After the summer
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Comment from Pantygynt
The link here took me to a performance of "Summertime" by the Ray Brown Trio. This was a virtuoso instrumental piece and I could not see how your lyrics could possible fit this tune. Your lyrics have a different title. I am not sure what is going on here. Maybe the committee can sort you out but I can't.
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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
The link here took me to a performance of "Summertime" by the Ray Brown Trio. This was a virtuoso instrumental piece and I could not see how your lyrics could possible fit this tune. Your lyrics have a different title. I am not sure what is going on here. Maybe the committee can sort you out but I can't.
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Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your review, Ine. Have a nice week. Liberty of the author.
Comment from Catherin Elizabet Belle
Good strong lyrics! Depicting a young man's craving for sexual knowledge best left unexplored by an older woman. [Yep, I'm an ancient old foggie with great great grandchildren] That said the lyric is excellent. Have not looked at the music. What genre?
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
Good strong lyrics! Depicting a young man's craving for sexual knowledge best left unexplored by an older woman. [Yep, I'm an ancient old foggie with great great grandchildren] That said the lyric is excellent. Have not looked at the music. What genre?
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your review, Ine. Have a nice week. Jazz.
Comment from Wabigoon
I think I get the picture here -- there is a boy and a man. That's okay, except maybe for the age thing. The thing that bothers me here is the violet print on the lime green background. It is very hard to read. I like the "casualness" of the writing.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
I think I get the picture here -- there is a boy and a man. That's okay, except maybe for the age thing. The thing that bothers me here is the violet print on the lime green background. It is very hard to read. I like the "casualness" of the writing.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from Dean Kuch
"I was 16 years old and you 28
And I did not have much knowledge of love."...Whoa, Nelly! In some states that'll get a person arrested! ...
"For the fist time in my whole life
Summer came for the very first time.
I was a man when at the sunrise
And summer came
Summer is here" ... Uh, not to sound crude, but apparently summer is not the only thing that came for the very first time. Ahem...
If I was 16 and having a summer like this young man was having, I'd pray it would last forever too!
I think I need a cigarette after reading this...
Good job, and good luck in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
"I was 16 years old and you 28
And I did not have much knowledge of love."...Whoa, Nelly! In some states that'll get a person arrested! ...
"For the fist time in my whole life
Summer came for the very first time.
I was a man when at the sunrise
And summer came
Summer is here" ... Uh, not to sound crude, but apparently summer is not the only thing that came for the very first time. Ahem...
If I was 16 and having a summer like this young man was having, I'd pray it would last forever too!
I think I need a cigarette after reading this...
Good job, and good luck in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. Thanks so much for making the sound work.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written and indeed very romantic it reads very well and is an original sorry I am behind regards Jill
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
Hello my friend this is well written and indeed very romantic it reads very well and is an original sorry I am behind regards Jill
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from Bill Schott
This is an interesting song, Ine, that captures a moment when a boy becomes a man. The May-December aspect is also compelling and makes one think that this is autobiographical. I would like to hear this put to music.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
This is an interesting song, Ine, that captures a moment when a boy becomes a man. The May-December aspect is also compelling and makes one think that this is autobiographical. I would like to hear this put to music.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review. Have a good week ahead of you.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Thanks for entering my Lyrics Make The Song contest.
Summer, as you stated in the last line of your lyrics, should never end.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
Thanks for entering my Lyrics Make The Song contest.
Summer, as you stated in the last line of your lyrics, should never end.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and nice Sunday. Can you possibly tell me how to put music behind it.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Ine, this was fantastic, and told from the young lad's point of view. I think you've found your niche. Such great lyrics. It's the best of your work that I;ve read. Wonderful. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
Hi Ine, this was fantastic, and told from the young lad's point of view. I think you've found your niche. Such great lyrics. It's the best of your work that I;ve read. Wonderful. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and nice Sunday.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Wow, Ine!! That was amazing, I can only give it a virtual 6! I had to double check it really was your name I clicked on, I mean, the whole poem was just brilliantly done in the POV of a young lad. I loved the metaphor with the Summer, that worked incredibly well. Why didn't you enter this into the romance poetry contest, it would have run away with the votes. Amazing, my friend, very well done! :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
Wow, Ine!! That was amazing, I can only give it a virtual 6! I had to double check it really was your name I clicked on, I mean, the whole poem was just brilliantly done in the POV of a young lad. I loved the metaphor with the Summer, that worked incredibly well. Why didn't you enter this into the romance poetry contest, it would have run away with the votes. Amazing, my friend, very well done! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and nice Sunday.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
What a wonderful different POV taken for this wonderful piece when summer, used as a metaphore, ends with the acknowledgement of learning how to love
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
What a wonderful different POV taken for this wonderful piece when summer, used as a metaphore, ends with the acknowledgement of learning how to love
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and nice Sunday.