My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Member Dollars for You"a collection of my poetry
76 total reviews
Comment from marybell1
I did enjoy reading your senryu "Don't Cheat Me". All your lines and syllables were correct for this genre. As for your comments, thankfully I am nor one of those you mentioned. I do count every syllable and check lines for rhyme. Unfortunately I have reviewed some poems with "Recognised" and "All Time Best " only to have several errors. My main beef is that 'near rhymes' and the adding of an S (although this alters the rhyming) seems to be acceptable. I did mention the S issue once but it went unheeded.
All the best in your endeavours.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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I did enjoy reading your senryu "Don't Cheat Me". All your lines and syllables were correct for this genre. As for your comments, thankfully I am nor one of those you mentioned. I do count every syllable and check lines for rhyme. Unfortunately I have reviewed some poems with "Recognised" and "All Time Best " only to have several errors. My main beef is that 'near rhymes' and the adding of an S (although this alters the rhyming) seems to be acceptable. I did mention the S issue once but it went unheeded.
All the best in your endeavours.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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many poets do not care to hear about 'true rhyme' or not adding 's' or thinking that all words ending in 'ing' do not rhyme!
thank you for your thoughtful and honest review
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You are most welcome.
'Marybell1.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Ah, a well written senryu poem that reveals your heart's desire. ;-D. Excellent use of artwork. So true, we all want honest critiques, but I think some members feel they are not qualified, and others are afraid of backlash if they give less than a five, and lots of times a piece is perfectly fine (like this one), and there's just nothing to pick on.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Ah, a well written senryu poem that reveals your heart's desire. ;-D. Excellent use of artwork. So true, we all want honest critiques, but I think some members feel they are not qualified, and others are afraid of backlash if they give less than a five, and lots of times a piece is perfectly fine (like this one), and there's just nothing to pick on.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
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You're welcome
Comment from write hand blue
You talk about the ideal review that we all like to receive. Unfortunately we are not all experts and it would be misleading for some of us to recommend technical adjustments to the writing. Kind of like the blind leading the blind.
My review is.. Your picture is appropriate with the animated stars. You indicate in an unusual fashion your desire for more than pretty words. I can only write these words that may not be pretty. And your true worth in my opinion is five stars. LOL
~Mel~
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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You talk about the ideal review that we all like to receive. Unfortunately we are not all experts and it would be misleading for some of us to recommend technical adjustments to the writing. Kind of like the blind leading the blind.
My review is.. Your picture is appropriate with the animated stars. You indicate in an unusual fashion your desire for more than pretty words. I can only write these words that may not be pretty. And your true worth in my opinion is five stars. LOL
~Mel~
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you for your thoughts and constructive review
Comment from Ben Colder
I am glad you posted this info. I never knew the difference until now. Very helpful. I must try someday. Normally, I look for wording and the strength of each syllable to flavor the poem. I do hope you get qualified reviews that will be helpful.
You may keep your money, but I can not stop the way it is granted. I did learn something from it.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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I am glad you posted this info. I never knew the difference until now. Very helpful. I must try someday. Normally, I look for wording and the strength of each syllable to flavor the poem. I do hope you get qualified reviews that will be helpful.
You may keep your money, but I can not stop the way it is granted. I did learn something from it.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
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thank you for your review
Comment from Lilol
Nice senryu author. This is spot on. But I think that you should focus on the human nature like it says a senryu is. Or you should name the poem as desire or impatience and replace member dollars with something else and also "reviews" it with the word opinion.
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Nice senryu author. This is spot on. But I think that you should focus on the human nature like it says a senryu is. Or you should name the poem as desire or impatience and replace member dollars with something else and also "reviews" it with the word opinion.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from djeckert
I'm glad that someone is putting aspotlight on this issue, that hasalways bugged me. I wrote a small thing once trying to point it out too. Bless you,... to tell you your true worth as your poem asks...You are fearfully and wonderfully made ( psalm 139).
Here is my little old write:
Shooting blanks with your silencer?
Shoot!
Those who may be wielding a pre-loaded, unpointed, semi-automatic review gun to "amplify" THEIR writing voice, might be unfairly silencing another's.
Just a thought....
.....BANG! (lol)
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I'm glad that someone is putting aspotlight on this issue, that hasalways bugged me. I wrote a small thing once trying to point it out too. Bless you,... to tell you your true worth as your poem asks...You are fearfully and wonderfully made ( psalm 139).
Here is my little old write:
Shooting blanks with your silencer?
Shoot!
Those who may be wielding a pre-loaded, unpointed, semi-automatic review gun to "amplify" THEIR writing voice, might be unfairly silencing another's.
Just a thought....
.....BANG! (lol)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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good point. thank you
Comment from Thal1959
Alright... you're a bum and I should give this one star! (Just kidding.) Actually I was disappointed when I first read the contest prompt, which I thought would be a good idea for an essay. When I read it wanted a Senryu, I was disappointed. A good essay about the subject could have served to guide the "newbies" along as they begin to review.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Alright... you're a bum and I should give this one star! (Just kidding.) Actually I was disappointed when I first read the contest prompt, which I thought would be a good idea for an essay. When I read it wanted a Senryu, I was disappointed. A good essay about the subject could have served to guide the "newbies" along as they begin to review.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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thank you for not giving me one star
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You're welcome - it was my pleasure.
Comment from Aussie
I found your poetry/philosophy true. I have been reviewing for eight years. Majority may I say? Review for the money. On the other hand, many, many writers have no idea how to write a review through lack of knowing what a poem/script/book should offer in terms of writing well. Why? Because many folks have no idea how to write a poem, they started on the site for a hobby. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I found your poetry/philosophy true. I have been reviewing for eight years. Majority may I say? Review for the money. On the other hand, many, many writers have no idea how to write a review through lack of knowing what a poem/script/book should offer in terms of writing well. Why? Because many folks have no idea how to write a poem, they started on the site for a hobby. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Good points. Thank you
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Well okay, I will not cheat you, you are scary and intimidating, lol. For what it is worth, I do like your Senryu. Your dazzling stars, do make me feel a bit dizzy though:)) ~Kerry
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Well okay, I will not cheat you, you are scary and intimidating, lol. For what it is worth, I do like your Senryu. Your dazzling stars, do make me feel a bit dizzy though:)) ~Kerry
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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tee hee thank you
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Your welcome.
Comment from TPAC
Strong statement, even though a review in my opinion has many basic interests, some I have found not based solely on proper expression in grammar. Some folks like simply the items defined in stated writes, like I like your shout out.
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Strong statement, even though a review in my opinion has many basic interests, some I have found not based solely on proper expression in grammar. Some folks like simply the items defined in stated writes, like I like your shout out.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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thank you
