Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I wonder if he will phone her back. Perhaps he's not there, gone away, holiday? i can't wait to read the next part, this phone call will be the make or break of the relationship. Nerve racking part, Patty!! :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017

Hi Sandra; my story must be good if I've got you at the 'nerve racking' stage. I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter. I will be posting the next part later today,

~patty~

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 30-Jul-2017

It really is, and I'm so enjoying it!! xx

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi Patty! I can't believe I took so long to read this chapter. I thought it was one I'd already read lol. Ok so we knew she was going to be pregnant but what is Ron going to do? Now that's the chapter I'm looking forward to. Is he going to be a chump or man up and be excited? I guess I'll just have to wait and see ... smiling all the way to the next chapter. xoxo d

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi there; I'm working on the next chapter now, and I should have it up by Sunday. Thank you so much for reading,

~patty~

Comment from Cass Carlton

Excellent

This is a pivotal part in a romantic story. Will she tell him? What will he say? Will he be glad? Or not? The episode ends at the most important part of the story (so far)
and has the reader all atwitter for answers. It is an excellent device to keep the pages turning. Someone once said "Make 'em laugh ,make 'em cry make 'em wait". Believe me it works! The language and text used is easy to read and moves the story along at a good rate. Well done cheers Cass

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi Cass; thank you so much for the lovely review of this latest chapter. I'm glad you enjoyed the cliffhanger. I'm working on the next chapter right now, and I hope to have it posted by Sunday.

~patty~

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

I love the way you put us right there as we witness the news and the call. No problems noted and an excellent interraction between the players. Each chapter leaves us waiting for the next

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi Barb; I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. Your lovely review made me so glad I'm working on the next chapter right now. It should be up by Sunday,

~patty~

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I'm glad that Jenny had you to be there during this difficult time. I like the addition of the news from People magazine which puts the story in the historical perspective. Good dramatic place to end.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi; thank you so much for the thoughtful review. I love that you enjoyed the small details I put in so folks would realize it was 1983.

~patty~

Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

Tense and interesting chapter with a cliffhanger/page turner ending has me rooting for the main character. Oh boy!

"They" always say to avoid feel/felt. Could eliminate the first sentence and start with Jenny looking out of her apartment window, doing something that shows her anxiety.

I like the way you showed and established the year, and also the length they went to for anonymity. Good job!

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi Kathleen; thank you so much for keeping up with the saga. I appreciate your thorough and concise review.

~patty~

reply by kathleenspalding on 29-Jul-2017

You're welcome

Comment from JW

Excellent

Thanks for sharing this story, Patty. It will be interesting to see Ron's response in the upcoming chapter. Will he be happy, or upset? I guess time will tell.

Or perhaps they will:

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm working on the next chapter now, and I hope to have it up by Sunday,

~patty~

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Patty,
Yes, this is what I thought. You did a great job describing the test & waiting for the results. It is getting really complicated even for 1983. Can hardly wait for the next chapter. Jan

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Hi Jan; thank you for continuing to real along with the saga. I'm working on the next chapter right now, and it should be up by Sunday,

~patty~

Comment from BOO ghost

Excellent

Jenny warned Ron that there wouldn't be any sex until they were in a committed relationship. There you go. Their first date was magical, nice description and sets up the plot for more goodies to come. Oh, no, a two-timer? When she let herself in, she found Ron sitting with a strange woman. kind of what seaweed does, the couple drifted further and further apart. these are power words: As the adrenaline dissolved, she felt herself going limp. Like the word combination here. She decided to hate him. the she could move on. You got some good grip with the reader and I like your words you use. nervous anticipation, right? Waiting for the results of the pregnancy test. Seen no issues with grammar. Looks well written.
"Yes, we have a ring. I just can't believe this happened after one time. This is so bad." yep, like playing Russian roulette. Nice chapter. Sorry, BOO is depleted of nuggets. This has book of month potential. Good job! BOO-tastic!

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Hi Boo; thank you so much for the wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. These two have really messed things up for themselves,

~patty~

Comment from Natali Holden

Excellent

I like how you ended it. It makes me want to read more. I want to know Ron's reaction. What does he think now that she's pregnant, can they work it out? Can't wait for more!
Natali ;)

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Hi Natali; thank you for continuing to read along with this story. I'm working on the next chapter now, and I hope to have it posted by Sunday,

~patty~