Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "haiku (sunflowers soak)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
29 total reviews
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Gypsy;
-this haiku made me giggle and happily so as both the great alliteration which makes the reading fun and attunes the reader to a happily read piece of poetry.
-The great alliteration of the S letters creates for a very uncompromising understanding and reading of your haiku.
-Very descriptive and expressive chromatically connected lines and a satori that gives the poem that moment but estimate also gives the spontaneity of excitement and reserves the understanding of the haiku to be relative to the conceptual theme.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Cheers, Gypsy;
-this haiku made me giggle and happily so as both the great alliteration which makes the reading fun and attunes the reader to a happily read piece of poetry.
-The great alliteration of the S letters creates for a very uncompromising understanding and reading of your haiku.
-Very descriptive and expressive chromatically connected lines and a satori that gives the poem that moment but estimate also gives the spontaneity of excitement and reserves the understanding of the haiku to be relative to the conceptual theme.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You're welcome.
Alex
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hey, darlin'.
This is not only a beautifully presented haiku that evokes feelings of those warm, carefree, halcyon summer days spent lounging in fields as a kid, it also demonstrates how so few words can be used with maximum effectiveness.
At my son's City-Wide Little League games in Norfolk, VA, there was a vendor who sold hot sunflower seeds seasoned with...with...he would never tell me what (secret family recipe he said). Suffice it to say they were delicious, as were his cashews, peanuts, and pretty much everything else I tried that he sold.
This lovely haiku has just the right amount of "seasoning" too. A bit of warmth sprinkled in, along with the consonance and alliteration of "s". Your simple satori ties in well and brings it all together nicely.
Fantabulous!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Hey, darlin'.
This is not only a beautifully presented haiku that evokes feelings of those warm, carefree, halcyon summer days spent lounging in fields as a kid, it also demonstrates how so few words can be used with maximum effectiveness.
At my son's City-Wide Little League games in Norfolk, VA, there was a vendor who sold hot sunflower seeds seasoned with...with...he would never tell me what (secret family recipe he said). Suffice it to say they were delicious, as were his cashews, peanuts, and pretty much everything else I tried that he sold.
This lovely haiku has just the right amount of "seasoning" too. A bit of warmth sprinkled in, along with the consonance and alliteration of "s". Your simple satori ties in well and brings it all together nicely.
Fantabulous!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much, darlin. I appreciate your review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
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You bet, sweetheart!
Comment from kiwigirl2821
hello Sister. Wow I always wondered how they made those warm sunflower seeds! giggles ... This is a fab haiku and I just keep reading hoping one day I'll get the right sort of inspiration to put out a true haiku. Great write. xoxo d
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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hello Sister. Wow I always wondered how they made those warm sunflower seeds! giggles ... This is a fab haiku and I just keep reading hoping one day I'll get the right sort of inspiration to put out a true haiku. Great write. xoxo d
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from apky
I love sunflowers, and got a beautiful bouquet for hubby
who had his birthday on 10th July. Some are still quite fresh
but one or two have given up the ghost together with some
other flowers and the greens.
Aki xx
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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I love sunflowers, and got a beautiful bouquet for hubby
who had his birthday on 10th July. Some are still quite fresh
but one or two have given up the ghost together with some
other flowers and the greens.
Aki xx
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
Beautiful presentation Gypsy and your lovely haiku has raised many fine memories of laying in the grass, eating sunflower seeds and watching the clouds roll by.
Your presentation is classy and warm. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Beautiful presentation Gypsy and your lovely haiku has raised many fine memories of laying in the grass, eating sunflower seeds and watching the clouds roll by.
Your presentation is classy and warm. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes my friend very well written and indeed very clever store line beautifully presented with the photograph showing us all how this form is written well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Oh yes my friend very well written and indeed very clever store line beautifully presented with the photograph showing us all how this form is written well done regards Jill
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
HI Gypsy
I like your nature haiku of how
sunflowers soak up
sunshine in the field --
and feeds us with warm tasty snacks
and also how birds love to feast on them
Gert
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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HI Gypsy
I like your nature haiku of how
sunflowers soak up
sunshine in the field --
and feeds us with warm tasty snacks
and also how birds love to feast on them
Gert
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend. Thank you for the six stars.
Gypsy hugs
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You are welcome Gypsy
Question do I have time to put a haiku about flowers in your multi-authors book?
Gert
Comment from Joan E.
We traveled to North Dakota a few years ago, and saw what seemed like endless fields of sunflowers. You brought back the vivid scene, and I liked the use of abundant alliteration and the lighthearted satori. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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We traveled to North Dakota a few years ago, and saw what seemed like endless fields of sunflowers. You brought back the vivid scene, and I liked the use of abundant alliteration and the lighthearted satori. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
I had to have a giggle at this one Gypsy,
a very lighthearted haiku indeed,
the satori was perfect for the narrative.
Today was a very cheery one indeed,
well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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I had to have a giggle at this one Gypsy,
a very lighthearted haiku indeed,
the satori was perfect for the narrative.
Today was a very cheery one indeed,
well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Gypsy
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Most welcome, Gyps
Comment from Hitcher
Nice! Your poem and definitely the accompanying picture reminds me of my time in Israel, I picked Sunflowers for about two months. Hard work because they are heavy man but they are beautiful tall giants.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Nice! Your poem and definitely the accompanying picture reminds me of my time in Israel, I picked Sunflowers for about two months. Hard work because they are heavy man but they are beautiful tall giants.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Gypsy hugs
