You are my candle of love
Let the love light flicker forever3 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hey, dip.
This is a lovely poem and all, and very well rhymed.
But I think I need to tell you that signing your posts in a blind contest will result in immediate disqualification by the CEC.
You wrote "dip" at the bottom of the poem you entered for the candle contest.
I'd delete that ASAP if I were you...
~Deano
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hey, dip.
This is a lovely poem and all, and very well rhymed.
But I think I need to tell you that signing your posts in a blind contest will result in immediate disqualification by the CEC.
You wrote "dip" at the bottom of the poem you entered for the candle contest.
I'd delete that ASAP if I were you...
~Deano
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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thanks dean i didn't even think i'm not used to entering these things i think it only the second time i have entered one and i've fkd it already lol
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I know, I'm used to signing my poems and responses too, dip.
Just delete it before THEY see it and you'll be fine. :)
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, this is so beautiful, Dip. The poetic format is a different one for you--three lines per quatrain, but the rhymes work well.
I love the metaphor of the candle as a love one. Very creative and innovative concept, my friend.
In the last stanza, you forgot the apostrophe in its. Should be it's. Other than a that little nit, this poem has been written to perfection. Good luck in the contest. I think your identity was to be unknown, but I recognize a Dip's poem (blinded or unblinded).
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Wow, this is so beautiful, Dip. The poetic format is a different one for you--three lines per quatrain, but the rhymes work well.
I love the metaphor of the candle as a love one. Very creative and innovative concept, my friend.
In the last stanza, you forgot the apostrophe in its. Should be it's. Other than a that little nit, this poem has been written to perfection. Good luck in the contest. I think your identity was to be unknown, but I recognize a Dip's poem (blinded or unblinded).
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Thanks so much again for your wonderfully kind words I fixed the glitch
dip
Comment from Possummagic
I really liked the imagery of the cancle. I also liked the flow of your poetry. Near the end however, in the stanza four I would have written "we both" rather than " we do" . In stanza five I felt that ithe middle line didn't flow well. Apart from that it was lovely. I'd love to see any changes and would consider changing my review . Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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I really liked the imagery of the cancle. I also liked the flow of your poetry. Near the end however, in the stanza four I would have written "we both" rather than " we do" . In stanza five I felt that ithe middle line didn't flow well. Apart from that it was lovely. I'd love to see any changes and would consider changing my review . Good luck.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Thanks possum I have revisited and removed some prepositions which helps the flow I don't usually write in 3 line rhyme just a change from my usual
Thanks again
dip
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You're welcome
