Apartment Manager
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Comment from lyenochka
Great characters! Alas, for the poor hapless Mr. F. Although none of those accidents seem to keep him from paying the rent, unless he didn't have the money. Good use of the correspondence and phone calls to tell the story.
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Great characters! Alas, for the poor hapless Mr. F. Although none of those accidents seem to keep him from paying the rent, unless he didn't have the money. Good use of the correspondence and phone calls to tell the story.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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thank you!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
LOL oh this was so cute and a different entry to the contest but so unusual that it will surely be noticed. No problems I could see except a lot of laughter.
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LOL oh this was so cute and a different entry to the contest but so unusual that it will surely be noticed. No problems I could see except a lot of laughter.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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thanks a lot!
Comment from moongirlwriter
Oh my goodness. . . this is very funny but it must be read out-loud. I think everyone must know someone like Mr. F, I know I do. I really enjoyed the dialogue format but there are a couple sentence construction places that would make it flow even better if changed. Part of the humor is the similarity in the character names but they are challenging to read. Maybe if one of the character names were easier to say or read, it would help. . . fun reading. :)
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Oh my goodness. . . this is very funny but it must be read out-loud. I think everyone must know someone like Mr. F, I know I do. I really enjoyed the dialogue format but there are a couple sentence construction places that would make it flow even better if changed. Part of the humor is the similarity in the character names but they are challenging to read. Maybe if one of the character names were easier to say or read, it would help. . . fun reading. :)
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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well, thanks. If I could get the blasted font size to work. it's either huge or microscopic. cannot get it right
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Computers can be a challenge, for us all. :)
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arrgghh!
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Okay. So sorry? I hope I didn't offend you. This was only my personal opinion.
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'course not. forgotten now, what I said. It's just that I interpreted the picture to be a female. hope people get that.
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I think I got that. . .apartment manager, female and Mr. F male. My mouth just had a hard time putting both the names together on the page. :O
Comment from Thal1959
This is very well written - although I am of two minds regarding the theme. The man in the image seems to be a professional businessman. Of all the problems he might have, it is hard to believe he would always be late with the rent money - get himself into so much trouble - and then end up hospitalized. But just as much as he is a dolt, there is the heroine Janice would goes through the whole thing almost a bit light-headedly. Makes for a fun story.
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This is very well written - although I am of two minds regarding the theme. The man in the image seems to be a professional businessman. Of all the problems he might have, it is hard to believe he would always be late with the rent money - get himself into so much trouble - and then end up hospitalized. But just as much as he is a dolt, there is the heroine Janice would goes through the whole thing almost a bit light-headedly. Makes for a fun story.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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the imagae is a woman - Janice
this is her character study.
I cannot seem to get the size of the font correct - driving me crazy
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Had me fooled - looks like a man's silhouette. Maybe that's why they chose it... it works either way.
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i sure hope so
Comment from Mustang Patty
A great entry for the Character contest. It seems that Janice has tried absolutely everything - I'm pretty sure most landlords or property managers would give him so much slack. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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A great entry for the Character contest. It seems that Janice has tried absolutely everything - I'm pretty sure most landlords or property managers would give him so much slack. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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thanks. can't seem to get font size right - sorry
Comment from Auto-Manic
Mr. Furberger? That in itself is worth five stars, but it sounds like Mr. Fubar. If I didn't know this type, it would be a hard read, but, I think everybody has known this type, sad in someways, funny in another.
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Mr. Furberger? That in itself is worth five stars, but it sounds like Mr. Fubar. If I didn't know this type, it would be a hard read, but, I think everybody has known this type, sad in someways, funny in another.
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
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I can't get the blasted font size corrected. keep trying and it is either microscopic or huge
Comment from Possummagic
Well written. Very entertaining. I recognised the silhouette then realised that you had an entry for the contest. I wish you luck. You've pit a lot of effort into this piece.
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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Well written. Very entertaining. I recognised the silhouette then realised that you had an entry for the contest. I wish you luck. You've pit a lot of effort into this piece.
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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thank you - just can't seem to get the font size corrected
