Last Words
Lost dessert.88 total reviews
Comment from RobertaLee
Hi, I know this is long past the 'review' stage and the 'stars' are a mute point (have to put something to write to you I guess-- but just wanted to take the opportunity to thank you for posting this. It is remarkable and the emotion packed really needed no author's notes to have the impact it has. You are something else friend, and your friendship with your uncle must have been rich and fulfilling.
Smiles and blessings.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi, I know this is long past the 'review' stage and the 'stars' are a mute point (have to put something to write to you I guess-- but just wanted to take the opportunity to thank you for posting this. It is remarkable and the emotion packed really needed no author's notes to have the impact it has. You are something else friend, and your friendship with your uncle must have been rich and fulfilling.
Smiles and blessings.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Thank you, RobertaLee, for your generous review. It arrives a week before I speak at my uncle's funeral serve as his pallbearer. Yes, my friendship with him was rich and fulfilling. Thanks again for your smiles and blessings.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh, this is so eerie. How chilling to hear words like that from a dear uncle and know they were probably the last words you were going to hear. And it turned out to be the truth as you expected. A very powerful poem, Giddy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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Oh, this is so eerie. How chilling to hear words like that from a dear uncle and know they were probably the last words you were going to hear. And it turned out to be the truth as you expected. A very powerful poem, Giddy
Comment Written 02-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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Yes, Giddy, I just reread my diary in which I noted that my uncle declined teacakes before my last visit. Ten hours after I wrote that entry, he died. Thank you for your heartfelt review and the final review of my poem before the certificate expired.
Comment from lyenochka
Such a great picture of you and your uncle! What a thoughtful thing to visit him with teacakes regularly. Yes, sometimes people know their time and he must have known. Well said in this poem - about the relationship, the caring and the supernatural sense of moving on from time on earth. May the Lord comfort you and his family.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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Such a great picture of you and your uncle! What a thoughtful thing to visit him with teacakes regularly. Yes, sometimes people know their time and he must have known. Well said in this poem - about the relationship, the caring and the supernatural sense of moving on from time on earth. May the Lord comfort you and his family.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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Thank you, lyenochka, for your review and heartfelt condolences. Many reviewers have reported to me that their dying loved ones said or did something different and significant shortly before their deaths within hours or days. My aunt, his sister, is coming to the funeral and asks that I bake her teacakes, too! I hope it doesn't become her Last Supper.
Comment from zanya
A poignant and evocative memory portrayed here effectively within the confines of the 3 line poem format - simple statements can carry so much significance
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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A poignant and evocative memory portrayed here effectively within the confines of the 3 line poem format - simple statements can carry so much significance
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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Yes, Zanya, simple statements from a dying person can carry so much significance. Thank you for your review.
Comment from LIJ Red
It is chilling when a relative changes familiar routines because they feel death is imminent. Is this the prompt that calls for a five-seven-five or five- seven- seven
count? Looks like you nailed it.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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It is chilling when a relative changes familiar routines because they feel death is imminent. Is this the prompt that calls for a five-seven-five or five- seven- seven
count? Looks like you nailed it.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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Yes, LIJ Red, this prompt called for a five-seven-five or five- seven- seven. Many reviewers have shared with me their stories of dying loved ones saying something or changing their behaviors hours or days before their deaths. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Oatmeal
Sis Cat,
A cute little number. The arrangement is understandable and effective. Telling things very plainly and comprehensibly. The artwork complements your poem.
I can only wish you the best of luck in this contest.
It's a very clean piece. I saw no typos or SPAG.
The words you chose worked well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Sis Cat,
A cute little number. The arrangement is understandable and effective. Telling things very plainly and comprehensibly. The artwork complements your poem.
I can only wish you the best of luck in this contest.
It's a very clean piece. I saw no typos or SPAG.
The words you chose worked well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Oatmeal, for your review and for wishing me the best in the contest.
Comment from Lilol
This is really nice and I'm sorry about your uncle. I think you should use more figurative language though for poetry requires exaggeration or becomes very blunt and story like instead of poetry like.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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This is really nice and I'm sorry about your uncle. I think you should use more figurative language though for poetry requires exaggeration or becomes very blunt and story like instead of poetry like.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Lilol, for your review and condolences. Blunt and story-like compliment my objective to craft a "poem" without exaggeration, figurative language, or poetic tools. I report the facts. Thanks again for your review and comments.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a lovely 3 line poem, Andre, in memory of your uncle. I am sorry for your lose. Such a wonderful picture you added, Its nice to have of happy times with smiles. -Kerry
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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This is a lovely 3 line poem, Andre, in memory of your uncle. I am sorry for your lose. Such a wonderful picture you added, Its nice to have of happy times with smiles. -Kerry
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Kerry, for your review and condolences. Yes I have many smiles about the happy times we spent together.
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Your very welcome:))
Comment from Just2Write
Oh, how sad for you. I am sorry for your loss, my friend. People do have ways of letting us know when their time is coming - especially if their body is giving out. Your poem is heartfelt and poignant.
Heather Rose.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Oh, how sad for you. I am sorry for your loss, my friend. People do have ways of letting us know when their time is coming - especially if their body is giving out. Your poem is heartfelt and poignant.
Heather Rose.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Yes, Heather Rose, I have heard from many reviewers who witnessed dying loved ones saying or declining something significant shortly before their deaths. Thank you for your review and encouragement.
Comment from apky
Yes, I can relate to that sort of intense bond with a loved family member that would make you know every nuance in their speech and behaviour and hit the right conclusion.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Yes, I can relate to that sort of intense bond with a loved family member that would make you know every nuance in their speech and behaviour and hit the right conclusion.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Ye, apky, I had been baking and bringing my uncle his favorite teacakes for months. When he told me not to bring more on my next visit, I saw it at significant. He died five days later. Thank you for your review.
