Unleashed Chaos
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "John Doe"A Novel of the Breedline Series
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Comment from smbau
Simply reading your character listing gives great insight to your story. You have a great fictional fantasy story line. Reading this story is more like watching twilight zone. The transition between one characters dialogue to the others flows seamlessly.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Simply reading your character listing gives great insight to your story. You have a great fictional fantasy story line. Reading this story is more like watching twilight zone. The transition between one characters dialogue to the others flows seamlessly.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Awesome! Thank you! :)
This is good to hear. I do have a lot of characters and I'm so glad to hear the story flows. I love to entertain readers with the adventures of the Breedline, and hearing this makes my day.
Thanks again and hope to hear from you again,
Shana :)
Comment from rwilliam
Nice photo. You always have great ones for your chapters.
The S's strung out until it sounded like the warning of a rattler's tail.--What a beautifully descriptive line. WOW!
When it's time, we'll retrieve him without haste and bring him to you."--am I wrong but to say 'without' haste implies they WON'T hurry? Should it be 'with haste?'
Oh no not the Queen!
Great ending. You did a wonderful job writing this chapter, girl. I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Nice photo. You always have great ones for your chapters.
The S's strung out until it sounded like the warning of a rattler's tail.--What a beautifully descriptive line. WOW!
When it's time, we'll retrieve him without haste and bring him to you."--am I wrong but to say 'without' haste implies they WON'T hurry? Should it be 'with haste?'
Oh no not the Queen!
Great ending. You did a wonderful job writing this chapter, girl. I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Thank you girl :)
This is the photo I had put in one of my chapters in the new book. He's supposed to be my new character, Steven.
Glad you liked it. :)
Yes, I believe you are right about the haste thing. :) Thanks for catching that. Good job!
Lilith has her sights on Tessa. Stay tuned to see if Jace can protect her and keep Sebastian from his dirty tricks.
Thanks again my friend,
Shana :)
Comment from apky
Thoroughly enjoyed this Shana. Trouble brewing here. I don't think Sebastian would welcome murdering the Queen... Brilliantly crafted.
They left this in case the patient becomes conscious. ~ I'd change this to: ... in case the patient regains consciousness.
(w)rapping it up with her recent discovery--the cure for the Breedline aging process. All she needed to do was test it.
After his aunt--his mother's sister that raised him (-) passed away; he inherited her wealth.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Thoroughly enjoyed this Shana. Trouble brewing here. I don't think Sebastian would welcome murdering the Queen... Brilliantly crafted.
They left this in case the patient becomes conscious. ~ I'd change this to: ... in case the patient regains consciousness.
(w)rapping it up with her recent discovery--the cure for the Breedline aging process. All she needed to do was test it.
After his aunt--his mother's sister that raised him (-) passed away; he inherited her wealth.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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WOW! Thank you!!! :)
You're a gem! Glad you enjoyed another adventure of the Breedline. And thanks as always for the helpful advice. You definitely made my day!
Now, I'm off to read your new post I missed yesterday! :)
Your fan,
Shana :)
Comment from royowen
So, Sebastion and Eve are reacquainted with some of his father's former council, and finally meets Lilleth, a sort of malevolent ghostly figure of a beautiful woman. Who says the covenant queen is the desired death to install Eve's child to his place of prominence. What of the resurrection man in the hospital? And what devilishness is in store. Most exciting and imaginative post dear Shana. I don't know where all the ideas come from, excellent post! Well done, blessings. Roy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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So, Sebastion and Eve are reacquainted with some of his father's former council, and finally meets Lilleth, a sort of malevolent ghostly figure of a beautiful woman. Who says the covenant queen is the desired death to install Eve's child to his place of prominence. What of the resurrection man in the hospital? And what devilishness is in store. Most exciting and imaginative post dear Shana. I don't know where all the ideas come from, excellent post! Well done, blessings. Roy
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Thank you my dear friend :)
Yes, a lot is going on in the Breedline saga. New characters and plots and dangerous twists. Thank you for always showing your support and encouraging words. They are my inspiration and motivator to keep on writing. My story gives me great pleasure, especially when I entertain others.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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Your imagination knows no bounds, as you, create some marvellous creative characters on both sides of the scribal fence, well done, Shana, a literary marvel? Love Roy
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Oh, Roy... you're just too sweet. :)
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Nothing but the truth dear girl,
Comment from Natali Holden
What I hate about this book, is that I have to wait for the next chapters. If it was all here, I'd probably already be done. You make it so good, that I don't want to stop reading it, but I have to, because it's not all posted. I never lose focus. Your chapters are so hooking that I finish the chapters fast and then am sad because I want more. I loved it! Awesome job! Keep up the wonderful writing and don't stop!
Natali ;)
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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What I hate about this book, is that I have to wait for the next chapters. If it was all here, I'd probably already be done. You make it so good, that I don't want to stop reading it, but I have to, because it's not all posted. I never lose focus. Your chapters are so hooking that I finish the chapters fast and then am sad because I want more. I loved it! Awesome job! Keep up the wonderful writing and don't stop!
Natali ;)
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Wow!!! Thank you my dear Natali :)
Your feedback lifts me up and motivates me to keep writing. I'm overwhelmed by your support and excitement for new Breedline adventures. I wish I had more time to fit chapters in. Your input is super great to receive. I really appreciate the time you spend reading my chapters and giving me feedback. You're awesome!
Thanks again,
Shana :)
Comment from ngage
Very intetesting chapter, Shana. Great photogragh. It gave your chapter a captivating vibe.
Your dialog between Helen and the other staff at the hospital seemed real and believable. You kept my attention through it all.
Fantastic job with the shady character, Sebastian. His character gave off arrogance and a higher anarchy with the others. I think he's my favoritee yet.
Looking forward to finding out about this Lilith character.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Very intetesting chapter, Shana. Great photogragh. It gave your chapter a captivating vibe.
Your dialog between Helen and the other staff at the hospital seemed real and believable. You kept my attention through it all.
Fantastic job with the shady character, Sebastian. His character gave off arrogance and a higher anarchy with the others. I think he's my favoritee yet.
Looking forward to finding out about this Lilith character.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Thank you, ngage :)
Glad you enjoyed the chapter and the photo. This was actually meant for my book cover but decided to go with the wolf. So, I added it in a chapter.
I very rarely hear someone say their favorite character is Sebastian. That's a fresh change. He's one of my favorite's too, even though he's caused a lot of grief with the Breedline. Hope to keep you entertained.
Thanks again,
Shana :)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks in continuation of the fantasy another fascinating character John Doe, a patient with a gunshot wound, however, miraculously healed; Helen came and see him in the ICU, episode begins; I liked.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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This speaks in continuation of the fantasy another fascinating character John Doe, a patient with a gunshot wound, however, miraculously healed; Helen came and see him in the ICU, episode begins; I liked.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Alcreator Litt Dear :)
You are so very kind. Glad you enjoyed the chapter, John Doe. He is going to play a big part in the adventures of the Breedline series. Hope to hear from you again my friend.
Shana :)
