Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Dinnae worry about FanStory, me poor friend,
Tis yer poor wee eye to which you must attend.

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Painful stye in my left eyes -sty???
Such a painful little spot --- HERE, Patty, as you've already said it's painful, to avoid repeating the word so close, how about:
Such a tender little spot ------------------- just a suggestion.


Hope it clears soon.

Margaret

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Hi Margaret; thank you for your encouraging review; I loved your little rhyme.

I double-checked the spelling of stye because my spell-checker didn't like it. But, when I looked it up in the medical dictionary, it was spelled this way.

I appreciate your suggestion and I will incorporate it into the poem - thank you!

~patty~

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hello, Patty, :)

I liked these lines:
Want to use profanity
But that won't be too helpful

I liked this stanza: (so true):
FanStory life is such a drag
No time to be weak or sick
Rankings will sink like a brick
When your stories start to lag

Have a good weekend!

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for your review - I'm glad you enjoyed it,

~patty~

Comment from JDRBAR

Excellent

I feel you wrote this just for me, LOL. I don't have a stye, thank God. I know how painful they can be. I too am fighting to maintain my writings while waiting for eye surgery.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Hi - I'm so sorry you have to have eye surgery. I have some small cateracts that will eventually need some attention, but right now, I think I'm just run down.

Thank you for reading and reviewing and I will keep you and your eyes in my prayers,

~patty~

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

This is super funny. I would have never considered the possibility of writing a poem about a stye. LOL.
I know what you mean when you say they are painful, I've had them more than once.
The comments about FS are hilarious.
Great rhyme.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Hi Maria; thank you so much for reading this silly little poem. The stye is continuing to make my life difficult - I'm almost at the end of the time I can spend on the computer for the day.

I'm glad you enjoyed the pokes at FS,

~patty~

Comment from Lindagail Hall

Excellent

You poor lady I always get loads of styes they are painful as you described here. I'll message you a remedy it works promise you. You've used a word I've never seen before, 'Shroom. I looked it up in my Oxford dictionary can't see it. Sounds like your fed up with the site, agree with you. I have spent hundreds of dollars just to promote every write ice done yeti notice the top ranking don't need to do this, I think it's unfair on some darn good poets and writers.i try and review all my fans yet some don't review mine that's bad manners you are one of the few that gives me positive and pick up on points were I could improve.
Whatever you do don't scratch it.ill message you now try wearing sun glasses in the house.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for the thoughtful review. The fan system is a bit flawed, because though some writers want to be reviewed, they don't return the gesture. I, too, work my way through the work of those that I've fanned and feel bad when it isn't returned. I do have some very loyal fans though - and you are one of them.

You haven't spent REAL dollars - have you?

~patty~

reply by Lindagail Hall on 21-Jul-2017

Eyes several times I've paid for one hundred points costing one hundred dollars each time just going to use the last lot then that's that so guess I won't be recognised " I like you try not too miss my listed friends as you yourself knows.think I've paid over 700 dollars if not more

Bless you patty I look foward to reading your stories I think they are book worthy and think you should try can't loose anything can you.
Have a great week end

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Hey there Patty, You may say that you are only fooling around with words but i feel the same way. Sometime I wish i could go back to the days when Fan Story was not my life. I don't even have the time for my Face Book page where my family visits regularly and daily so I am missed and looked for, there.

Reviewing sucks the life out of my many days and nights but it is the way to promote my own writing to paint my Profile page with recognition Best always certificates. (lol) So I agree with this story. hahahahaha GOOD JOB ON THE POEM!

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Hi Tier; thank you so much for the kind review of this silly little poem. I do spend way too much time on this site - but it helps to fill the hours while my hubby is at work and after the housework is done. There isn't much to do in an empty nest.

~patty~

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

Haha, you can't afford to be sick, or even go to work. That's why I don't worry about the ratings at all. Sorry about your eye. I know any eye problem is painful.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Hi Cindy; I envy you - I am SO competitive that I thrive on the ratings. I know they do not mean ANYTHING in the real world, but since I don't work or go to school for the first time in my adult life - I don't have anything to excel at!

Thank you so much for your time to review,

~patty~

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Patty, This is a very well written Quatrain poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording. I do hope if you have a stye it is gone soon. They are very aggravating. Great job. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Hi Teri; thank you for reading and reviewing. The stye part is real - I'm doing my best to heal it.

~patty~

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi (*<*)

= Oh, good, I'm glad you were just playing around and you really don't have a sty. No fun.
= This was cute. Love the abstract eye in the artwork.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers <> Jax / Jackie

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Hi Jax; no, I really DO have a stye. The playing around with words was finding the right rhymes to make the pattern work - thank you so much for reading,

~patty~

reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 21-Jul-2017

Ooooh, hope it is getting better. (*<*)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lol. You're definitely one of the really hardworking writer-reviewers on this site. Don't worry, you're so far ahead, I don't think you'll lose your place taking some time off. Never saw the "'shroom" used as a transitive verb before. Get better soon!

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Hi; yea - the 'shroom was definitely a push on creative licensing! LOL. I didn't realize it until now, but the points for reading are on a 'rolling basis.' Since I pushed so hard a few months back - now the daily amounts from those days are being taken away from my score - hence, I dropped from a 12,000 point lead down to 5,000 in a relatively short period of time.

I'm just too darn competitive for my own good,

~patty~