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A Cinquain

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Comment from PoemsOfDD
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Ameen, this is a very interesting Cinquain poem. Your syllables are all in check and I love the picture you have used to enhance this well written piece. The last line in particular adds great imagery to the piece (unfortunately I actually have chapped lips at the moment). Tear drops and misery, an all too common scene of today's environment.
Great read and thank you for sharing. ~DD

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
    DD my friend, I am pleased you liked the write; appreciate your visit and the encouraging review, thank you very much.
Comment from Joan E.
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I always admire your Cinquains. This one involves a compelling social commentary. I admired your use of alliteration and analogy. The artwork you selected reinforces your theme dramatically as well. Sighs- Joan

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
    Thank you my friend, you have a wonderful trip, God bless.
reply by Joan E. on 09-Aug-2017
    Thank you for your bon voyage. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
    I am pleased to read your encouraging review my friend, thank you very much and enjoy your holidays.
Comment from zanya
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The Cinquain is an effective poetic format here and it enhances the moment when that telling teardrop falls as a result of some 'tale of misery - an appropriate visual

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
    Zanya, I thank you for stopping by and the encouraging comments.
Comment from sunnilicious
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Better get yourself some Chapstick and water. I think that could transpire anywhere, especially during the summer months. Good visual imagery. Well thought out. Nice work.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
    Hello there my friend, appreciate your time and the kind review, so glad you stopped by, thank you and have a wonderful week.
Comment from rama devi
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Excellent imagery, tone and tenor. Expressive and dramatic. Well presented too. Love the assonant resonance of imbued and dewdrops. Fine consonance of P, L, C-K, R and alliteration of T. Sounds good read aloud. A couple of minor suggestions:


Teardrops
akin to pearls-(:)
R(r)ainbow(-)imbued dewdrops(,)
T(t)elling tale of misery with
cracked lips


The dash is fine but I think a colon works better.

With above suggestions:


Teardrops
akin to pearls:
rainbow-imbued dewdrops,
telling tale of misery with
cracked lips


Namaste, dear. Beautiful, poignant post. The title is perfect. Captures the tone.

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
    Deviji namaskar and as always I am indebted to you for your excellent suggestions, thank you very much.
reply by rama devi on 07-Aug-2017
    Namaskar, dear. :-))))))
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This speaks about Ethiopia and her poor state of survival despite the country is rich in pearls, Nature, mineral and natural resources; I liked.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
    My friend, I appreciate your visit and the wonderful review, thank you very much.