fire burns brightly
5-7-5 Fire2 total reviews
Comment from writerjen
Here's my two cents, just my opinion, but I feel like this is a picture with a poem rather than a poem with a picture. The picture seems to overshadow the entire poem physically as well as poetically. Also, not sure i understand the point of your poem. Where is the fire is burning in history? Perhaps you meant the fire burns brightly in the human soul? Hope I'm not sounding too critical, just trying to give an honest critique.
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Here's my two cents, just my opinion, but I feel like this is a picture with a poem rather than a poem with a picture. The picture seems to overshadow the entire poem physically as well as poetically. Also, not sure i understand the point of your poem. Where is the fire is burning in history? Perhaps you meant the fire burns brightly in the human soul? Hope I'm not sounding too critical, just trying to give an honest critique.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent poem and entry for the contest
with the exact syllables at 5-7-5
Molten gold does link to fire
and the metaphor/simile works well
Gold also burns like a fire in the human psyche
Excellent art work to match
well done
Good luck in the contest
maybe you'll strike gold in the voting
RS
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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This is an excellent poem and entry for the contest
with the exact syllables at 5-7-5
Molten gold does link to fire
and the metaphor/simile works well
Gold also burns like a fire in the human psyche
Excellent art work to match
well done
Good luck in the contest
maybe you'll strike gold in the voting
RS
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thanks for reading &critique zanya
