The Products of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Jenny's Plan"...the story of Jenny and Ron
43 total reviews
Comment from mmonaghan777
I like this. Keep up the good writing. This is a story I have to know the end to. Her emotions are felt and sympathy keeps rising to give to her.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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I like this. Keep up the good writing. This is a story I have to know the end to. Her emotions are felt and sympathy keeps rising to give to her.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Hi there; thank you for continuing to follow and support this story. I think you will enjoy what is to come,
~patty~
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Patty,
Don't ya just love that "See ya around." like they were strangers who hadn't done the dance and just wham bam thank you mammm that'll be $100 ... oooh was so mad about this! lol ok now getting to the rest of it ...:)
Ut ohhh what did that expensive dude think? You are a cash cow? omg !
Like your GP better and those good ole Catholics ... always willing and able as we say in the pews ...
Great chapter Patty. I'm so glad I haven't missed any ... :) xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Hi Patty,
Don't ya just love that "See ya around." like they were strangers who hadn't done the dance and just wham bam thank you mammm that'll be $100 ... oooh was so mad about this! lol ok now getting to the rest of it ...:)
Ut ohhh what did that expensive dude think? You are a cash cow? omg !
Like your GP better and those good ole Catholics ... always willing and able as we say in the pews ...
Great chapter Patty. I'm so glad I haven't missed any ... :) xoxo deborah
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for your continuing support of this story. There's more to come - stay tuned,
~patty~
Comment from country ranch writer
Having to make a big decision to give a child up for adoption we can couldn't even imagine what she was going through let alone feeling at the time.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Having to make a big decision to give a child up for adoption we can couldn't even imagine what she was going through let alone feeling at the time.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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thankyou for the kind review,
~patty~
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Patty.
This was a good chapter. Poor Jenny! She's in such an awful situation.
I offer two suggestions, but you decide:
Suggestions:
No longer the caring physician, he seemed to focus [on only] the baby
No longer the caring physician, he seemed to focus only on the baby / swapping ON & ONLY around reads smoother.
Everyone was [nervous], and both Rita and Jenny laughed [nervously.] / repetition: NERVOUS
Everyone was TENSE WHILE Rita and Jenny laughed nervously. / delete: BOTH. It seems redundant
Nicole
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi, Patty.
This was a good chapter. Poor Jenny! She's in such an awful situation.
I offer two suggestions, but you decide:
Suggestions:
No longer the caring physician, he seemed to focus [on only] the baby
No longer the caring physician, he seemed to focus only on the baby / swapping ON & ONLY around reads smoother.
Everyone was [nervous], and both Rita and Jenny laughed [nervously.] / repetition: NERVOUS
Everyone was TENSE WHILE Rita and Jenny laughed nervously. / delete: BOTH. It seems redundant
Nicole
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi Nicole; thank you so much for the suggestions; I put both of them into the story. I appreciate your kind and thorough review.
~patty~
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It sounds perfect, but Jenny hasn't seen her baby yet, that is going to be when the real heartache sets in. It's such a shame it came to this through a silly misunderstanding, not solely because of Ron's step sister, he should have gone after Jenny, or at least, introduced her when she went to see him that night. You are doing a great job writing this story. Well done. :) Sandra x
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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It sounds perfect, but Jenny hasn't seen her baby yet, that is going to be when the real heartache sets in. It's such a shame it came to this through a silly misunderstanding, not solely because of Ron's step sister, he should have gone after Jenny, or at least, introduced her when she went to see him that night. You are doing a great job writing this story. Well done. :) Sandra x
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi Sandra; thank you so much for continuing to read along. Jenny has a long road of heartache in front of her. I hope you will enjoy the rest of the story as I post it,
~patty~
Comment from doggymad
Hi Patty, it is good to have the next chapter of Jenny's story.
I felt relieved when Ron didn't push her on what way the money would be used. I believe the choice she made was incredibly heartbreaking. Knowing where the baby was going was good, but knowing and having no contact is torture
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi Patty, it is good to have the next chapter of Jenny's story.
I felt relieved when Ron didn't push her on what way the money would be used. I believe the choice she made was incredibly heartbreaking. Knowing where the baby was going was good, but knowing and having no contact is torture
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi Freda; truth is - Jenny did have contact with the family. She was there for several important occasions, including his high school graduation.
Thank you for continuing to read, and I hope you will like the remaining chapters - soon to come,
~patty~
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That is amazing Patty. I was adopted and even my adoptive mother didn't have any information about my birth circumstances.
hugs
Freda
Comment from royowen
I'm still grieving for the misunderstanding development of this most unnecessary and tragic break up of the parents, and the problematic life that Jenny seems to think is a solution. No.1 the kid will want to find and know it's rejecting mother, and 2 the natural pining of the natural parents, wondering about what "might of been". But well done, Patty, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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I'm still grieving for the misunderstanding development of this most unnecessary and tragic break up of the parents, and the problematic life that Jenny seems to think is a solution. No.1 the kid will want to find and know it's rejecting mother, and 2 the natural pining of the natural parents, wondering about what "might of been". But well done, Patty, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi Roy; thank you for continuing to read and yes, there was so much pain for so many years. I think you will find a lot of it explored in the coming chapters.
I appreciate your thoughtful reviews,
~patty~
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This story is excellently written, my question is, when someone gives a baby up, don't they have to do through serviced to not know the parents? Just curious.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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This story is excellently written, my question is, when someone gives a baby up, don't they have to do through serviced to not know the parents? Just curious.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi Barb; open adoptions are common, but not preferred. There was a great deal of legal wrangling I didn't describe; Rita and Bill needed to be certified as foster parents so they could take the baby home from the hospital, Jenny and Ron had to sign away their rights, etc.
Jenny maintained a relationship with Rita and Bill for the entire time Joey was growing up. She was at important occasions, and Joey knew her as his 'birth mother.' Theirs was a rare and wonderful case - it worked for everyone.
Thank you for reading and reviewing,
~patty~
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Oh wow I am honored you responded and allowed me to understand. What a magnificient story within a story
Comment from dovemarie
Dear patty, The story reminds me in a way of my story. I got pregnant in the 1980s, but the father was an addict/alcoholic, and he wanted money for his habits even more than he wanted sex. I was thrown out of a halfway house where I had been staying at night, as an alternative to my apartment, so I wouldn't be "alone," and people there either ignored me, and one of them, a woman, said, "What are you doing having the child of a rapist, what kind of a woman are you?" When my water broke, the staff member just watched me drag my bags to a cab that they forced me to call, I had to ask another woman who lived in the halfway house to help me with them. The only good thing that came out of that was that the halfway house paid for the cab out of their money, I didn't have to "set aside some money, take a cab," the way one of their staff had suggested a week or so previously. I was crying as I got into the cab, the staff sent a "delusional" older woman with me to go to the hospital. All she did was sit there in the cab staring straight ahead. Their old man staff manager who threw insults at me said, on one of the nights I was still pregnant, "Can't go in a cab like that honey," (because he saw me in my nightgown, and thought that I thought I would be going without getting dressed, talking to me like grandparent to grandchild.) He had also said "Oh, cab drivers are good at delivering babies!" I guess he'd been seeing too much TV. Your story is very interesting, though, even though it reminds me of how my baby's father went off to prison, without even getting me connected to his family. He didn't suggest an abortion though, the way "Ron" in your story did. I would never have done that anyway. Dove
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Dear patty, The story reminds me in a way of my story. I got pregnant in the 1980s, but the father was an addict/alcoholic, and he wanted money for his habits even more than he wanted sex. I was thrown out of a halfway house where I had been staying at night, as an alternative to my apartment, so I wouldn't be "alone," and people there either ignored me, and one of them, a woman, said, "What are you doing having the child of a rapist, what kind of a woman are you?" When my water broke, the staff member just watched me drag my bags to a cab that they forced me to call, I had to ask another woman who lived in the halfway house to help me with them. The only good thing that came out of that was that the halfway house paid for the cab out of their money, I didn't have to "set aside some money, take a cab," the way one of their staff had suggested a week or so previously. I was crying as I got into the cab, the staff sent a "delusional" older woman with me to go to the hospital. All she did was sit there in the cab staring straight ahead. Their old man staff manager who threw insults at me said, on one of the nights I was still pregnant, "Can't go in a cab like that honey," (because he saw me in my nightgown, and thought that I thought I would be going without getting dressed, talking to me like grandparent to grandchild.) He had also said "Oh, cab drivers are good at delivering babies!" I guess he'd been seeing too much TV. Your story is very interesting, though, even though it reminds me of how my baby's father went off to prison, without even getting me connected to his family. He didn't suggest an abortion though, the way "Ron" in your story did. I would never have done that anyway. Dove
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi dove; your story sounds so much more dramatic than Jenny's. She went through a great deal, but after the birth of her baby, she pulled her life together and went on to do great things.
Thank you for continuing to follow this story,
~patty~
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Dear patty, I too have managed to pull my life together, even though it took a lot of years and more hospitalizations. I became a published religious poet from a Catholic publishing house in Minnesota in 2013, and they continue to publish my work once or twice a year. Dove
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I'm so glad to hear that. I love stories with a happy ending,
Comment from smbau
Great flow of the story. It feels real and relates to many single mothers especially pregnant teenagers in our societies today. You leave your readers in suspense and we are curious to know the fate of the child about to be born. I always recommend a list of character and roles under authors note for easy of your readers.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Great flow of the story. It feels real and relates to many single mothers especially pregnant teenagers in our societies today. You leave your readers in suspense and we are curious to know the fate of the child about to be born. I always recommend a list of character and roles under authors note for easy of your readers.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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thank you so much for your thoughtful review. There are only three main characters in this story, but I will put something in my author's notes,
thanks for reading!
~patty~
