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Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Ashes"possible selections for inclusion in book project
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Ashes", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
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"Ashes", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2017
Comment from kathleenspalding
Interesting and thought provoking group of poems! All are enjoyable and flow well. Excellent use of artwork. Just an FYI, on my Kindle's small screen, the font of part one squashes the letters close together, and it's a bit hard to read. Good luck in the contest.
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Interesting and thought provoking group of poems! All are enjoyable and flow well. Excellent use of artwork. Just an FYI, on my Kindle's small screen, the font of part one squashes the letters close together, and it's a bit hard to read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2017
Comment from Gloria ....
You are the master of the free verse on site, Mav. To me it reads like Vivaldi's Four Seasons. It's more of a musical composition than only a poem. Each section takes off into a new section, with the urgency of the sashes and lashes of part two to the more brittle part three with the hard sounds of blink, blink, blink. The view from the rear view mirror.
And finally the resolution of part four when the realization becomes that love cannot be stopped, no matter what.
This is terrific and is so easy to read out loud. You have outdone yourself FanStory poet laureate.
I wish you the best in this amazing contest that you created. :))
Ange
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You are the master of the free verse on site, Mav. To me it reads like Vivaldi's Four Seasons. It's more of a musical composition than only a poem. Each section takes off into a new section, with the urgency of the sashes and lashes of part two to the more brittle part three with the hard sounds of blink, blink, blink. The view from the rear view mirror.
And finally the resolution of part four when the realization becomes that love cannot be stopped, no matter what.
This is terrific and is so easy to read out loud. You have outdone yourself FanStory poet laureate.
I wish you the best in this amazing contest that you created. :))
Ange
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from rjuselius
this is a brilliant entry for this particular contest dear michael! your talent is shared as you exhibit true diversity within your poems.your imagery is exquisite and your wording is genius! bravo my friend!
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a heart squeeze!
rebekka x
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this is a brilliant entry for this particular contest dear michael! your talent is shared as you exhibit true diversity within your poems.your imagery is exquisite and your wording is genius! bravo my friend!
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a heart squeeze!
rebekka x
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from Nika2016
The irony of the last line..sarcasm?...The eyes are exquisite..the presentation beautiful...and he seems to both hate and love her...but will her destruction really solve his problem? This seems to be a theme in male poetry I am reading on other sites...too..
Out of sight..out of mind...so painful that only her death can erase the pain...I disagree...but it was almost cinematic Michael...
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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The irony of the last line..sarcasm?...The eyes are exquisite..the presentation beautiful...and he seems to both hate and love her...but will her destruction really solve his problem? This seems to be a theme in male poetry I am reading on other sites...too..
Out of sight..out of mind...so painful that only her death can erase the pain...I disagree...but it was almost cinematic Michael...
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Really, he/I is destroying himself by not being able to swallow his pride ie stupid maleness and simply express what he really feels. It's awfully hard to depict and I think maybe that's partly because it's expected that males don't think like that. LOL
But I'm working on it. :))
So pleased you found it interesting and thought provoking. You always have great insights and they're most appreciated. I thought I'd better respond right away as opposed to thinking these things while your review disappears into the abyss of my disorganization. HA! Thanks so much. mike (No, not sarcasm.)
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Wow. Mike, I love the style, that was truely awesome, just when I thought it was over, another and another. It was very intense and deep the words, the style just went absolutely superb. I loved it. Good luck. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Wow. Mike, I love the style, that was truely awesome, just when I thought it was over, another and another. It was very intense and deep the words, the style just went absolutely superb. I loved it. Good luck. ~Kerry
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thanks so much, Kerry
I hope a bunch of people enter. It's a chance to write whatever anyone wants and no one gets disqualified. Already some cool entries. Check 'em out and THEN join in. :)) mike
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Hmmm, maybe I will. Thanks, after seeing yours I don't know, pretty damn good. Lol.
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Most people don't get me and think I'm darling but crazy. LOL!!!!! You're a great writer, join in!!! mike
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Thanks, Mike, lol you not crazy your a great wtiter, and thank you, i did decide to enter, lol
Comment from dragonpoet
This seems to be four ways to say the same thing. There was a passionate love affair that ended and the speaker won't forget it but doesn't want to other to know how much hurt came from the breakup.
I like the last one the least because I find this format very hard to read.
I think in this one the for should be far and you don't need both over and down.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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This seems to be four ways to say the same thing. There was a passionate love affair that ended and the speaker won't forget it but doesn't want to other to know how much hurt came from the breakup.
I like the last one the least because I find this format very hard to read.
I think in this one the for should be far and you don't need both over and down.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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So pleased you enjoyed and gave the fourth verse a chance. I know it's a little out there. LOL!
I did take your advice and changed it a little bit. I like it better, so thanks for pointing out that it was a little off to you. A BIG help. mike
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You're welcome. I am glad you think my changes helped.
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Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for this wild kaleidoscopic visually rich suite of poems. It reflects the emotional power of perhaps a hurtful breakup that ends with a peaceful acceptance of the past (ashes) and confirmation of the love that still is.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thanks for this wild kaleidoscopic visually rich suite of poems. It reflects the emotional power of perhaps a hurtful breakup that ends with a peaceful acceptance of the past (ashes) and confirmation of the love that still is.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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LOVE your synopsis. Yes, you have it exactly and I couldn't ask for more than to be understood. YES!!! Thanks so much. mike
Comment from Lilol
Wow, this is a good set of poetry and I wish you luck in the contest. I think that the poetry should be more in line then all over the place though but it actually adds to the beauty.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Wow, this is a good set of poetry and I wish you luck in the contest. I think that the poetry should be more in line then all over the place though but it actually adds to the beauty.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I'm so pleased you gave it a chance even though it's not your normal cup of tea. :))
This little contest is to give everyone a chance to write anything they want the way they want, so hopefully it will produce quite a variety and we will all get to see some new things. Thanks a million. I'm delighted you liked this. mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your poems contest entry are extremely well done. I have no idea what "NO DQ" means. I'm sure your entry will show very well, but just in case I want to wish you the best of luck.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Your poems contest entry are extremely well done. I have no idea what "NO DQ" means. I'm sure your entry will show very well, but just in case I want to wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I'm happy you like the idea. I thought it would be fun to let us all run wild. LOL
NO DQ just means, no disqualification. So, no matter what anyone submits, there's no chance it will be disqualified, anything goes. :))
Thanks for the well wishes, glad you enjoyed. mike
