Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

Your poem sounds like a lovers whisper hit the mark and ignited a fire that could and would not be put out until it burned itself out and left both parties sated : ) Nice!

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for the wonderful review. This was a joy to write,

~patty~

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

wonderful love poem, Patty.
I love "makes my name sound like sunrise."
You certainly used every syllable in a meaningful manner, making each one count. And he "sho" sounds attractive!! :)
congratulations on being recognized, and for winning story of the month! good job!
pome lover

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for the congratulations - its my first recognition from the 'committee.' I'm glad you enjoyed this poem; I had a great deal of fun writing it,

~patty~

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

I love the Whitney form, I haven't written one in years. This is also a lovely love poem entry, love the 'makes my name sound like sunrise'...beautiful. Blessings...

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hello; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I enjoyed writing this poem a great deal.

~patty~

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

What a great little form! I like how you started each of the first three lines with an adjective and the next three start with verb. I like how much is said without saying by describing the rumpled sheets. The word "brings" made me stop because I normally hear, "makes me alive." But other than that, told the tale well!

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for your time to read and review this poem. I'm very happy with the way it turned out,

~patty~

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

Marvelous work with this one. Awesome visual and emotional imagery. This is a terrific entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best. Keep up the great work.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi Sasha; thank you for the lovely review and well wishes. I had so much fun writing this bit of naughtiness,

~patty~

Comment from His Grayness

Excellent

I would consider this work a sincere "whoooeee" For the obviously delightful nightwork that was mentioned, and the overall excellent delivery of the message and total packaging of this work! I cannot suggest anything to improve this work! Except: well maybe a cold towel HIS GRAYNESS

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi Vance; thank you so much for the smile you put on my face. I hope you were able to find a cold towel.

Have a wonderful day, my friend,

~patty~

reply by His Grayness on 14-Aug-2017

Ok..I'm cooled down a bit now...but ohhheee, that sure was fun when the old imagination is on the run!! Vance

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Yes, the morning after the night before. Nothing stirs you up more than waking up in a bed that's been stirred up. A very good little poem. Sometimes it's the little things that tell the story.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi Thomas;
thank you so much for the lovely review. I couldn't agree with you more about 'stirred up.'

~patty~

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Patty,
This is a very romantic poem for the contest. Thanks for sharing it. You did a great job with the style of the Whitney, too. The image is perfect for your well chosen words. Best wishes in the contest. Jan

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi Jan;
thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem,

~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend this is well written you done well using this form it is a romantic poem the proof is in the crumpled sheets good luck regards Jill

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi Jill;
thank you so much for the lovely review of this poem. It was fun to write and hold onto a special memory,

~patty~

Comment from rtobaygo

Exceptional

Good afternoon, Patty

I was impressed with the elegant flow and the conjured images. As in past poems, so much was said with so few words. Enjoyed.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017

Hi Ray;
thank you so much for this lovely six star rating. This poem was so much fun to put together - and inspired by a wonderful love, too.

~patty~