Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

This is lovely, it sounds like you have someone special in your life.I like the way the poem is formatted and it has a rhythm to it that is pleasing.Thank you for sharing this .

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

thank you so much for the lovely review. I do indeed have someone special - he has been with me through thick and thin for almost thirty-four years,

~patty~

Comment from nbonner

Excellent

I loved the passion in this poem and how it flowed. Such a strong message in so little words. Great poem. Thank you for sharing and good luck on the contest

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi;
thank you so much for the lovely review of this poem. I appreciate your time.

~patty~

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

This must be about your wonderful hubby, you lucky lady. Yep, those sheets tell the tale. It must have been a great night. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi Cindy;
thank you so much for stopping by to read this somewhat 'naughty' poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it,

~patty~

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

A whitney poem's is short and sweet, but your words
speak volumes, Patty - and the rumpled sheets speak
of what you didn't mention.

Great little poem - good luck with the contest, my friend.

Margaret

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017

Hi Margaret;
thank you so much for the lovely review, my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed it,

~patty~

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This is cleverly done. It could be an account of the night's events, or be a request to all those lovings things to "make my name sound like sunrise" -- a beautiful request or statement whichever way you like to look at it.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017

Hi Jim; thank you so much for the lovely review. I greatly appreciate your time to read,

~patty~

Comment from apky

Excellent

Wow, this is the sort of thing I try to do -
write something sensual, erotic but with such
delicate subtlety that it drips with the sensuousness.
And leaves the readers with vivid images when they see the...

Rumpled sheets tell the night's tale

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017

Hi Aki;
thank you so much for the lovely review. Your comments mean a lot to me because I know I could never write the scenes you do - I just have to hint at them,

~patty~

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Hi Patty, Fun and unique love poem in good Whitney form.

I am wondering if

Make my name
sound like sunrise

should maybe be

make(s) my name
sound like sunrise.

I don't know though.

Good luck in the contest.

teresa

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017

Hi Teresa; thank you for the suggestion; I did go back and make it.

Thank you for reading, reviewing, and taking the time to comment,

~patty~

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is an excellent poem that I enjoyed reading. The form is interesting and I think you've done a great job with it. Yes, a love poem, and a worthy entry for the contest. Good luck in it. Marilyn

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017

Hi Marilyn; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and I appreciate your well wishes,

~patty~

Comment from Bucketlist

Excellent

I must admit "Night Work" as a title conjured up a different thought for me. However, not to insult you, the poem involved a sensitive lover which would be unusual in my line of thoughI The style choice was interesting, I had never heard of whitney style before. A beautiful poem, good luck in the contest.
Hugs, Trisha

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017

Hi Trisha; my husband questioned the title, too. He said it conjures up images of working with lanterns.

LOL!

Thanks for reading,

~patty~

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, Party,

A very romantic poem about your love. It's a beautiful declaration of love to your husband. He must be very happy to receive such poem. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017

Hi Gypsy; I love writing poems that have so much meaning without saying everything - the words just conjure up images,

~patty~