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To, a Boy and a Girl

seasons of love (a contest entry)

14 total reviews 
Comment from victortouche
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Just an epitome of understanding displayed by author.

An emotional rollercoaster/blockbuster.

If humanity could contain such compassion,
why is it so seldom displayed?

Brought a tear to my eye.

Outstanding.

victortouche

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
    Thank you so very much, my friend. I am so glad you enjoyed it. I greatly appreciate your glowing 6 star review:)))
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
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I like the quote in the artwork: 'Trying to forget someone you love is like trying to remember someone you never met.'
This poem is deep in content.
I can visualize the feelings.
It reminds me of myself. I was with my two sons dads for 14 years, and he was a branch. I thought he had my back, but he left me as soon as the tough got going.
I especially like the video you posted at the end. It gives good advice. While going through my depression phase, I often had to rely on TV for a time of laughter. I took to Bishop T.D. Jakes, Tyler Perry and Ellen Degeneres. When I was down and out Tyler Perry's movies and plays always cheered me up, but they gave helpful advice, too. That advice had carried me a long way.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
    Thank you so very much, Nicole. I appreciate you sharing that story with me too:)))
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Yeah, it's often been said, "We always hurt the ones we love."
I wonder why that is? You would think it would be the other way around, wouldn't you?
**Sigh...**
Nice rhyming all throughout your contest entry, Anonymous Poet.
You seems to have written this poetic proclamation portraying love and loss from both the male and female perspective.
Hence, the pink and blue font.
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 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
    Hmmm... You are right about that, it should be the other way around. My opinion, we tend to keep more company (time) with our loved ones then, just a friend or enemy for that matter; so they're not in our presence to hurt. Also, the fact, you're much closer to loved ones to vent feelings and such, and we also in subconscious know they are more forgivable. Crazy, huh? And yes, it was a boy and a girl, I had in mind, my daughter and her idiot boyfriend. lol Thanks so much, hey, there was a kinda funny video attached, was it there? some say it was, some say it is not, very strange.
reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Jul-2017
    No, there was no video there that I saw.
    Regardless of that you're very welcome. :)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
    Strange, some were able to see and some could not, Maybe cause it was off of facebook, huh- I just switched it from utube instead, maybe it will be there now. Thank you for letting me know.
reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Jul-2017
    You're welcome. :)
reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Jul-2017
    Yes, the Tyler Perry video is there now...
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
    oh, okay, Thanks:))
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Losing someone you love can become an infatuation and build in the mind out of all proportion into something that it never was in the first place, lost love can truly steal your soul and the rejection can be over whelming, poignant words here in your poem, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
    Thank you so very much. Dolly.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem. Young boy makes too quickly promises and later see he cannot commit on his promises. A young girl believes with her whole heart and ends up broken hearted.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
    Thank you, Sandra, It is all part of growing up, sad but, true:))
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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Hello Poet. Ut Oh someone is in trouble here! The first section tells of the pain in losing a love. The second section says oh well I'm done with the bs and need to break free and find my prince. Wonder how many frogs ya have to kiss to find this mythical prince. Well written with a great message. Boys beware! Good luck. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
    LOL, I don't know, I'm looking for my frog, lol. Seriously though, My daughter's boyfriend had just broken up with her, after I got off the phone with her. This contest popped up. lol So I wrote it. The video underneath is very funny too, did you see it, some say they see it others do not. Strange, just wondering if it should up. Thanks, my friend.
Comment from marybell1
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I enjoyed reading your "Emotional Dependency" Poem "To, a Boy to a Girl". It sounded like sound advice. You rhymed it well. Just one question, in line 10 'Should'. Is this the word you meant to use?
All the best in the contest.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
    Thank you so very much, Marybell. I appreciate it. And yes, I meant "Should" meaning he should have given the sun:))) metaphorical.
reply by marybell1 on 21-Jul-2017
    Just keeping you on your toes. It is better for you to review than to be removed because of an error.
    All the best.
    Sincerely
    Marybell1.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
    lol, well that's for sure, Thanks:))
reply by marybell1 on 22-Jul-2017
    You are most welcome.
    Marybell1.
Comment from Irish Rain
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I like how you've colored this to tell the two sides of the story. They were just not a match, regardless of what was given, taken, lost. We all need to love ourselves so much, that when someone comes along who loves us equally, that's the one. Loved this, blessings...

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
    Thank you so very much, I appreciate it.
Comment from junglefighter
Exceptional
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A commendably written entry for the Emotional Dependency Contest. I noticed the Author dedicated it to "My Daughter!" The Artwork is awesome, and the message
written upon it, "Trying to forget someone you love is like trying to remember someone you never met," makes my heart go bump. The message is "crystal clear," and I am confident that the Author's daughter appreciates it. A most definite "Six
Stars" here.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
    Thank you so very much for your lovely comments and beautiful stars. I most appreciate it. Yes, It just so happened the morning this contest came out, my daughter had called me, that her boyfriend had left after a few years, she was devastated.
reply by junglefighter on 19-Jul-2017
    Thank you, "For being there for her," when she needed you most.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
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All in all, this is a good poem with strong rhymes and an even rhythm, but there are a few corrections to make:

Like Winters ice, you've become frigid and cold- Winter's
Should of given the Sun, warmth of love till your old- Should have given ...you're old
Spring has sprung, must let go, and over come- overcome
Dance underneath the summers sun- summer's or summer

Good luck in your contest. :) Nancy

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
    Thank you so very much, Nancy. I just went and did the edit. I appreciate that more than you know:))