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Comment from Asem.inspirations
Hello estory: I see what you are doing with the word echoes Actually everything you wrote in this piece started out with the echoes so everything else is an echo from that word.
When I think even of the word echo it is such a poetic word. I used it many times in my poetry, "echoes of mommy", "echoed through my day to day." It is a great word for poetry.
Thank you for this poetic expression. It is always great to hear from you.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Hello estory: I see what you are doing with the word echoes Actually everything you wrote in this piece started out with the echoes so everything else is an echo from that word.
When I think even of the word echo it is such a poetic word. I used it many times in my poetry, "echoes of mommy", "echoed through my day to day." It is a great word for poetry.
Thank you for this poetic expression. It is always great to hear from you.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your excellent review and for your wonderful comments supporting this poem. Glad you enjoyed it, it was fun to write estory
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
I read this several times to adjust to the amazingly creative visions delivered in this minimalistic write.
The language basic, with a musical flow, but has extraordinary reach and captures the reader's imagination instantly, thanks the for a really interesting read.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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I read this several times to adjust to the amazingly creative visions delivered in this minimalistic write.
The language basic, with a musical flow, but has extraordinary reach and captures the reader's imagination instantly, thanks the for a really interesting read.
Mitchell
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thanks for the excellent review and for your interesting comments supporting this poem. It is one of the better pure musical pieces I think I have done. Glad you enjoyed it estory
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello E. I'm beginning to truly enjoy this style now that I'm getting the gist of how it works and how to conjure up the feelings of movement within the write. I like the stanzas about voices calling in the distance and the broken window stanza. This is a powerfully written poem once you unlock its secrets. Well done you. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Hello E. I'm beginning to truly enjoy this style now that I'm getting the gist of how it works and how to conjure up the feelings of movement within the write. I like the stanzas about voices calling in the distance and the broken window stanza. This is a powerfully written poem once you unlock its secrets. Well done you. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and for your interesting comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it. I like trying to make music in language using different techniques from the traditional forms, and this was kind of fun to write. I thought the format well suited for this theme of a broken relationship, a lost love estory
Comment from Ogden
This is a very interesting form - If minimalist free verse is a form. ?? Your poem is captivating, obviously the product of a great deal of hard work. I always think it trite when reviewers say. "Thanks for sharing," but, offhand, I can't think of a better way to express it. So, thanks for sharing your minimalist free form poetry.
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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This is a very interesting form - If minimalist free verse is a form. ?? Your poem is captivating, obviously the product of a great deal of hard work. I always think it trite when reviewers say. "Thanks for sharing," but, offhand, I can't think of a better way to express it. So, thanks for sharing your minimalist free form poetry.
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your excellent review and for your interesting comments supporting the poem. I am glad you found this new format interesting. I like to try to come up with new forms of making music in language and this was fun to write. I thought the form well suited for a theme of a broken relationship, a lost love or lost relationship. estory
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Estory
I found it clever of how as you used the Word Echo
as an example of the method of minimalism, of using repeating patterns of other connecting words, to create the music of language in poetry; with a theme, lost love, broken relationships
Now is this form of poetry your creation?
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Estory
I found it clever of how as you used the Word Echo
as an example of the method of minimalism, of using repeating patterns of other connecting words, to create the music of language in poetry; with a theme, lost love, broken relationships
Now is this form of poetry your creation?
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your interesting comments supporting this poem. Minimalism is not really something new, Jack Anderson and Denise Levertov have been writing minimalist poetry for many years. But this particular format, this style, is something I came up with on my own. It is really inspired by the gradually evolving musical minimalist pieces of Steve Reich and Robert Fripp, I was really in those new forms in the 70's and 80's, and tried to come up with something similar that could work in poetry. Now its on to multi voice pieces. Working on some projects with some musician friends an video artists from the old days estory
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You are welcome
And Thank You for explaining how you came up a way of writing , I never knew about
Gert
Comment from Possummagic
I wish I had six stars.. I'm going to be so sparing with my next allocation. That is a brilliant poem with minimal use of words. It's so clever to use the words like that, it's like phasing in then fading out. I loved it. Good luck I'm sure you'll enter under some category.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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I wish I had six stars.. I'm going to be so sparing with my next allocation. That is a brilliant poem with minimal use of words. It's so clever to use the words like that, it's like phasing in then fading out. I loved it. Good luck I'm sure you'll enter under some category.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the terrific review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem. you got the phase effect I was striving for. I was really inspired by the musical work of Steve Reich and Robert Fripp, Brian Eno, Philip Glass, whose projects I followed in the 70's and 80's. Tried to come up with a phase form that would work in poetry, and I thought the echo pattern would work, and also be great in a theme of a broken or lost relationship. a remembered relationship estory
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You're welcome
Comment from EverInParadise
Very impressive and well said. An entire world of relationship, echoing previous ones, are spelled out in these words. I might have gone for 3 "of light" for the final 'sound'. Enjoyed this and don't usually go for poetry but through this media I am leaning more and more about it and enjoying the education.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Very impressive and well said. An entire world of relationship, echoing previous ones, are spelled out in these words. I might have gone for 3 "of light" for the final 'sound'. Enjoyed this and don't usually go for poetry but through this media I am leaning more and more about it and enjoying the education.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your excellent review and for the enthusiasm you show for these forms I am trying to work on. I have been trying to come up with a new format for creating music in language for some time, inspired by the musical work of Steve Reich, Brian Eno, Robert Fripp, and Phil Glass. This phase format seemed perfectly suited for echoes, and the echo, a perfect format for a poem on a broken or lost relationship. Read some jack Anderson, get Poetry magazine, or Ploughshares, check out the new poetry of today. It is not really about regular meter and rhyme anymore estory
Comment from catch22
Hello Poet, what an interesting style of poetry. I do think the repeated lines created a haunting effect on the reader. You used them to good effect to create a sense of space and void in my mind. I liked this. Just curious- is there a particular poet that inspired this write?
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Hello Poet, what an interesting style of poetry. I do think the repeated lines created a haunting effect on the reader. You used them to good effect to create a sense of space and void in my mind. I liked this. Just curious- is there a particular poet that inspired this write?
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and for your interesting comments supporting this poem. Glad you enjoyed it. I have been lmpressed by the musical minimalist work of Steve Reich, Robert Fripp, Brian Eno and phil Glass for years, and have been trying to find a way to bring this new way of constructing music to poetry. I thought the echo effect would work will as a phase format, and that would be a great framework for a poem about a broken or lost , remembered relationship, something to do with the elements of passing time. My poetic inspirations are mostly from Seamus Heaney and Jack Anderson, although this particular style is really my own creation. estory
Comment from Dean Kuch
This reminded me of an echo, estory. By that I mean if one were to stand atop a vast canyon and shout, "Distant faces lost to time...", for example, you would get variations of the words coming back in different intervals.
I've found life to be a lot like an echo. Whatever you put "out there" will eventually come back to you.
Nicely done. I enjoyed this.
~Dean
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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This reminded me of an echo, estory. By that I mean if one were to stand atop a vast canyon and shout, "Distant faces lost to time...", for example, you would get variations of the words coming back in different intervals.
I've found life to be a lot like an echo. Whatever you put "out there" will eventually come back to you.
Nicely done. I enjoyed this.
~Dean
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much for this excellent review and for your interesting comments supporting this poem. This is exactly the phase effect I was striving for, and I thought it would be great as a framework on a theme of lost, remembered relationships. Glad you enjoyed it. I am glad so many people found this to be interesting musically. estory
