Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Waves, I know what that is like...to just know by looking at some one what they are thinking...I knew everything my husband was thinking without him saying a word...LOL...you know it's love when you take the time to learn special things about some one...sigh...very nicely written you...love your poem...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Thanks again Linda you comments are always appreciated.

dip

reply by l.raven on 20-Jul-2017

so welcome you...xxoo love

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

This is well written and so romantic my friend sometimes words rent the body language says it all I enjoyed sorry I'm behind again regards Jill

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

Thanks as always jill for your comments.

dip

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Dr D,
I enjoyed your love poem. You did a great job with the rhyme & flow. You are right. When 2 people are in love words do not need to be spoken all of the time. A look, a touch, or anything of the like speak loudly. Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017

Thankyou so much Jan much appreciated as always.

dip

Comment from emptypage

Excellent

Hey Dip.

"I'm at your beckon call" should be "I'm at your beck and call."

You are quite a romantic, it seems. I love your poems. Mostly for their down-in-the-dirt reality. Nice work.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017

Thankyou Empty I didn't think that sounded write beck and call works thanks again

dip

Comment from lalajovanoski

Excellent

Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written romantic poem. This has a very nice rhyming structure and it flows very soft and smooth. I love the content in this it's very sweet and meaningful. Thank you so much for sharing this. With love, Lola

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017

thank you so much Lola much appreciated.

dip

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

"I'm at your beckoning call" ... I would drop the "ing" gerund here, Dip. it makes for a much smoother read in that line...

Will yet always be vindicated ... The same applies here with the word "always..."

Nicely done...
~Deano

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017

thanks so much Dean, fixed.... always appreciate your input

dippity do da

reply by Dean Kuch on 18-Jul-2017

Dipity day!
You're welcome, mate. :)

reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017

I have just realized 'beckon cal'l is wrong as well it should be 'beck and call' according to the Collins English dictionary beckon is a verb so grammatically it would be wrong.

Dean can I ask you something about this poem?

I just had one reviewer who we both know tell me that meter was non existent in my poem I beg to differ.
I have read this aloud several times and if you establish the beat of the poem it reads fine. she told me if I am offended every time she reviews me she will stop reviewing. WTF how am I offended just because I don't agree Fk if i was offended every time you suggested something I would have fkd you off years ago haha

People are funny on this site with some very huge egos. And you have to walk on egg shells and be very tactful how you comment

dip

reply by Dean Kuch on 19-Jul-2017

I feel it has a very detectable, noticeable rhythm, Mark. And a good beat at that!

I know what you mean about "walking on eggshells" here. If I disagree with something someone says about a poem or story I've written then I'm labeled as arrogant.

Here lately I've just been telling everyone in my replies to reviews: "Thanks very much for reading!" I too am growing weary of the bullshit.
~Deano

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

I surrender, can't say much,
for though the meter is non-existent
and I find myself always looking for it when there is end rhyme,
I have to leave unspoken
my suggestions,
for the words, indeed
the heart do touch. :))

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017

are we reading the same poem here? to say the meter is non existent is a bit harsh
I will revisit a re read It reads ok when read allowed once one establishes the beat of the poem like all my 'unmetered' work lol

thanks as always Dawn

dip

reply by Dawn Munro on 18-Jul-2017

Oops - sorry, Luv - but I calls it like I sees it, and I do NOT hear a meter - do we have to do this again? I don't want you upset with me, but neither can I make things up. What I DID say, that you did not FOCUS on, was that the poem was lovely despite having no meter.

Dip - I think you meant when read "aloud", yes? Honestly, I am only trying to help. But if I am going to hurt your feelings when I give you MY perspective, I'd rather not review. I DO look for a steady rhythm when there is end rhyme, and this is not steady/even. Call it a beat if you want to, but it's all the same result. I have had much training in music, and come from a VERY musical family. My father was a professional musician, my mother and brother extraordinary pianists. I was the vocalist of the family, slated for the Opera Company, here, in Toronto (until I dropped out of school - yup - I was a rebel). LOL. So seriously - if I am offending you, I would rather not write a review for you. No hard feelings.

reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017

Dawn,with respect, as I have said many times before you are never offending me. It's just a poem.
As I said with meter and syllabic count I never get hung up on and if you can't see no meter or beat what so all when you read this poem well I am never going to change you. lol
I really do appreciate your wonderful poetic experience and expertise on the subject Dawn just get over this thing I am being offended. It couldn't be further from the truth.
I have read this over and over.
You are obviously seeing things that other reviewers aren't seeing and that's fine.
As usual let's just agree to disagree.
I am not losing friendships over meter lol
As I said before and I'll say it again I am never offended by critique, suggestions or advice as rhyming poetry is still a learning curve for me obviously even after 4000 poems lol
I have a style of writing that obviously annoys people but diversity and taste is the spice of life.
whats one person's trash is another's treasure.

xxdip


xxdip

reply by Dawn Munro on 19-Jul-2017

Hahahaha - okee, dokee.

Comment from Abby Wilson-hand

Exceptional

AMAZING!! THIS IS A BEAUTIFUL WRITE
YOUR WORDS ARE SO HEART FELT
SOMETIMES IT'S BETTER JUST TO SAY NOTHING AT
ALL IT'S ALL IN THE LOOKS

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017

Thanks so much Abby much appreciated as always

dip

Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

I know you said...

No words required

But I had to fill the box here LOL
Just kidding Toits

This is a beautiful love poem for your lady and how her smile lights up your life.
I agree...a great smile is important. That's why I just fucking well spent 4500 big ones on Munch and Crunch (my implants) well, one abuttment and a double tooth...you know, like conjoined twins haha

Anyway, I needed them...couldn't do the FULL smile without them...you know, the really wide flashy one?! LOL

Well NOW I can...and it feels great!

Very much enjoyed your fine poem and how a smile can just light up a heart.
Well done Toits

Px

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017

Thanks so much P I am glad you like the poem and congratulations on your falsies lol

Show us ya grille

dip

reply by closetpoetjester on 18-Jul-2017

It's on my profile page, duh!! LOL

Okay, so that was four years ago haha

It's one of my best...that's why I thrash it LOL

Comment from marybell1

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem "Unspoken Words. Your rhyming was abab all the way through except in stanza four. I don't know if you intended to have all the rhyming the same.
All the best.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017

I knew that was the case but I felt ABAB rhyme and ABCB rhyme scheme can interchange so I wasn't too fussed about it.
dip

reply by marybell1 on 19-Jul-2017

And I thought you were trying to keep me on my toes.
Sincerely
Marybell1.

reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017

that hurts after a while lol

reply by marybell1 on 19-Jul-2017

You are welcome.
Marybell1.