Brandon McCann
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Groggy Froggy"Young boy missing en route to Orlando, Florida
14 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
To be honest. I haven't followed this story, so I have to go back and read the other chapters. I liked what I saw, but hate to comment out of context. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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To be honest. I haven't followed this story, so I have to go back and read the other chapters. I liked what I saw, but hate to comment out of context. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Enjoy the other chapters.
Comment from MJ McIntire
I went back and read all the chapters you wrote and everyone of them is clearly written (the personality of the character).
I like that Brandon is a strong boy and is not going to easily crack-even in the situation he is in.
I enjoyed every chapter.
MJ
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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I went back and read all the chapters you wrote and everyone of them is clearly written (the personality of the character).
I like that Brandon is a strong boy and is not going to easily crack-even in the situation he is in.
I enjoyed every chapter.
MJ
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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I appreciate you going back and reading the other chapters.
I also appreciate you taking the time to write a review.
Glad you enjoyed them.
Comment from Mustang Patty
A very interesting chapter that gives us information about the kidnapping and kidnapper - he knows Brandon - or at least of him. He is to keep him for a long time. So, it doesn't appear Brandon is in any immediate danger -unless it would come from him walking into barriers.
Another well written chapter. You leave us at a cliffhanger and we are all concerned about Brandon,
~patty~
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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A very interesting chapter that gives us information about the kidnapping and kidnapper - he knows Brandon - or at least of him. He is to keep him for a long time. So, it doesn't appear Brandon is in any immediate danger -unless it would come from him walking into barriers.
Another well written chapter. You leave us at a cliffhanger and we are all concerned about Brandon,
~patty~
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from apky
The story just turned to a direction I'd never have seen coming if it was transported by the wailing fire truck!
But I'm mighty pleased and relieved that Brandon is still alive. Who knows - he just might find a way out of his predicament.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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The story just turned to a direction I'd never have seen coming if it was transported by the wailing fire truck!
But I'm mighty pleased and relieved that Brandon is still alive. Who knows - he just might find a way out of his predicament.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate your comments and support.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from emptypage
Brett, you claim you want honest reviews.
I like this chapter. It moves the story forward and has good dialogue, plus it revs up the minds of readers. I'm definitely curious about the who behind the kidnapping... I'm thinking one of his parents, maybe the mother (I need to re-read the previous chapter to remind myself, but I feel like she was rather cold to Brandon, while he was close to his dad). Whoever it is doesn't love Brandon if s/he is fine with Brandon being treated badly by his captor(s), not to mention in some hole in the ground. I'm also feeling as though the captor is not Wolford. Brandon most likely would be dead if that were the case. But... there is the connection of both boys encountering harm at the airport.
So, my point? The plot is interesting.
Brandon seems quite precocious. That's okay. Precocious children fascinate me. But would he, in this day and age, being HIS age, say, "Get a grip on reality, Brandon. That's the only way you're going to wiggle out of this pickle." I've never used that term (pickle) to describe a situation, and I'm far older than Brandon. My great grandmother, even my grandmother, might have said it in their lifetimes, but it feels outdated coming from a 10-11 year old boy's mouth.
And would a child his age be aware of what a mineshaft or a well might smell/feel/sound/look like?
Would the child of an educated physician say "ain't"??
Can you tell me the time period of this novel? Is it present day? Or twenty years ago?
I await the next installment.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Brett, you claim you want honest reviews.
I like this chapter. It moves the story forward and has good dialogue, plus it revs up the minds of readers. I'm definitely curious about the who behind the kidnapping... I'm thinking one of his parents, maybe the mother (I need to re-read the previous chapter to remind myself, but I feel like she was rather cold to Brandon, while he was close to his dad). Whoever it is doesn't love Brandon if s/he is fine with Brandon being treated badly by his captor(s), not to mention in some hole in the ground. I'm also feeling as though the captor is not Wolford. Brandon most likely would be dead if that were the case. But... there is the connection of both boys encountering harm at the airport.
So, my point? The plot is interesting.
Brandon seems quite precocious. That's okay. Precocious children fascinate me. But would he, in this day and age, being HIS age, say, "Get a grip on reality, Brandon. That's the only way you're going to wiggle out of this pickle." I've never used that term (pickle) to describe a situation, and I'm far older than Brandon. My great grandmother, even my grandmother, might have said it in their lifetimes, but it feels outdated coming from a 10-11 year old boy's mouth.
And would a child his age be aware of what a mineshaft or a well might smell/feel/sound/look like?
Would the child of an educated physician say "ain't"??
Can you tell me the time period of this novel? Is it present day? Or twenty years ago?
I await the next installment.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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I do want honest reviews. I am sick and tired of the "good old boy" review system of this site.
To answer your questions:
Brandon is 13, not 10 or 11
Many people, regardless of their education say the word "ain't" You, yourself, I would venture a guess to include in that.
Time period is modern day, thus the reference to computer video games.
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Nope, I've never said "ain't." It isn't proper grammar.
Comment from Spitfire
Great dialogue. Nice touch with use of his nickname. This doesn't sound like the man who killed Joshua. Different M.O. I like Brandon's reaction to the whole ordeal.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Great dialogue. Nice touch with use of his nickname. This doesn't sound like the man who killed Joshua. Different M.O. I like Brandon's reaction to the whole ordeal.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this piece.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Sankey
I agree with the reviewer you quoted, mate. Good chapter once again. I look forward to more. Hope I have not missed anything so far. Keep up the good work and I found no spags.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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I agree with the reviewer you quoted, mate. Good chapter once again. I look forward to more. Hope I have not missed anything so far. Keep up the good work and I found no spags.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this piece.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Be looking for Boiler Room - my newest Cody Schroder story.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
Again you have written a very nice part of your story. You are great at
your work which I really love to read. So please keep writing your chapters. I really enjoy reading what you write.
Kat
Kat
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Hi Brett,
Again you have written a very nice part of your story. You are great at
your work which I really love to read. So please keep writing your chapters. I really enjoy reading what you write.
Kat
Kat
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this piece.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
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Finally I'm back on here. I will be looking for more of your wonderful
work. Kat
Comment from country ranch writer
Can he get out of this alive being kidnapped,hopefully he will not be sexually assaulted and killed. Maybe there is hope for him to find a way to escape from his confinement
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Can he get out of this alive being kidnapped,hopefully he will not be sexually assaulted and killed. Maybe there is hope for him to find a way to escape from his confinement
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
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Smiles
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. I am glad to hear Brandon was not the victim in the previous chapter and is still alive. It seems the kidnapper wants him alive in the hope that there will be a ransom paid.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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A very well-written chapter. I am glad to hear Brandon was not the victim in the previous chapter and is still alive. It seems the kidnapper wants him alive in the hope that there will be a ransom paid.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
