The Northern Lights
An experiment in leonine rhyme70 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! Well, I always wanted to see the Northern Lights. Do you see them in Australia? We often have a marine layer that comes with clouds and so the weatherman tantalizes us with the possibility of seeing them and then tells us we can't cause it's cloudy. I love the internal rhymes, "firefly choir" and "symphony of light." Thanks for the glossary, too. I always thought "krakens" were off the South American coast.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Wow! Well, I always wanted to see the Northern Lights. Do you see them in Australia? We often have a marine layer that comes with clouds and so the weatherman tantalizes us with the possibility of seeing them and then tells us we can't cause it's cloudy. I love the internal rhymes, "firefly choir" and "symphony of light." Thanks for the glossary, too. I always thought "krakens" were off the South American coast.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thanks very much for your review, Helen, and for your supportive comments. Much appreciated. No, we don't see them in Australia, but I have once seen them from the air, over Southern Greenland, during my flying days. A memorable sight! Tony
Comment from Janet Foor
Since my eldest granddaughter's name is Aurora, I enjoyed seeing the picture and reading this lovely leonine rhyming poem.
I was not familiar with this form and I think you did a very nice job writing it and explaining the form.
Very nice.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Since my eldest granddaughter's name is Aurora, I enjoyed seeing the picture and reading this lovely leonine rhyming poem.
I was not familiar with this form and I think you did a very nice job writing it and explaining the form.
Very nice.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Janet. Thanks for the review. What a lovely name for your granddaughter. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written and full of imagery through the poem and the rhyme work's beautifully I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Hello my friend this is well written and full of imagery through the poem and the rhyme work's beautifully I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Jill. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from His Grayness
Absolutely stunning, fantastic, and awesome, all in one great writing. The presentation, artwork background is powerful and really pulls the reader into the written work immediately. The writing is Classic and Brilliant with perfection in all perspective. I loved this work and wish I had waited for the next round of six stars, deserving this! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Absolutely stunning, fantastic, and awesome, all in one great writing. The presentation, artwork background is powerful and really pulls the reader into the written work immediately. The writing is Classic and Brilliant with perfection in all perspective. I loved this work and wish I had waited for the next round of six stars, deserving this! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Vance. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Tony!
I enjoyed reading this delightful poem about the northern lights.
Your words hint at something ancient and mysterious. Also, cruel and wicked--Vikings and pagan practices.
This is lovely:
in flight, a symphony of light
to mystify a star-strewn night
of eldrich spells above the hell
of kraken deeps, where monsters dwell.
Nicole
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Hi, Tony!
I enjoyed reading this delightful poem about the northern lights.
Your words hint at something ancient and mysterious. Also, cruel and wicked--Vikings and pagan practices.
This is lovely:
in flight, a symphony of light
to mystify a star-strewn night
of eldrich spells above the hell
of kraken deeps, where monsters dwell.
Nicole
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Nicole. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Hitcher
I think the experiment went well friend : ) The Northern lights are on my bucket list, what a wonder to behold I reckon!! I enjoyed your use of the leonine rhyme , I'm a hard out rhymer so appreciate the effort that goes into these little experiments : ) Very well done!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I think the experiment went well friend : ) The Northern lights are on my bucket list, what a wonder to behold I reckon!! I enjoyed your use of the leonine rhyme , I'm a hard out rhymer so appreciate the effort that goes into these little experiments : ) Very well done!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Hitch. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Taffspride
Such a beautiful story you tell here, I love the picture your words brought to mind. I have only ever seen the Northern lights Twice in my life, Both times they were spectacular.
I did enjoy reading this aloud too.
I do have a couple of suggestions.
Viking gods awake the sky's (awaken)
of rose and bruise begins to grow. I found bruise to be a little confusing. since it is not a color.
Other than that I thought everything else sounded perfect.
Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd d
Ann
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Such a beautiful story you tell here, I love the picture your words brought to mind. I have only ever seen the Northern lights Twice in my life, Both times they were spectacular.
I did enjoy reading this aloud too.
I do have a couple of suggestions.
Viking gods awake the sky's (awaken)
of rose and bruise begins to grow. I found bruise to be a little confusing. since it is not a color.
Other than that I thought everything else sounded perfect.
Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd d
Ann
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Ann. Appreciate your review. I guess that 'bruise' isn't a colour, but a real shiner sometimes develops a range of colours not unlike those of the Northern Lights - besides, I liked the near rhyme with 'rose'! Tony
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem. Use excellent imagery in this and I love the way that there are rhymes with in Rhymes. What a fantastic picture this is that complements your poem very nicely. Thank you so much for sharing this. God bless you. With love, Lola
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem. Use excellent imagery in this and I love the way that there are rhymes with in Rhymes. What a fantastic picture this is that complements your poem very nicely. Thank you so much for sharing this. God bless you. With love, Lola
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Lola. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I tried to follow the notes and I think it is done as yu wanted it to be,. I like the content and the Vikings and the lake of death and the mystical topic,.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I tried to follow the notes and I think it is done as yu wanted it to be,. I like the content and the Vikings and the lake of death and the mystical topic,.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Barb. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Irish Rain
Too many ways in which this is just beautiful. Of course, the words....I LOVE 'rose and bruise.' The COLORS!!! Wow, your presentation is as glorious as the lights! This is a spell-binding beauty!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Too many ways in which this is just beautiful. Of course, the words....I LOVE 'rose and bruise.' The COLORS!!! Wow, your presentation is as glorious as the lights! This is a spell-binding beauty!! Blessings...
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Judy. Loved your review and very much appreciate the six stars. All the best, Tony
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You're most welcome!!
