The Northern Lights
An experiment in leonine rhyme70 total reviews
Comment from Just2Write
Tony, you are always one to try different poetry forms and then show them off to us. This form is new to me, and I like the under beat and tempo that comes through when read aloud. I'm sure that comes from the internal rhyme in the first line of the couplet, and the
da-da-da DUM meter.
Excellent. Even though I live in the 'true North strong and free I've never seen the aurora borealis. Something for one's bucket list, for sure.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Tony, you are always one to try different poetry forms and then show them off to us. This form is new to me, and I like the under beat and tempo that comes through when read aloud. I'm sure that comes from the internal rhyme in the first line of the couplet, and the
da-da-da DUM meter.
Excellent. Even though I live in the 'true North strong and free I've never seen the aurora borealis. Something for one's bucket list, for sure.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Rose. Loved your review and appreciate your comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from pipersfancy
Have you seen them, Tony? The Northern Lights? I'm fortunate to have frequent encounters with the mystical spirits of the night sky--they dance, you know. They twirl and skip, they're playful sprites come down to visit us, and sometimes on a particularly cold night, they'll whisper and you can hear them--silvery little peals of laughter as they crackle and hum above you!
I'd say that as far as "An experiment in leonine rhyme" goes, you've had good success here. I've played with these inner line rhymes myself on occasion--never even knew it had a specific name!
Carry on with your poetic experimentation, you scientific wordsmith!
pf
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Have you seen them, Tony? The Northern Lights? I'm fortunate to have frequent encounters with the mystical spirits of the night sky--they dance, you know. They twirl and skip, they're playful sprites come down to visit us, and sometimes on a particularly cold night, they'll whisper and you can hear them--silvery little peals of laughter as they crackle and hum above you!
I'd say that as far as "An experiment in leonine rhyme" goes, you've had good success here. I've played with these inner line rhymes myself on occasion--never even knew it had a specific name!
Carry on with your poetic experimentation, you scientific wordsmith!
pf
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Christina. I enjoyed your review and very much appreciate your comments. Yes, I once saw the Northern Lights on a flight over Southern Greenland. All the best, Tony
Comment from Halfree
Very interesting and most enjoyable. New experience for me the leonine verse. Did like last verse,beautifully written. Will have to read you more.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Very interesting and most enjoyable. New experience for me the leonine verse. Did like last verse,beautifully written. Will have to read you more.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Halfree. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from damommy
This is lovely. I've never heard of Leonine rhyme, but I like it. You did a great job with it.
Your presentation couldn't be better. The background color set off the text and photo very well.
Outstanding stanza, I think:
As forked tongues snake, their eerie wake
recalls brave men who've crossed the lake
of time; their pyre, a restless fire.
Illusions form a firefly choir
I like your use of rose and bruise, too. 8-)
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This is lovely. I've never heard of Leonine rhyme, but I like it. You did a great job with it.
Your presentation couldn't be better. The background color set off the text and photo very well.
Outstanding stanza, I think:
As forked tongues snake, their eerie wake
recalls brave men who've crossed the lake
of time; their pyre, a restless fire.
Illusions form a firefly choir
I like your use of rose and bruise, too. 8-)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Yvonne. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from KL Williams
I enjoyed your poem. I felt it had great imagery and was intense, yet beautiful.. much like I would imagine the northern lights to be. Lovely write, thank you for sharing! :)
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I enjoyed your poem. I felt it had great imagery and was intense, yet beautiful.. much like I would imagine the northern lights to be. Lovely write, thank you for sharing! :)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, KL. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Poetofheart2013
What a beautiful poem full Light and life . I felt like I there when I read it
Like could actually see it lit up the whole sky.
you write with such light.
Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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What a beautiful poem full Light and life . I felt like I there when I read it
Like could actually see it lit up the whole sky.
you write with such light.
Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Poetofheart. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mustang Patty
I never really understood there was such a thing as a leonine rhyme. Your work is a wonderful example of this style. Additionally, your words personify the beautiful light reflected in the northern lights. Thank you for your glossary - it helped to clear up any confusion.
Well done,
~patty~
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I never really understood there was such a thing as a leonine rhyme. Your work is a wonderful example of this style. Additionally, your words personify the beautiful light reflected in the northern lights. Thank you for your glossary - it helped to clear up any confusion.
Well done,
~patty~
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Patty. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from sharonlshelley
very nice poem and flows easy when i read it i also liked the picture that you used it ties in nicely with your written work, thanks for sharing your work sharon
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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very nice poem and flows easy when i read it i also liked the picture that you used it ties in nicely with your written work, thanks for sharing your work sharon
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Sharon. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Tony.
What a fabulous piece of poetry and a brilliant form as well. I have to admit to not hearing of the form before, sadly.
Fantastic rhyming, both internal and external and very, very vivid imagery.
Great work, mate.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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G'day Tony.
What a fabulous piece of poetry and a brilliant form as well. I have to admit to not hearing of the form before, sadly.
Fantastic rhyming, both internal and external and very, very vivid imagery.
Great work, mate.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Fez. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from c_lucas
I am sure
In earlier times
The Northern Lights
Filled superstitious man with fear.
***
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I am sure
In earlier times
The Northern Lights
Filled superstitious man with fear.
***
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Charlie. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
