Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I can imagine the scene! A good thing they weren't big dogs like Irish Wolfhounds. Squirrels are great temptation and good sport - almost as much fun as chasing cats.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi Tony; thank you so much for the lovely review. This was a fun poem to write,

~patty~

Comment from marybell1

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your Bookends "Bernie and Howie". You had all your lines and syllables correct for this genre, and I could picture you trying to catch a squirrel. I tried to take a photo of one once and it was too fast for me.
All the best.
Matybell1.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

reply by marybell1 on 30-Jul-2017

You are most welcome.
Marybell1.

Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

That's two firsts then friend, your first attempt at writing a Bookend Monorhyme poem and my first time reading and reviewing one. It looks like it could be a fun form to play around with, I enjoyed what you did with it, the visuals were fun and came alive... lucky squirrel!!

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi; the poetic form of the Bookend Monorhyme is really fun to work with. I had a lot of fun creating this piece. Thank you for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Patty. I've seen quite a few of these lately. Seems like everyone is participating in a contest. Perhaps I should do one...Your Bookend Monorhyme is a splendid example why you are at the top of your game. Great stuff good luck. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi; thank you for the lovely review. This form was created by one of our own FanStory writers. Marilyn (beaspeas) came up with it and it was this weeks' poetry potlatch challenge.

I do try to take on different forms; it helps me to exercise my poetic muscle,

~patty~

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

What a fun poem to read Patty. It looks like you had fun writing it too.
A different form keeps us on our toes, well paws in the case of Bernie and Howie.

Well done.
Janet

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi Janet; thank you so much for the lovely review. Yes, I had a lot of fun writing this one. The poetic form was great to work with,

~patty~

Comment from Lena Borghi

Excellent

I like this form, Patty, and I think you have done a great job with it.
You have definitely followed the structural requirements and used good rhymes in both the bookend stanzas and center stanza.

This looks like a nice format for a children's book. Thanks for sharing!

Best,
Lena

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Hi Lena; thank you so much for the lovely review of this poem,

~patty~

reply by Lena Borghi on 28-Jul-2017

You're welcome, Patty.

Lena

Comment from JW

Excellent

Thanks for sharing this poem, Patty. In reading it, I quickly discovered this was a situation in which I easily could relate to. I could not tell you how many times I had to hold two taut leashes while both my dogs were going crazy over a rabbit, squirrel, etc. JW

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this piece. Yup, walking the dogs when the squirrels are out can be a dangerous outing,

~patty~

Comment from sharonlshelley

Excellent

nice piece of poetry i enjoyed the read and it flowed really nicely the picture reflects well on your poem, if this is your first attempt you have done your self proud Sharon

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

thank you so much for the lovely review,

~patty~

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

I felt you did a splendid job with this, Patty. Especially for your first time out.
One thing I did catch, however. And, no, it wasn't a squirrel...
"...the leash is held on to onto by little ole me." ... "Onto" is just one word in this context.

Nice work on your Bookend Monorhyme poem for the Potlatch Challenge, Patty.
Have a lovely weekend.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Hi Dean; thank you so much for the lovely review. I do appreciate the lesson in on to versus onto.

I went in and made the edit,

~patty~

reply by Dean Kuch on 28-Jul-2017

You're very welcome.
Nice job! :)

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Patty,

I'm so glad someone is copying Marilyn's neat poetry form. I've kept it in mind for when a poem appears to me like that, but so far, no go. *smile* Sounds like you have two wild little men on your hands. hahaha! Literally! Take care of them~

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017

Hi Robyn; thank you for the lovely review. The puppies and I do enjoy our days,

~patty~