Brandon McCann
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Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
NO VERTUAL SIX TODAY IT WAS DEAD
ON MY FRIEND WOW WHAT A GREAT
WRITE I'M VERY IMPRESSED
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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NO VERTUAL SIX TODAY IT WAS DEAD
ON MY FRIEND WOW WHAT A GREAT
WRITE I'M VERY IMPRESSED
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Your comments, support, and the six stars certainly appreciated.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
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OH I'M IN FOR THE RIDE YOUR WRITING IS INSPIRING
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Brett;
A great follow-up chapter in your book. I was surprised to find out the actual pedophile in the story was NOT the weird guy on the plane. Instead, it was this depraved predator.
I loved the dialogue you used for the therapy session. The psychologist, Dr. Stein, was so clinical and insisted on using terms that were above his head. It's no wonder he didn't feel any change in his behavior. The prison atmosphere didn't help, either.
Just one note:
A nit: 'In all directions he looked(+,) he saw the mass of mortals.'
Thanks for sharing, and I look forward to the next chapter,
~patty~
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Hi Brett;
A great follow-up chapter in your book. I was surprised to find out the actual pedophile in the story was NOT the weird guy on the plane. Instead, it was this depraved predator.
I loved the dialogue you used for the therapy session. The psychologist, Dr. Stein, was so clinical and insisted on using terms that were above his head. It's no wonder he didn't feel any change in his behavior. The prison atmosphere didn't help, either.
Just one note:
A nit: 'In all directions he looked(+,) he saw the mass of mortals.'
Thanks for sharing, and I look forward to the next chapter,
~patty~
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Always your comments, support, reviews, and nit findings are appreciated.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from apky
As soon as I read the doctor's passage below, I was on the edge of my seat, going,
Dear God, Doc, don't let him walk out of confinement!
"In order to be considered for release from incarceration, you have undergone cognitive behavior therapy, to reduce comportment toward your likelihood of repeating your crimes and re-entering prison again," Dr. Stein complimentarily elaborated, "you have also received relapse prevention therapy, to learn how to identify and better respond to risky situations, that may cause you to re-offend. Based on these significant findings, I am recommending you for parole." That was the news Wolford awaited.
You're weaving this story with great finesse, Brett.
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As soon as I read the doctor's passage below, I was on the edge of my seat, going,
Dear God, Doc, don't let him walk out of confinement!
"In order to be considered for release from incarceration, you have undergone cognitive behavior therapy, to reduce comportment toward your likelihood of repeating your crimes and re-entering prison again," Dr. Stein complimentarily elaborated, "you have also received relapse prevention therapy, to learn how to identify and better respond to risky situations, that may cause you to re-offend. Based on these significant findings, I am recommending you for parole." That was the news Wolford awaited.
You're weaving this story with great finesse, Brett.
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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That is the problem with pedophiles. They never stop.
Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
