My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Member Dollars for You"a collection of my poetry
76 total reviews
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Wow!
A spot on Tanka.
Who doesn't wish for constructive and honest reviews.
The image of lovely golden stars is perfect and we all covet those.
You have used word and image to draw attention to an issue which
can be frustrating to say the least.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Wow!
A spot on Tanka.
Who doesn't wish for constructive and honest reviews.
The image of lovely golden stars is perfect and we all covet those.
You have used word and image to draw attention to an issue which
can be frustrating to say the least.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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thank you so much
Comment from tfawcus
True worth? Who can be the judge of that? The link between the poet, the poem and the reader is such a fluid affair. It depends so much on interpretation and the experience which each person brings to the party. Sometimes it is enough to be read and enjoyed. To be honest, I don't rate this very highly as a poem! However, I am happy to accept $1.01 in exchange for 5 stars.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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True worth? Who can be the judge of that? The link between the poet, the poem and the reader is such a fluid affair. It depends so much on interpretation and the experience which each person brings to the party. Sometimes it is enough to be read and enjoyed. To be honest, I don't rate this very highly as a poem! However, I am happy to accept $1.01 in exchange for 5 stars.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Commentary and Philosophy Poetry in the form of 'Senryu' meeting the desired norms and depicting its theme in a straightforward way!
Laudable Attempt.
Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Commentary and Philosophy Poetry in the form of 'Senryu' meeting the desired norms and depicting its theme in a straightforward way!
Laudable Attempt.
Best of Luck!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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thank you very much
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Poet:
"I want a review" - don't we all? A reasonable opening at least it catches the eye and makes a reader want to read.
"to say more than pretty words" - most readers I believe would like to give more but ego is such a pain. When your honest we get shot down. When we give impressions it's better but still a little sketchy.
"tell me my true worth" - your true worth? Really? If you have the guts to say something how it really is then your worth is plenty. If you write just to see yourself in print then not so much!
Now to my other thoughts about this one, (well you asked) I think it is a good senryu. It follows the structure and definition well. You even managed a little satirical edge to this one. Over all I kinda like it. I think these short pieces are difficult at best and you did this one well. Good luck in your contest. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Hello Poet:
"I want a review" - don't we all? A reasonable opening at least it catches the eye and makes a reader want to read.
"to say more than pretty words" - most readers I believe would like to give more but ego is such a pain. When your honest we get shot down. When we give impressions it's better but still a little sketchy.
"tell me my true worth" - your true worth? Really? If you have the guts to say something how it really is then your worth is plenty. If you write just to see yourself in print then not so much!
Now to my other thoughts about this one, (well you asked) I think it is a good senryu. It follows the structure and definition well. You even managed a little satirical edge to this one. Over all I kinda like it. I think these short pieces are difficult at best and you did this one well. Good luck in your contest. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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thank you
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so I gather you weren't exactly writing anything but fiction. Ok then, for that it is good. You had me. Good luck
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A reviewer can only give constructive criticism if they feel they have the knowledge to do so, or that is what I think. I Know some people do go for the bucks but I think most of us read and review to learn. I'm not adept at this form so can't review on that, what is your true worth, only you can say. So have I done this for the 1.01 - no - more because of the subject.
cheers.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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A reviewer can only give constructive criticism if they feel they have the knowledge to do so, or that is what I think. I Know some people do go for the bucks but I think most of us read and review to learn. I'm not adept at this form so can't review on that, what is your true worth, only you can say. So have I done this for the 1.01 - no - more because of the subject.
cheers.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from JW
I found this poem quite interesting since it talks about an issue I've have had qualms about for years. Yet, nothing has changed.
While some may want a review like you are asking for, many want just complimentary words regardless if they are true or not.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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I found this poem quite interesting since it talks about an issue I've have had qualms about for years. Yet, nothing has changed.
While some may want a review like you are asking for, many want just complimentary words regardless if they are true or not.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Boogienights
This is really funny, I love the stars. I'm new to fan story and try my best to critique others work. The truth is though, I don't know much about structure, meter or form when it comes to poetry. I simply know what I like and what makes me happy. This is the feedback I give. Hopefully I'll learn as I go.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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This is really funny, I love the stars. I'm new to fan story and try my best to critique others work. The truth is though, I don't know much about structure, meter or form when it comes to poetry. I simply know what I like and what makes me happy. This is the feedback I give. Hopefully I'll learn as I go.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Very good. I also entered this contest. I got the worst reviews ever. 48 reads and 14 reviews??? That's weird They should give an award at the end of the year for the laziest reviewer.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Very good. I also entered this contest. I got the worst reviews ever. 48 reads and 14 reviews??? That's weird They should give an award at the end of the year for the laziest reviewer.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Irish Rain
A wonderful entry for this contest, a great picture too. I try to point out spelling mistakes when I see them, but as my punctuation usually needs help, I'm not much help to others. Good luck, blessings...
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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A wonderful entry for this contest, a great picture too. I try to point out spelling mistakes when I see them, but as my punctuation usually needs help, I'm not much help to others. Good luck, blessings...
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author
I do like your last line just tell me my true worth
not just telling me it's a pretty poem.
good entry for this contest
Gert
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hello author
I do like your last line just tell me my true worth
not just telling me it's a pretty poem.
good entry for this contest
Gert
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you
