes.
I particularly enjoyed the imagery shown which paints such a vivid picture in the mind......an excellent poem, that was a pleasure to read.
Mitchell.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Hi Tony
Really enjoyed this beautiful poem, which flowed effortlessly,
lovely rhythm and lines throughout, stitched fantastically well
which enables your words to tell a story of this smile and eyes.
I particularly enjoyed the imagery shown which paints such a vivid picture in the mind......an excellent poem, that was a pleasure to read.
Mitchell.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Mitchell. I very much appreciate your review and comments about the imagery. I found the photograph online recently and thought it worthy of a poem. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from damommy
Who is the half-smile for, indeed? Lovely wording that tells me a lot about the speaker in the poem. "Flecks of green in those grey eyes" is lovely.
This has a very soft sound when reading aloud. Also, comparing her to a mermaid who beguiles men was a good touch.
All this love he has for her and she doesn't know he's alive. Poor thing.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Who is the half-smile for, indeed? Lovely wording that tells me a lot about the speaker in the poem. "Flecks of green in those grey eyes" is lovely.
This has a very soft sound when reading aloud. Also, comparing her to a mermaid who beguiles men was a good touch.
All this love he has for her and she doesn't know he's alive. Poor thing.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Yvonne. I very much appreciate your lovely review and six stars - also the comment about the soft feel of the words when read aloud. I found the photograph online recently and thought it worthy of a poem. Glad you enjoyed it! The poor fellow - he must have been a poet - all words and no action! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from jaded831
Great reading, your poem sparks a number of images, and touches the heart and soul. You painted a picture with your words, but the portrait gave it a nice touch. I believe I liked the description of the eyes best, I felt drawn in.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Great reading, your poem sparks a number of images, and touches the heart and soul. You painted a picture with your words, but the portrait gave it a nice touch. I believe I liked the description of the eyes best, I felt drawn in.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Jaded. I very much appreciate your review and comments. I found the photograph online recently and thought it worthy of a poem. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from livelylinda
Tony: this poem should have a six plus but out of them. Just when I think you can't get any better at writing, here you go again leaving me almost speechless! Beautiful work, young man! Bravo!! Linda
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Tony: this poem should have a six plus but out of them. Just when I think you can't get any better at writing, here you go again leaving me almost speechless! Beautiful work, young man! Bravo!! Linda
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Linda. I very much appreciate your lovely review and assertion of six-worthiness. I found the photograph online recently and thought it worthy of a poem. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from artemis53
You found the picture, she called to you and I am not surprised. Few portraits stand the test of time but this was made to elicit a spark of hope from those once dampened dreams.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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You found the picture, she called to you and I am not surprised. Few portraits stand the test of time but this was made to elicit a spark of hope from those once dampened dreams.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Artemis. I appreciate your review and comment. I thought it a remarkable picture and well worth a poem. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
An incredibly well written poem, Tony! Your unique choice of wording creates most original imagery for your reader. I especially love "in caves beyond the petals of the damask rose" ... lovely, lovely! He is still infatuated with this lovely lass, who he compares to a beautiful mermaid, but, alas, she wants no part of it.
Excellent abba rhyme scheme, and lovely 's' sounds to bring a softness to your write. I really enjoyed reading this! Best wishes for the contest. ~ ~ Connie
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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An incredibly well written poem, Tony! Your unique choice of wording creates most original imagery for your reader. I especially love "in caves beyond the petals of the damask rose" ... lovely, lovely! He is still infatuated with this lovely lass, who he compares to a beautiful mermaid, but, alas, she wants no part of it.
Excellent abba rhyme scheme, and lovely 's' sounds to bring a softness to your write. I really enjoyed reading this! Best wishes for the contest. ~ ~ Connie
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Connie. I am delighted by your review and six stars. Thanks, too, for noticing the softness of the words. I found the photograph online recently and thought it worthy of a poem. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
I think its a great poem in a kind of melancholy voice that speaks in vivid images of the distance in love, the difficulty in getting behind the physical beauty of the face, to get to know the emotions of a person. The differences between physical beauty and emotional beauty. In your poem, you describe both with a reverence, in lots of color and tranquility. estory
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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I think its a great poem in a kind of melancholy voice that speaks in vivid images of the distance in love, the difficulty in getting behind the physical beauty of the face, to get to know the emotions of a person. The differences between physical beauty and emotional beauty. In your poem, you describe both with a reverence, in lots of color and tranquility. estory
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thanks, estory. I very much appreciate your review and comments about getting behind the facade to find the real person beneath. I found this enigmatic photograph online recently and thought it worthy of a poem. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Dean Kuch
Lovely poem, Tony. well rhymed and metered as all of your poetry is.
However, I think there's something decidedly fishy about dear Nereid and her impish half-grin. It's also been rumored that she has 49 sisters who are just as beautiful and mysterious.
There have been some ladies in my life who when they looked at you it almost felt as if you were in a trance.
Sea nymphs, perhaps?
I'd really rather not know...
~Dean
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Lovely poem, Tony. well rhymed and metered as all of your poetry is.
However, I think there's something decidedly fishy about dear Nereid and her impish half-grin. It's also been rumored that she has 49 sisters who are just as beautiful and mysterious.
There have been some ladies in my life who when they looked at you it almost felt as if you were in a trance.
Sea nymphs, perhaps?
I'd really rather not know...
~Dean
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Dean. I very much appreciate your review and comments. Fifty of them! Poor old Poseidon wouldn't have know which way to look - the lucky fellow! Oh, to be a God! But, alas, only a poet - all words and no action! Best wishes, Tony
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Hahaha, right you are, Tony.
You're very welcome.
Cheers,
~Dean :)
Comment from royowen
I think that mysterious smile and look has captured the imagination and has provided many poems, and indeed song, "Mona Lisa smile" being one I remember. Beautifully written, as usual, with the unusual abba rhyming, don't see much today. The language you use is a marvellous thing to read Tony. Another unusual love poem form, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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I think that mysterious smile and look has captured the imagination and has provided many poems, and indeed song, "Mona Lisa smile" being one I remember. Beautifully written, as usual, with the unusual abba rhyming, don't see much today. The language you use is a marvellous thing to read Tony. Another unusual love poem form, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Roy. I very much appreciate your review and comments. I found the photograph online recently and thought it worth a poem. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
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Welcome Tony,
