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one dog

A short story

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Comment from apky
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The following was rather difficult to comprehend. What did you mean here:

I let him walk on the site with grass, other way around I make him come over so we can turn. ?

He lea(r)ned very quickly what to do and not to do.

How many miles we made?

ONE TO HUN(delete-N)DRED

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
    Thanks for your nice review, anonymous. Have a lovely week.
Comment from Mustang Patty
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A few nits:

'He leaned (learned) very quickly what to do...'

(This sentence doesn't make any sense the way it's written) 'I let him walk on the site with grass, other way around I make him come over so we can turn.'

In a story of less than one hundred words, you have misspellings, improper use of grammar and poor sentence structure. A shorter piece is MUCH easier to self-edit and present in the most positive light.

~patty~

In your closing line, hundred is misspelled

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 Comment Written 24-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
    Thanks for your nice review, anonymous. Have a lovely week.
Comment from hari anand
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Thank you for entering A hundred words story. I liked your story and it abides the rules as well. Picture too suits well. Best of luck for the contest.

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 Comment Written 24-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
    Thanks for your nice review, anonymous. Have a lovely week.