Brandon McCann
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Manhunter"Young boy missing en route to Orlando, Florida
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Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This was another interesting story. It might be better if you had more
talking in it. Of course that is up to you. No matter what you write or
say I'll still read it.
Kat
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Hi Brett,
This was another interesting story. It might be better if you had more
talking in it. Of course that is up to you. No matter what you write or
say I'll still read it.
Kat
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Your comments, support, and reviews always appreciated.
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Thanks Brett. You're always so nice.
Comment from w.j.debi
Brewster comes across as a crusty old coot, but one you certainly would want helping you on an investigation. He may think he can retire, but I wonder if a change of state and retirement will allow him to ever give up if there is an investigation to be done. I'll bet he'd make a great hunter in Alaska.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Brewster comes across as a crusty old coot, but one you certainly would want helping you on an investigation. He may think he can retire, but I wonder if a change of state and retirement will allow him to ever give up if there is an investigation to be done. I'll bet he'd make a great hunter in Alaska.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Ricky1024
Well written chapter and incredible imagination.
Flowed well, read well, and there was no Grammar issues.
Adjective Content was excellent.
Objective content was perfect.
"Descriptive Measure proved worthy.
Complete Synopsis- *****
Nice job her Mr. West!
Dr. Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Well written chapter and incredible imagination.
Flowed well, read well, and there was no Grammar issues.
Adjective Content was excellent.
Objective content was perfect.
"Descriptive Measure proved worthy.
Complete Synopsis- *****
Nice job her Mr. West!
Dr. Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Thank you.
Appreciate you taking the time to read this chapter and to write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an interesting story, but I would have liked more dialogue. It brings your characters to life and draws the reader in. The balance between narration and dialogue is out of skew.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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This is an interesting story, but I would have liked more dialogue. It brings your characters to life and draws the reader in. The balance between narration and dialogue is out of skew.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Appreciate you taking the time to read this chapter and to write a review.
Your point is well taken.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Curly Girly
Oh, this is a gripping tale!
A drug addict who admits to killing a prostitute and then leaving her chained to a tree--what an evil monster.
I reckon the chain would still be around the tree...?
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Oh, this is a gripping tale!
A drug addict who admits to killing a prostitute and then leaving her chained to a tree--what an evil monster.
I reckon the chain would still be around the tree...?
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from LaRosa
I knew we should be worried about the guy on the plane.
What'd really be a switch would be if I'm wrong and it isn't that guy at all!
Started to say I enjoyed the descriptions of Florida weather and all our hero's interjections; but, suffice it to say you did an awesome job making me cringe and be glad I'm not there!
You're off to a running start and the reader can't wait to catch up!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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I knew we should be worried about the guy on the plane.
What'd really be a switch would be if I'm wrong and it isn't that guy at all!
Started to say I enjoyed the descriptions of Florida weather and all our hero's interjections; but, suffice it to say you did an awesome job making me cringe and be glad I'm not there!
You're off to a running start and the reader can't wait to catch up!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter?
Maybe the villain is the guy on the plane?
Then, again, perhaps it is not?
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Spitfire
Okay, so usually characters like Brewster on their way to retirement end up getting killed.
"Son of a fricken Seabiscuit!" -- glad to see you avoided the use of cuss words which is typical and doesn't define a character's origin as this does.
Looks as if we have a lot more characters to meet before getting into the search.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Okay, so usually characters like Brewster on their way to retirement end up getting killed.
"Son of a fricken Seabiscuit!" -- glad to see you avoided the use of cuss words which is typical and doesn't define a character's origin as this does.
Looks as if we have a lot more characters to meet before getting into the search.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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I could have used cuss words, and in real life you know what he would have said there.
However, there are more colorful ways to express a sentiment.
I believe my favorite one used in this chapter was "Helen Highwater" for exactly what that says.
Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from country ranch writer
So much has happened this guy is leaving bodies everywhere he has been so where is the boy?is he just wandering around or is he dead as a door ail lying some where with the gators in a hole?
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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So much has happened this guy is leaving bodies everywhere he has been so where is the boy?is he just wandering around or is he dead as a door ail lying some where with the gators in a hole?
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Your comments, support, and reviews appreciated.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
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Will be on point waiting for the next one
Comment from BOO ghost
Or, more likely, Nome, Alaska. Lot of polar bears up there and polar bears hunt humans. Brewster was familiar with the regional folklore that love bugs were created in a lab at the University of Florida in Gainesville to eat mosquitoes. Oh, they do eat mosquitoes? You may left e out of mosquitoes. Yep, gators would finish the job if she was tied to a swamp in a gator infested swamp and she is bleeding. What a bad way to go. Grammar looks good so far. "Son of a fricken Seabiscuit!" Nice slang terminology. BOO uses the word fracking sometimes, derived from Battlestar Galactica. Fracking frockers! Where was I? the youngster tossed his cookies. Ha ha! Nice written story and has grip. BOO-tastic!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Or, more likely, Nome, Alaska. Lot of polar bears up there and polar bears hunt humans. Brewster was familiar with the regional folklore that love bugs were created in a lab at the University of Florida in Gainesville to eat mosquitoes. Oh, they do eat mosquitoes? You may left e out of mosquitoes. Yep, gators would finish the job if she was tied to a swamp in a gator infested swamp and she is bleeding. What a bad way to go. Grammar looks good so far. "Son of a fricken Seabiscuit!" Nice slang terminology. BOO uses the word fracking sometimes, derived from Battlestar Galactica. Fracking frockers! Where was I? the youngster tossed his cookies. Ha ha! Nice written story and has grip. BOO-tastic!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Love bugs do not eat mosquitos. Interestingly, the mated pair do not eat at all.
Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate your comments, support, reviews, and the humor of this review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
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okie dokie
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Okay! Help is on the way. It sounds as though
David Brewster is indeed the man for the job of
finding the missing teen. He is a well known seasoned detective who is know to be part bloodhound. Stand back everyone! He is on the move. LOL Well done Brett. Nancy
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Okay! Help is on the way. It sounds as though
David Brewster is indeed the man for the job of
finding the missing teen. He is a well known seasoned detective who is know to be part bloodhound. Stand back everyone! He is on the move. LOL Well done Brett. Nancy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Your comments, support, and reviews appreciated.
More to come so I invite you to ride along.
