Deadlines
Poetry Potlatch 7/15 - Double Etheree18 total reviews
Comment from JennaG
I enjoyed reading your double Etheree tonight. Your syllable count is perfect all the way through and I like the occasional rhyme that you've used. I especially liked the way you looked at time and how it moves during different parts of our lives. When things are going well, time moves along steadily, but during difficult experiences it seems to slow and falter. This is a very well-thought-out piece and it's skillfully written. Great work! :)
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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I enjoyed reading your double Etheree tonight. Your syllable count is perfect all the way through and I like the occasional rhyme that you've used. I especially liked the way you looked at time and how it moves during different parts of our lives. When things are going well, time moves along steadily, but during difficult experiences it seems to slow and falter. This is a very well-thought-out piece and it's skillfully written. Great work! :)
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Jenna,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review. Time always becomes a reflective subject around birthdays, I think lol And I gained (or lost) depending on the perspective, another decade yesterday lol I appreciate your thoughtful comments.
Kim
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well done with your Reversed Etheree Kim on the passing of time, sands of time slipping silently by. No problems with your syllable counts. We race, we forge, we falter, great descriptions of the different aspects of passing time.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Well done with your Reversed Etheree Kim on the passing of time, sands of time slipping silently by. No problems with your syllable counts. We race, we forge, we falter, great descriptions of the different aspects of passing time.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Valda,
I'm happy that you enjoyed this one! Thanks for the awesome comments!
Kim
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
You've penned a good poem.
'Deadlines' is a great title because we all have them.
The author's notes are appreciated. Very helpful information.
Great artwork. The image shown captures the meaning of this poem. The background goes well with the picture and color of font selected.
The hourglass reminds me of life and how much time we may actually have left.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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You've penned a good poem.
'Deadlines' is a great title because we all have them.
The author's notes are appreciated. Very helpful information.
Great artwork. The image shown captures the meaning of this poem. The background goes well with the picture and color of font selected.
The hourglass reminds me of life and how much time we may actually have left.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Nicole,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your comments.
Kim
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes so many of our lives are based on time always in a hurry to get things done life to short to hang around so many deadlines I enjoyed your poem it is presented very well and reads smoothly well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Yes so many of our lives are based on time always in a hurry to get things done life to short to hang around so many deadlines I enjoyed your poem it is presented very well and reads smoothly well done regards Jill
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Jill,
I appreciate your comments on my double etheree. I'm glad that you enjoyed this selection. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Kim
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
You are missing a 7 in the top
Excellently done on the aspect of time as we slowly run out of it while getting things done.lol
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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You are missing a 7 in the top
Excellently done on the aspect of time as we slowly run out of it while getting things done.lol
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Barb,
You are a God send! :) No one else caught that!! Thanks for the alert, I edited it on my way out of town yesterday (James was driving lol) Thank you soooooo much!!!
Kim
Comment from Sasha
In our youth time is endless but as the end becomes near, every second becomes important and we wish we had paid more attention to its value as deadlines approach with speed. Awesome Etheree that gives us all something to think about. Happy birthday again, lovely entry for this challenge.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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In our youth time is endless but as the end becomes near, every second becomes important and we wish we had paid more attention to its value as deadlines approach with speed. Awesome Etheree that gives us all something to think about. Happy birthday again, lovely entry for this challenge.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much, I'm so happy that you enjoyed this one! :) Birthdays always make us think of passing time lol
Kim
Comment from BeasPeas
Time does rule our lives and your Etheree points this out--in this instance entering contests. However, sometimes the last minute entry is the most spontaneous and wins. Spontaneity is always good so we don't over-think things. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Time does rule our lives and your Etheree points this out--in this instance entering contests. However, sometimes the last minute entry is the most spontaneous and wins. Spontaneity is always good so we don't over-think things. Marilyn
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Marilyn:
This one has a lot of layers. Not just contests, but at some point our lives have deadlines, too, with all the things we want to accomplish. Birthdays always make me think about the passage of time lol
We are doing Bookend Monorhyme for Poetry Potlatch this week! :) I've just announced it! I'll be posting one shortly!
Thanks for the great comments!
Kim
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Hi Kim. I'm so excited that you will be using the Bookend Monorhyme (named by Janny) this week. Thank you. I'll look forward to reading them. I'm glad you had a nice birthday and, yes, they are a reason for introspection. Marilyn
Comment from dragonpoet
You describe the ebbing of life and the method of and reason for writing well here.
I would have been nice if you could have had the single words in the center so it would look like an hourglass. But it would work that way.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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You describe the ebbing of life and the method of and reason for writing well here.
I would have been nice if you could have had the single words in the center so it would look like an hourglass. But it would work that way.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Joan -
What a great suggestion... it wouldn't work with the Etheree form, but could be a new form altogether. Want to collaborate on a new style of "Hourglass" form? It could be excellent for reflections on the past and future with a single word pivot line in the center. I appreciate your comments!
Kim
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It could maybe work with the single word of maybe two word center being a bridge that connects both parts that if spaced could work as the last line of the first half and the first line of the second half like a puente form. I agree with the theme of the poem. Maybe if possible only having the first, middle and last line rhyme.
You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from honeytree
The art work is really
great for these words
Such is life and time marches on
everyday.
I really like what you wrote.
The clock will be ticking
on for us all.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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The art work is really
great for these words
Such is life and time marches on
everyday.
I really like what you wrote.
The clock will be ticking
on for us all.
Honey tree
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Annie,
Thank you for the wonderful gift of this exceptional review. I truly appreciate your comments.
Kim
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That is fine
Annie
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that's fine. Annie
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Etheree. Every sand grain that goes through the hour glass from the one glass to another so our lives go on without noticing. Before we know the best part of our lives are passed and we live our last days on memories of the good times.
Happy Birthday again.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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A very well-written Etheree. Every sand grain that goes through the hour glass from the one glass to another so our lives go on without noticing. Before we know the best part of our lives are passed and we live our last days on memories of the good times.
Happy Birthday again.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Sandra,
Thank you for the insightful comments! :) Birthdays always make me reflect on the passage of time. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Kim
