The Northern Lights
An experiment in leonine rhyme70 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
You transported me back in time to ancient Viking days. I could picture the Northern lights, and think what they might have imagined them to mean. I love this poem and the effect it has on my heart and imagination.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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You transported me back in time to ancient Viking days. I could picture the Northern lights, and think what they might have imagined them to mean. I love this poem and the effect it has on my heart and imagination.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Rhonda. Many thanks for your kind review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from seaglass
The author's notes are informative. Thanks for including them. I am in awe, each time I see Aurora, she is magnificent, magical and mystical as is the tone of your poem describing these northern skies. They must have been a fearful sight to those of long ago who didn't understand them.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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The author's notes are informative. Thanks for including them. I am in awe, each time I see Aurora, she is magnificent, magical and mystical as is the tone of your poem describing these northern skies. They must have been a fearful sight to those of long ago who didn't understand them.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Seaglass. Many thanks for your kind review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rama devi
Eloquent and masterfully penned, my friend. Superb imagery. Superb phonetics. I especially enjoyed reading the first stanza loud with the consonance and alliteration of S, the assonance of I, the alliteration of F and the consonance of C-K, L.
Excellent rhymes and internal rhymes.
Flawless meter and fluid flow.
Bravo!
I enjoyed the phonetics in all stanzas...especially the C-K sounds in the second and the alliteration of F.
Favorite line:
Illusions form a firefly choir
Imaginative!
Love the medley of S sounds here and reading these lines aloud is YUMMY:
in flight, a symphony of light
to mystify a star-strewn night
Six stars if I had them.
Love the northern lights. This is a creative tribute.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Eloquent and masterfully penned, my friend. Superb imagery. Superb phonetics. I especially enjoyed reading the first stanza loud with the consonance and alliteration of S, the assonance of I, the alliteration of F and the consonance of C-K, L.
Excellent rhymes and internal rhymes.
Flawless meter and fluid flow.
Bravo!
I enjoyed the phonetics in all stanzas...especially the C-K sounds in the second and the alliteration of F.
Favorite line:
Illusions form a firefly choir
Imaginative!
Love the medley of S sounds here and reading these lines aloud is YUMMY:
in flight, a symphony of light
to mystify a star-strewn night
Six stars if I had them.
Love the northern lights. This is a creative tribute.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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What an affirming review, RD! Thank you so much! Tony
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:-)))))
Comment from Pam (respa)
-The image is spectacular.
-The Northern Lights are fascinating,
although I have not seen them.
-You did a good job with the rhyme,
and also told a poetic story with
excellent imagery.
-Thanks for sharing, Tony.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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-The image is spectacular.
-The Northern Lights are fascinating,
although I have not seen them.
-You did a good job with the rhyme,
and also told a poetic story with
excellent imagery.
-Thanks for sharing, Tony.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Pam. Many thanks for your kind review and the six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
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You are quite welcome, Tony.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
This is a fine poem in the Leonine rhyme pattern
Personally, I like the internal rhyme in longer lines, 12 to 16 syllables,
so that it blends a little better, though it does well in your tetrameter
Interesting mythological imagery of the northern lights
routed in the imagination and fears of olden days
The photograph matches well
Nicely done
RS
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Hello Tony,
This is a fine poem in the Leonine rhyme pattern
Personally, I like the internal rhyme in longer lines, 12 to 16 syllables,
so that it blends a little better, though it does well in your tetrameter
Interesting mythological imagery of the northern lights
routed in the imagination and fears of olden days
The photograph matches well
Nicely done
RS
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, RS. I think that you are right. Longer lines would make the pattern less obvious and invasive. I had to play about with enjambment a bit to break the monotony. All the best, Tony
Comment from Joan E.
I never knew the name for internal and end rhymes. Thank you also for sharing the striking, arctic light photograph. I enjoyed all of your rhymes, "symphony" metaphor and Norse references. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I never knew the name for internal and end rhymes. Thank you also for sharing the striking, arctic light photograph. I enjoyed all of your rhymes, "symphony" metaphor and Norse references. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Joan. Many thanks for your kind review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Thal1959
Very well done, Tony. I assumed the Leonine rhyme was merely another name for an internal rhyme. But it seems, according to the Tennyson example, that maybe it is used only in alternating lines. My poem on Pirates ahs an internal rhyme in every line. Much diversity here as you start with Vikings and end up with the Titan Kraken.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Very well done, Tony. I assumed the Leonine rhyme was merely another name for an internal rhyme. But it seems, according to the Tennyson example, that maybe it is used only in alternating lines. My poem on Pirates ahs an internal rhyme in every line. Much diversity here as you start with Vikings and end up with the Titan Kraken.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Thai. Many thanks for your kind review. Yes, I think Leonine rhyme is just a fancy name for internal rhyme. Best wishes, Tony
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You're welcome - it was my pleasure, Tony.
Comment from estory
This poem had a nice hip hop gate to it, a nice skipping tripping meter, and lots of rhyme and intra line rhyme. plenty of alliterations echo throughout. The images are interesting, lots of contrast here. You have the beauty of the light, the ugliness of the monsters, the insidious forked tongue, which I thought was a real unique image. Here, heaven seems much like earth, more like the greek and roman gods, very given to human failings. estory
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This poem had a nice hip hop gate to it, a nice skipping tripping meter, and lots of rhyme and intra line rhyme. plenty of alliterations echo throughout. The images are interesting, lots of contrast here. You have the beauty of the light, the ugliness of the monsters, the insidious forked tongue, which I thought was a real unique image. Here, heaven seems much like earth, more like the greek and roman gods, very given to human failings. estory
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, estory. Many thanks for your kind review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This was a very lovely take on the Leonine rhyme, you did a terrific job. The northern lights are so very beautiful, I love where you took them in this write. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This was a very lovely take on the Leonine rhyme, you did a terrific job. The northern lights are so very beautiful, I love where you took them in this write. ~Kerry
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Kerry. Many thanks for your kind review. Best wishes, Tony
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Your very welcome, Tony.
Comment from frierajac
This has a lot of poetic charm, with the fireflies that appear, it could be the Vikings in the Northern Mists at landfall on the Eastern Atlantic in the times of barbarians/
I wonder if there were fireflies back then. The Aurora Borealis was a source of the spirit world.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This has a lot of poetic charm, with the fireflies that appear, it could be the Vikings in the Northern Mists at landfall on the Eastern Atlantic in the times of barbarians/
I wonder if there were fireflies back then. The Aurora Borealis was a source of the spirit world.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Glad you enjoyed it, Carolyn. Many thanks for your kind review. Best wishes, Tony
