A bad note
Love gone off key15 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
Dip, This is another very well written love gone bad poem you have penned. I like that you compared it to a piano note that had gone bad. Very good wording and great imagery with the art work. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
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Dip, This is another very well written love gone bad poem you have penned. I like that you compared it to a piano note that had gone bad. Very good wording and great imagery with the art work. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
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Thank you Teri much appreciated.
dip
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh wow this one is so very true in more ways than one. I love the way you took the piano and used it to talk about life and love and it's downfall. Love the rhyme and flow
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
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Oh wow this one is so very true in more ways than one. I love the way you took the piano and used it to talk about life and love and it's downfall. Love the rhyme and flow
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
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Thanks Barb much appreciated.
dip
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend you have translated your thoughts so beautifully in this poem it again reads very well I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Hello my friend you have translated your thoughts so beautifully in this poem it again reads very well I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thankyou so much Jill. For your continual support of my poetry
dip
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Dr D,
I enjoyed you poem although it is sad when love dies. I like the way you used the piano keys to represent love. You are right. When anything is neglected, it dies. Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Dr D,
I enjoyed you poem although it is sad when love dies. I like the way you used the piano keys to represent love. You are right. When anything is neglected, it dies. Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thankyou so much Jan much appreciated as always.
dip
Comment from Heather Knight
This is lovely, Mark. Unfortunately it's also often true.
I love this line:
I played ivory, you played ebony
And these:
So why did the notes go slowly sour?
Why did our love become so dour?
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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This is lovely, Mark. Unfortunately it's also often true.
I love this line:
I played ivory, you played ebony
And these:
So why did the notes go slowly sour?
Why did our love become so dour?
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thankyou Maria much appreciated as always
dip
Comment from damommy
I can certainly relate to this, having been a victim of such an occurrence. One never knows what happened. Too complicated, I imagine.
I like that you wrote it using piano keys as your 'characters.'
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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I can certainly relate to this, having been a victim of such an occurrence. One never knows what happened. Too complicated, I imagine.
I like that you wrote it using piano keys as your 'characters.'
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thanks again Yvonne glad you liked it
dip
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Love sometimes turns sour and keeping it alive and bouyant can be a hard task as the years mount up, but if you are lucky, love will last a lifetime, hope this is fiction, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Love sometimes turns sour and keeping it alive and bouyant can be a hard task as the years mount up, but if you are lucky, love will last a lifetime, hope this is fiction, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thankyou Dolly most are my poems aren't art imitating life. whatever the saying is Thanks as always Dolly
dip
Comment from Dean Kuch
"So why did the notes go slowly sour?
Why did our love become so dour?
The old piano is now not played
It's gone off key when you strayed
All that are left are our rings of love
And a broken keyboard you can see above
Don't think we'll play that music again
Our music is lost just can't explain"
I couldn't have said it any better than if I'd written this myself, Mark. But I have lived it and I know all too well what it feels like without having to speculate.
It's no fun...
~Deano
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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"So why did the notes go slowly sour?
Why did our love become so dour?
The old piano is now not played
It's gone off key when you strayed
All that are left are our rings of love
And a broken keyboard you can see above
Don't think we'll play that music again
Our music is lost just can't explain"
I couldn't have said it any better than if I'd written this myself, Mark. But I have lived it and I know all too well what it feels like without having to speculate.
It's no fun...
~Deano
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Dean i am so glad this struck a chord with you A man scorned is no different to a woman and you have seen this first hand. Thanks for the great review as always
dip
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You bet, Mark, it is always a pleasure.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
DIP, this is a perfectly written lost love poem. Every single word is placed so just rightly. I specifically love the way you related the love to the keys of music. This makes it the perfect poem. Below are some of my favorite lines:
Our love was like a piano key
We played love's music in harmony
I played ivory, you played ebony
The pitch we played for you and me
The tune of love is all so sweet
Beautiful music, a beautiful beat
Each note we played, just so fine
The tune of love, just so divine
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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DIP, this is a perfectly written lost love poem. Every single word is placed so just rightly. I specifically love the way you related the love to the keys of music. This makes it the perfect poem. Below are some of my favorite lines:
Our love was like a piano key
We played love's music in harmony
I played ivory, you played ebony
The pitch we played for you and me
The tune of love is all so sweet
Beautiful music, a beautiful beat
Each note we played, just so fine
The tune of love, just so divine
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thankyou so much Tier, I am so glad you liked it.
dip
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written romantic poem. I love the rhyming scheme in this. I feel a lot of emotions while reading this. I know I can relate to these feelings. Thank you very much for sharing this. God bless you. With love, Lola
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written romantic poem. I love the rhyming scheme in this. I feel a lot of emotions while reading this. I know I can relate to these feelings. Thank you very much for sharing this. God bless you. With love, Lola
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thankyou so much Lola much appreciated.
dip
