Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

For a first attempt at a bookend monorhyme, this is excellent. As the owner of a squirrel-chasing Chihuahua (it should be the other way around) your poem resonated with me. I can imagine you trying to hold back dogs chasing a squirrel up a tree. I love your use of telling details:

Leashes held tight
Knuckles so white

Your story so compelled and entertained me that I did not realize that it rhymed. I see no changes for you to make. Perhaps I will write my own.

Thank you for sharing and inspiring with your fine, creative, and courageous example.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017

Hi Andre; thank you so much for the lovely review. You really should try the bookend monorhyme. It was a fun write,

~patty~

Comment from Thal1959

Excellent

Good job for your first attempt, Patty. The bookend monorhyme is like placing one poem in the middle of a second poem; both of which regard the same subject. Never tried it myself though... just not my style.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for your lovely review of this piece. It was fun to write and a bit daunting at first. I'm glad this one was about the dogs - seems like my best poems are,

~patty~

reply by Thal1959 on 29-Jul-2017

You're welcome, as always, Patty.

Comment from nancyrabbrose

Excellent

Congratulations on your story; I will have to read it. (I have been very busy moving from one place to another.) This Bookend Monorhyme poem is excellent. I can see you two dogs. The action is apparent. Sorry, you'all weren't fast enough. Well done.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017

Hi; thank you so much for the Congrats. I was really surprised and thrilled.

Taking the dogs for a walk is always an adventure - sometimes, we chase cans,

~patty~

Comment from damommy

Excellent

I can see you being pulled along, chasing squirrels with Bernie and Howie. LOL

I used to have Great Danes, and it was a MUST that they didn't pull on the leash. I only weighed 100 lbs. They were twice my size. lol

You did a great job with this form. It was a pleasure to read. 8-)

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017

Hi; thank you so much for the lovely review on this Bookend Monorhythm. I had a lot of fun putting it together.

I can just see a 100 lb woman taking Great Danes for a walk!

~patty~

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Exceptional

Patty, this poem is such a delight
the words fantastic, a beautiful write

Marilyn would be full of glee
a bookend monorhyme for all to see
happy and overjoyed she would be
sitting there reading it with a cup of tea

For your first one it's out of sight
a six from me, is just about right

Mitchell

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017

Hi Mitchell - thank you for your poem. A great bookend monorhyme. You should have posted it for the potlatch.

I do appreciate your time to read and review,

~patty~

Comment from crzypnter

Excellent

What a wonderful way to exercise ones poetic skills. It was a fun read and I am sure that you had fun with the writing. Thanks for sharing. God bless

August

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017

Hi August; thank you so much for your time to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece,

~patty~

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

Thanks for your wonderful dogie tribute. The love of a dog is a pure thing. He gives you a trust which is total. My little dog - a heartbeat at my feet.

All the best...
Bill~

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017

Hi Bill; thank you so much for your time to read and review. Howie and Bernie are my buddies and my muses. I'm so lucky to have them in my life - as they remind me each day.

~patty~

Comment from artemis53

Excellent

I am never one to be harsh or to dissect a piece. I only evaluate what a piece brings to me emotionally and this one made me smile. "Leashes held tight
Knuckles so white." I can see it.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate you sharing your feelings and thoughts with me - I'm glad I was able to make you smile,

~patty~

Comment from Ogden

Excellent

I'm familiar with Beas peas' Bookend Monorhyme form, and you did very well with it. It's a fun read, and it seems like it was fun for you, too. So maybe you'll be getting your critters Bookended again.
Don

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi Don; thank you so much for the read and review. The poetic form was so much fun to work with and I do intend to write more of them sometime in the near future - not sure if it will have Bernie and Howie as the theme,

~patty~

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

An interesting bookend monorhyme. Never heard of this form, thank you for introducing it to us. Nice tribute to your two dogs, I guess, there will be a sequel?

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017

Hi there; thank you for the lovely review. The poetic form was part of the poetry potlatch, and I thought I would join in on the fun. Marilyn (beaspeas) was the creator of the form.

I don't usually do sequels to my dog poems - just the stories. But, you have given me an idea,

~patty~